Naruto: the System Is Advanced, Xiaonan Is Only Nine Years Old?

There is no point in being apprenticed to Jiraiya. He just teaches a C-level ninjutsu. And he just talks big words. Thousands of people died under his hands, and he still talks about peace and so on.

The question is, how did you, an orphan, know about the tailed beast jade? Jiraiya saw something was wrong with you and couldn't interrogate you.

To be honest, we already have a system, so why do we have to become Jiraiya's disciple? I don't understand at all, what's so good about being a perverted peeping tom? If it's the immortal mode, why can't you create your own immortal mode? You have to control the three holy places. It's so difficult for the entire human race. In this case, it's better not to have a system. If Nagato and the others had no place to learn their skills and had to learn from Jiraiya, then why not take a look at what Jiraiya taught them. I feel that they are self-taught at night, and if it is to get started as a ninja, it is completely unnecessary. After all, what is the pig's trotter system for?

Whether it was how the protagonist knew about the tailed beast as an orphan, or the setting of the magnetic escape, it was not very reasonable. First of all, the magnetic escape, which can be regarded as the unique blood successor of the sand ninja, was used directly in front of Jiraiya and Minato, but there was no problem, it looked very weird, and it felt like it did not fit the image of an orphan like you.

When writing a Naruto fanfic, do you have to be friends with the main characters? The protagonist of this book is the enemy of Konoha, so what are you going to do when you become a disciple of Jiraiya and then go to Konoha to befriend Minato Kakashi?

Why don't you use iron sand for Magnetic Release? A good Magnetic Release uses sand release. Even if you don't have enough chakra, you can mix sand with iron. Iron is hard and fast. Also, if you can't develop your Magnetic Release, you might as well hold an electromagnetic gun.

It can be seen from the fourth generation Raikage's lack of brains that they don't care anymore, but they still show off their face and forcefully create conflicts? The plot is blunt and brainless

The protagonist still dances so much when he is so weak. He did not trick himself and the Akatsuki trio to death. I can only say that the protagonist's aura is too powerful.

Why should we save Hatake Mushimao? ? ? The protagonist is not from Konoha. She is too holy and almost caused Konan to die.

Uchiha Hikari can be dug out and recruited into the Akatsuki organization

Anyway, it's pretty good for a novice, but the plot needs to be changed.