She's Married to a Big Star, Who Wouldn't Want to Lie Down?

You are all immortal cultivators, so what about Liu Yifei, she is just a mortal. Just don't let her chase after you. What are you licking? Cultivation to immortality is just for immortality. Immortality treats mortals and everything is just a passing cloud. It is necessary to be entangled. Since you choose the character of a cultivator, it must be in line with the cognition of a cultivator, which is ethereal and mysterious, and has a firm mind. Weidao can just help his friends at the same time, play in the world, and pursue immortality. This is the fate of cultivators

This one is really nice.

I have only read the first three chapters to be honest, it is very popular, especially after the panel came out, it reminded me of the novels about urban immortals and miracle doctors more than ten years ago. I suggest that you should write about immortals or doctors. Don't put the two together, because it is very unfriendly to old readers (just think of me as farting), and the heroine is ignored. Don't have the same pronunciation with real celebrities. There are good and bad homophones. I think the disadvantages are greater. Too many people write this way To sum up, this subject has been written badly. It's okay to make a living. Don't think about anything else unless your subsequent writing is wonderful The above is just a personal opinion

Sissi

If you have a single heroine, I suggest you don't write about your ex-girlfriend. If you have a harem, don't write it as affectionately.

Urban life and systematic writing really don't match. The first three chapters express nothing and are a mess. I don't know what to express, business is not business, medicine is not medicine, entertainment is not entertainment. The protagonist's character was not expressed, and the heroine only appeared for a moment, and then disappeared for several chapters. Why was the fake marriage not mentioned at all? The author seems to have his own rhythm, but is too obsessed with his own rhythm. Self-pleasure is a big taboo in online writing. It's a good thing that you have a rhythm, but we can't bring it in.

If you don't have enough social experience, I suggest you read other people's Chinese medicine novels.

In the male channel city, as long as there is a single female protagonist, it is a licking dog

Let's put it this way, it would be strange if someone reads what you write like this.

I have written so many chapters and this is it. No wonder no one has read it. The whole article does not highlight the main line. Those who want to read about immortality, Chinese medicine, and relationships are not satisfied, and it is not pleasing to everyone. The heroine has also been mirrored by a reality star and still wants to have pure love? Either you have to completely create a role, otherwise everyone knows that it is difficult to fill in the entertainment industry.

I was also convinced. After waiting for so long for a new book, I had no interest in reading it just because of its title and introduction. It didn't cover Chinese medicine but got entangled with some actors and actresses, which was completely exploiting its weaknesses and avoiding its strengths. Let me give you a suggestion. Traditional Chinese medicine must be tied to the system to make it look good. The system you wrote in your last book was extremely unreasonable. It's useless. You just want to set up a traditional Chinese medicine inheritance base. The most taboo in Internet articles is that lofty goals cannot be achieved for a long time, which makes people unhappy. I suggest I suggest you watch "The Dragon Is Dead" and see how their system issues tasks. One link follows another and the other echoes back and forth. You can combine this routine with Chinese medicine and figure out the hidden lines and foreshadowings. Just listen to me and I'm sure you will be popular!

The name of the 120,000-word book was changed 8 times

I saw your post asking experts to diagnose your book, so I took a look. I also wrote a book in the past, but then I stopped. Now I can look at your book from the perspective of both the author and the reader. Of course he is not a master.        ，，，，，，                                                                                                                                                                                                             will be willed will be taken into account. Don't fantasize about eating a fat man in one bite. I read your book and I think it's okay. The plot is good and the writing is excellent. I can write more.        ，，， Happy writing!

He has an awkward personality and is not lovable. He is considered a drug addict.

I recommend books every day. I think I've read your account and I think it's pretty good. Unfortunately, I didn't stick to it.

