Traveling Through the Red Mansion, I Still Have a Psychic Gem!

In the first book, there were indeed many things that were not written well. If you don't like anything, you can leave more comments. Let the author know where the writing is not good, and I will try my best to optimize and improve it. The author writes seriously and seriously, everyone can read it happily. I will read every comment. Thanks again to friends who have read and commented!

Is Jia Baoyu a famous name or a nickname? It must be a nickname

Has the protagonist never made any achievements in civil or military affairs in the future?

After reading the release announcement, it said that the protagonist was not of Jia family blood, and there was foreshadowing in front of it. I really didn't see it. It was my problem, but there was one point. How should Mrs. Xing solve this? It looks like Jia She was born, so he surrounded the whole yard to get a piece of fake jade. Who changed it? What would he do in his place? Is this a bit cruel to Mrs. Xing? In the original book, she is stupid and unlikable, but what I see in this book is the image of a mother who has a low IQ but always protects her children. There is also the problem of Lin Daiyu. If you want to say that she is a eldest wife and is marrying another concubine, it is still possible for her to accept it, but if you want to say that she is a concubine, that is impossible.

I saw a flower that Mrs. King of France played with, but the jade card was not taken out.

In feudal society, the phenomenon of being born with a jade in one's mouth was not a bad thing, but if

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Hey, isn't this book cut? Why is it poisoned again? I saw it was removed from the bookshelf without updating for a few days.

There was an idle young man who was ignorant but liked to pretend to be an educated man. One day he put a pen in his jacket pocket and went out. He heard others talking about him, saying that he might be a college student. He was very happy to hear this. The next day I put two pens in and went out. I heard others talking about him and said he might be a writer, which made me even happier. ... A few days later, the pockets of my jacket were filled with pens. When everyone took a look, it turned out to be a pen repairer...

Does the author really have good intentions? For example, how old is the protagonist now? Can you compete with Jia Zhen in the ring? Also, Sister-in-law You and Wang Xifeng? ? What kind of title is this? How strange it seems to me. The former calls her sister-in-law and the latter calls her by her first name? ? Don't blame me for being picky, but the details look a bit weird.

It's about daddy, and the protagonist also gives Lin Daiyu a word? I vomited

The writing is very good and novel. I just started reading it and I really like Xiao Jia's quirky character. Come on, author, I'll give you the monthly pass.

Why give up? It's really a pity that it's not easy to find a suitable Red Mansions book 😭

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Okay, not too demanding, author, one update every day 🙂

Subscribe to books, don't want to waste money reading retarded plots for children

The protagonist lived two lives, but ended up falling in love with a 7 or 8-year-old female doll. No matter how you say it, it's outrageous.

Are you a eunuch? He's a bitch!

I found that the Red Mansions are basically written as official novels in the end. This is understandable after all, no one has Cao Xueqin's talent and can't write that flavor, but it is boring to write the same thing thousands of times. It would be more interesting to find a new way to write about cultivating immortals and catching ghosts in the world of Dream of Red Mansions. After all, there are gods in the original work.

Please read it!

Don't read it, he's writing a new book

It's best to read a book called The Red Mansion, it's so relaxing

The logic of the whole book is self-consistent in the early stage. When there is no momentum, you can only continue to take advantage of the momentum. However, in the later stage, there are many places where the logic is contradictory. It feels that the later stage and the early stage were not written by the same person, and the outline does not match 1. On the one hand, the protagonist is described as having a strong brain and strong force. After finding clues that someone is assassinating him, he decisively sends someone to deal with it. He takes the opportunity to provoke the conflict between the two martial arts factions, and then he works to resolve the conflict and becomes a middleman acceptable to both parties. However, on the other hand, the protagonist is described as a sycophantic figure like Wei Xiaobao, constantly jumping around among the three parties. In front of the core figures of all parties, he said that he wanted to change jobs, and then everyone said, yes, yes, I believe in you unconditionally and will continue to use you. Even at the end of the story, the protagonist was not highlighted in writing or military affairs or current affairs and economics. Talents in aspects 2. Many plots deliberately create contradictions and oppositions, and even make other characters smart for the sake of conflicts. The most typical example is that when the protagonist has shown his holy family and power in many aspects, various people in the mansion still share the Holy Communion for the sake of so-called private property when the protagonist has not lost power. The extended family in feudal society did bind the clan members with filial piety and family rules, but those with power were the ones who made the rules and received exemptions. No one is a fool. When they see the emperor using you, they think of using the secret means in the back house to restrain and force the powerful in the front yard. 3. The author has written a lot, but you will find that after reading so many chapters, it is dull and there are many details that can be expanded upon (such as how to cultivate your own intelligence organization and power, how to manage your own money bag, and how to balance the forces among all parties), and other plots, such as the protagonist preparing to take the exam, can be covered in one or two chapters, instead of seven or eight chapters just looking at the topic of preparing for the exam. The world is vast and there is a lot to do. If you want to write an alternate history novel, the breadth and depth of the plot must be there. Even some clues and foreshadowing are necessary. 4. Finally, the author should be done with it, so everyone can stop wasting money.