When the Empress Comes Out of Seclusion, She Will Ask, Disciple, Have You Not Made a Breakthrough?

I may have been discouraged at the beginning, but after a patient look, it's actually pretty good, and it's a good one. It's a movie that has many female protagonists, but with this kind of background, I don't care. Anyway, I didn't give the protagonist any character design.

Change it to "Disciple, don't overtake me!" If it's not popular, I'll eat sh

What is the master doing alive if he only thinks about dragging down his apprentice? Let him be killed.

Female author? None of the female characters designed are likeable.

The rebirth and transformation of the Immortal Emperor requires the guidance of a disciple in the Qi training period in order to advance from becoming a god to Hedao! Are you, the Immortal Emperor, so lonely? I thought the protagonist's point was that she had developed some magical power. She didn't level up because she was greedy for the mortal world and was too lazy to advance. Unexpectedly, it turned out that she didn't have enough cultivation knowledge! ! ! Immortal Emperor! Become a god! Shenghedao! Not enough insights! ! !

You must design some unpleasant characters😅

I said it tasted weirder the more I looked at it. I fell asleep immediately after getting started. Just three sentences to set the stage. Why don't we men just have sex if we have holes? This is naked slander. Would you like to watch male videos by yourself when you have time? No matter how bad the male protagonist is, he still picks people, right?

I agree with the writing style, the protagonist's image is also relatively full, and the plot twists are smooth. Basically, it is a passing grade However, the first half sets off the image of dissipation, and it is a place where all comers are entertained and drunk. When the protagonist's master peeked at him, he slept with more than 100 girls in three months Now, I wrote a scene of a door-to-door marriage proposal, and I swore to be loyal to one person, and suddenly I became a single female lead. I can't handle it. Isn't this both appropriate and established? And first of all, you have a player background, and the key element must be to collect various cards, SSR. Secondly, although the emotional scene is very long, the protagonist has never been single-minded and affectionate, and there is no precise turning point of events. Let the protagonist choose a single female protagonist, I don't care if this book is written about martial arts and battles in general. It is mainly regarded as a daily routine. The daily interaction between the protagonist and the surrounding people is more interesting. Now the single female protagonist swears to be published...😥

It's boring, what's the use of this master?

Man, I feel that the results of this book are not very satisfactory Will it be relevant? I don't dare to look at it.

One thing to say, the setting of this female master is indeed a bit unpleasant. I suggest you learn from Wang Wu and his disciple Wang Lu who lived in Lingjian Mountain in the past. This is how they feel now, nonsensical and irresponsible. There are hundreds of millions of sinkholes.

After seeing the marriage and this master, I no longer have the desire to pursue it. I wrote that the male protagonist was a scumbag and made a heavenly vow to get married.

Do you, the authors, think that "Wei Wu's legacy" is specifically meant to be broken👟? Others, Boss Cao, do it because "the beautiful woman he likes is a wife", not because he is specifically looking for worn-out shoes. It's not about getting married to someone else, okay?

It would be better to keep only the second half of the introduction to make it more attractive. As soon as I saw the first half of the introduction, I thought it was a cliché and witty white text. I felt that if I read it, I would either be shocked or read.

Why did you write an introduction? I am the Female Immortal Emperor. You will not directly write about the Immortal Emperor who rules over the Immortal World. When writing a book, you need to understand the characters. Although I haven't read your book yet.

Think about your introduction and book title, and then think about what the readers attracted by these want to read The last few chapters have obviously been very exciting 😅

Brother, you and I have the same cover of "Big Flame Little Detective"~😁😁😁

If this master were replaced by a different protagonist, he would be able to have 3 chapters of Foundation Building, 10 chapters of Golden Elixir, and 50 chapters of Starting Nascent Soul. The protagonist's understanding is so great that Chun Chun was dragged down by the useless master. This female author wrote it very well.

Really good, suitable for anime adaptation

{"NickName":"Book Friends 202102011612170005","UserId":213188710} Boss, take the woman you fucked with, don't let it go.

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down😁

The plot is well written, but there is a problem with the three concepts. Anyone who comes will be fucked directly.

The writing was really good at the beginning, but from the beginning it felt like it was completely broken and the decline was severe. Another problem is that the outline is not good. It is actually better to write about the harem with a human being (the male protagonist) as the core, whether it is Tu Fang or Zhen Zhu, so as to facilitate the advancement of the plot, otherwise it will directly become a running account after the ending. The description of the heroine Zhong Yi is also much worse after the ending, and she is a pure accessory. It's okay to write a single female protagonist, but it's best to write it based on a common goal that everyone must achieve by any means, such as becoming an immortal. In the Xiuxian and Taifu series, the conflicts are not intensified enough, and the single female protagonist makes it difficult to advance the plot, which ends in an anticlimax. It's a waste of the author's writing talent. If I can think of a better outline and maintain the writing level before starting the project, I feel that it can still be accomplished. I hope the author will not give up writing.