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Three hours after the new chapter was released at nearly 5 o'clock yesterday afternoon, I checked the number of people who are following it. I am the 70th person. This number of people is actually pretty good. After all, if there are hundreds of readers, it should be eligible for publication. That also qualifies you to drink a bowl of gruel. This restored my confidence a little bit. I don't dare to have high expectations for my writing performance, because I know that my literary luck has never been good. In my opinion, the performance of writing a book is very mysterious, just like whether an actor can be popular or whether a video can be popular. Some people may laugh at me because I can't write good articles to make excuses for myself. But I think I am serious about writing books, have strict logic, reasonable structure, and good writing skills. In this case, whether the book will be popular or not really depends on some luck. Yes, I admit that there are poisonous points in my book. The novel about gaining cultivation through clear and realistic dreams is quite poisonous. Many people cannot accept this poisonous point, so they withdrew after reading this. My old book friends are unwilling to give me a recommendation vote after reading it, thinking it is not worth it. But what kind of book has no shortcomings, no shortcomings, and no poisonous points?        ，，？ What about lying to a three-year-old? But it still caught fire. Of course some people will say that its highlights are big enough, the heroine is vividly described, and the emotions are vividly described! Now many readers just do this! Eat this without any thought! Haha, this matter cannot be discussed clearly. Anyway, as long as a book is popular, it has a thousand reasons to be popular, even if it is poisonous, it is just a small flaw. I don't know if there is a halo added to this, which makes readers put on filters to see the problem. Everyone has their own ideas. And if a book is not popular, you can also find a thousand reasons why it is not popular. I am not saying this to defend myself, I just want to convince myself to stick to it. Because the impact of data during this period has made me hover on the edge of whether to cut off this book. I have repeatedly thought about whether I should cut off this book and write a new one, and whether it would be better to avoid this poisonous point. But after thinking about it, I really have no confidence that the situation will get better if I write another book. I put myself into the perspective of many popular authors and read their books, and found that each has great shortcomings and shortcomings. As long as the data is not good, you can also find a thousand reasons why it is not popular. So, this question is rather metaphysical. If your literary luck is good, whatever you write will be right; if your literary luck is bad, whatever you write will be wrong. This is the really metaphysical aspect of this world that I touched, so I wrote the dream novel that realistic dreams can bring out the idea of ​​cultivation (the poisonous point). And this poisonous point has actually been written by many people. In some books, the female protagonist appears in real life and entangles the male protagonist, etc. Some of those books are also very popular. So what can you say? So, my current thinking is very fatalistic, and I feel that this world is really metaphysical. And the cultivation plot in my book is not so much about supernatural powers, but actually more of a reflection of my own feeling that the world is really metaphysical. In the introduction content, "Xijing is Chang'an at Night" is a very metaphysical reflection point of this world.        ，，，，， When I write this, 99% of my motivation is to cheer myself up, and 1% of my motivation is to ask for some support from book friends who can still read it, so as to encourage me to write this book. After all, providing emotional value is also value. Which novel's greatest role is not to provide emotional value? Right. After all, it is a kind of value to entertain people. I find it a bit funny to say which novel has a profound ideological core. It's good enough to keep reading and entertain myself for a while, but I don't dare to pursue more.

It's really hard for the writer to come up with names for the main character and the heroine. Zhang Duan, I almost pronounced it Zhang Rui. Liu Yizhi is pronounced Liu Zhizhi.

If the writing and plot are not very good, I suggest you not write about emotional entanglements. The handling makes me want to say goodbye to you.

What the hell is confusing and incoherent?

The domineering president of the male channel falls in love with me?

That guy Chen Congxiong plays golf? Without hundreds of millions of treatment fees, I can't think of Chen Dashan's net worth.

Immortal cultivators are just a fool, not someone else's dog.

You have to put on the character card so others can see it

The rural doctor wrote well before. The book here is collected first

No, little author, why did you roll it up? It's double-open.

The writing is very nice. I'll give you a monthly pass.

Waste of time

5 Million to buy one life point is less.