Folklore: Carrying a Corpse Across the Sea at the Beginning

The writing power is okay. It's just too messy. If you have an outline, write it step by step. The writing is clearly written like a divine book. Now it's all about attracting readers based on genre. But there is no viscosity at all. I really can't keep people here.

I really like protagonists with positive energy, but so far, I personally feel that there are two points that need to be improved: First, the protagonist's goal is not clearly stated. Is it to save the common people or just to have peace of mind and play in the world? Second, what are the means to achieve the goal? The main thing is to improve your strength. I have only been in that world for a few days and you have become the leader of several forces. I think the main thing is to run the power. I don't train my own subordinates. I am being bossed around by someone who wears the title of chief rudder or holy king. Once their boss speaks, how many of these people can stand with the protagonist?

Very good, but how do you plan to write it later? Don't tell you that you plan to take this path now. You can't afford it. Let's not say whether the book will be sealed. This kind of world where personal power belongs to oneself, even Zhu Yuanzhang, you can't figure it out. If you don't go, don't screen readers. You have such a big opinion on the emperor.

This mess is already fifty chapters long and the main character is still from the west and the east.

The writing style is not bad, but what is the theme of this book? After reading more than 40 chapters, I didn't know what to write. I said it was a local weirdo, so I wrote a little bit here and there. Then I wanted to rebel all day long, saying it was a rebellion without any rebellious actions. First of all, it didn't have its own revolutionary thoughts and its own main story. It still wandered around the city for more than 40 chapters and achieved nothing. The current story is: Xiaodao will cause trouble everywhere, and the protagonist will inexplicably save people everywhere all day long. I don't look down on the knife, it's just rubbish

I have caught up with the latest chapter. To be fair, the writing and setting are all excellent. It is true that the plot is not very good, but the core plot is a matter of opinion or cliche. The protagonist, the time traveler, was in a modern world without demons before time travel, but it would be boring to try to use the fantasy world to fit the real world view.

The front is fine, but what is the idea of ​​​​forcibly binding it to Xiaodaohui?

There is no main line. It's too confusing.

The main plot is not clear. Write an outline to determine whether the main plot is rebellion or immortality.

Time travel? Demonic chaos? No system dad? ! Damn, how can you play in this kind of world without hanging up? My name is Lin Mu. When I woke up, I appeared on this boundless black sea, and there was only a broken bamboo raft and a lamp beside me. Fusing the memories of the original owner, I learned that I was in an era when the country was destroyed, the warlords were fighting, and various monsters and ghosts appeared frequently. I was originally a fisherman, but my boat was robbed by a gangster named Lin Tianhao, leaving me with only a broken bamboo raft. Damn, I was a fisherman in my last life, will I still be a fisherman in this life? Then didn't I travel through time in vain? ! The most urgent thing is, if I want to survive, I must get back to shore first. At this moment, I suddenly discovered that there was a ship ahead! Just as I rowed hard, the closer I got, the more familiar the boat looked... Wait... I'm kidding, isn't this my boat? ! But there seemed to be no one on the boat. I tried to call Lin Tianhao, but there was no response. Just as I was about to get closer, I saw some blood, which made me feel uneasy. I made a quick decision and turned around immediately. It's better to return to the shore first, the situation on this ship seems to be more dangerous! In this kind of world, if you feel something is wrong, just run away! However, at this time, the bamboo raft under my feet broke due to being eaten by insects, and I fell into the sea! I tried to struggle, but a huge wave of blood swallowed me up. I feel like I am entangled in countless ancient pages, with strange talismans engraved on them, so sinister and strange! Just when I was about to lose consciousness, I saw three ancient seal scripts glowing with blood - [Jushen Seal Script]. Furthermore, I can feel that this is my help. The Taoist methods recorded in the [Jushen Rui] can be used by me to kill demons and demons, restrain gods and control ghosts! Finally waiting for you, my golden finger is coming! ———— {"TopicId":"995701360950116352","TopicName":"Amway Famous Scene"}

This book is so enjoyable. I will give you a monthly pass regardless of whether it sucks or not. I hope to become a platinum master soon.

It comes too easily and will not be cherished

I wonder what the protagonist is thinking😵‍💫? Is it secretly that the development is not good?

What is the protagonist doing, saving people? Who are you saving?

The writing is pretty good, but it feels a bit messy.

There is something, but the protagonist was a bit useless in the early stage.

I finished reading it in one day, and overall it's a good write-up. Let's put them on the list of the gods. If you don't agree, let them be included in the list.

The first part of the story was actually okay, with setting and writing style, but the rhythm soon became problematic. The protagonist's strength improves so quickly, and he can live a comfortable life with just a little development time, so he has to be the one who stands out. The plot of "Little Knife Club" was really written by the author himself. The emotional foreshadowing was not at all in place, and the protagonist's consciousness was not reflected, just like losing his mind.