The Pet-Raising Game I Ground Has Become Real!

I feel like it's a well-written book with potential. But the world framework and storyline need to be polished. There are currently many shortcomings. For example, the bad teacher at the beginning, because of a small conflict, actually made trouble during the important selection of pet eggs. It is very unreasonable and arrogant. Readers, please log her offline immediately. (Author, please don't write that her son wants to be the protagonist in a key university. This kind of unqualified villain and inexplicable conflict are really clichéd and I can't stand it.) Also, don't forget to give the egg to the protagonist. You will be held accountable for what you promised. These two can go together and it should be a small climax. The author should pay attention and write well. There are also some details. For example, the park staff said that the mini pigs are rare, but they are described as rampant in the system. This can be explained, I guess because the protagonist's game is from the future, and this is a future situation. There is also the mention that humans' initial pet beasts can only be E-level and have little blessing. This statement is problematic, because later it is said that some E-level pet beasts are very strong or have special abilities. The combat power of the pet beasts is always stronger than that of humans. Moreover, it is mentioned that there are pet beasts that can evolve and increase their level. The initial E level is not considered a shortcoming. The author must remember the basic settings well, otherwise bugs will appear in the writing process, even if it is just improper wording, it will also affect the reader's perception. I can only tell you, the author, have you written the outline and polished it carefully? Don't forget to write down some settings. There are also some side plots, such as treating the old man. Some book friends in the comment area also mentioned this plot. I think it's very boring for the protagonist to rush to treat him and dodge, and the protagonist loses his strength. It's good to write the supporting characters vividly, but don't add drama to the details. The most important thing is the structure of the world. The author must think carefully and write a good outline, otherwise it will easily collapse. What I feel is the most unreasonable at the moment is the elemental power. The pet beast actually requires the owner's elemental power to use its skills. What about the pet beasts in the wild and the contracted pet beasts on the protagonist's mobile phone? It can be changed to auxiliary pets, energy sharing, etc. Another issue is the level of the pet beast. This level is only related to the bonus the pet beast brings to its owner. So why do some weak but high-level pet beasts provide higher bonuses? Author, have you thought about the reason? If the reason is unreasonable, it will be very uncomfortable. I have a guess here, that is because pet beasts have been around for less than a hundred years (actually, I think this is not very reasonable, the time is too short, it feels like everything is in a state of exhaustion, and it is too stable now, but if it can be written well later, it will be an advantage), many things are not clear. In fact, the reason why high-level pet beasts are high-level is because they have a higher level of life, great potential, and can To become stronger through another kind of evolution (for example, an E-level pet can only evolve once, and a high-level pet can evolve multiple times). A low-level pet's life level jumps into a high-level pet, or it may be a high-level pet originally, with a low level when it was a larvae, but it will naturally become a high-level pet as it grows (I think the protagonist's No. 0 Is like this) The other is the tone of this article. I think you, the author, will post pictures of pet animals, and they should tend to be warm. I personally hope to increase the interaction with pet animals. However, the introduction mentioned that the little steamed pig died, and that the protagonist obtained a lot of precious materials (for me, this is not cool, the pet beasts evolve and become stronger), which is somewhat worrying. It may be the kind of novel that uses pet beasts as tools. From the mobile phone farm, etc., It can be seen that it has a pallu flavor, but I hope not too much, at least have feelings for some pet beasts. After all, judging from the title of the novel, these are real pet beasts. I believe that most readers of beast-controlling novels still prefer beast-controlling characters with feelings and bonds. Written at the end: This is the first time I write such a long review. Author, you must write a good outline and don't let it end unfinished (at least write more than 300 chapters). You can add more py

I think your writing is quite good, but you told me that you want to have surgery?

The protagonist buys meat to recycle gold coins in the game? Then use gold coins to buy eggs and hatch them. The hatched pets will go out to find good things. I feel like this can explode exponentially.

I feel like the author is not very good at writing pretentious paragraphs, or he could just write about warm daily life or the main plot. I was so embarrassed when I saw the old man's section and the section selling rice, and I felt so bad. The good and delicious rice was sold at a cheap price, but it was still being sold forcefully, which made me very angry.

1. I feel that the monetary system is difficult to explain in one sentence. The benchmark is like South Korea and Japan. Why not use a monetary system that readers are familiar with. Of course, if you really use the currency system we are familiar with, it will easily cost hundreds or tens of millions. I will be even more silent. 2. The rhythm is too slow, and there is no real climax until now. I can feel that the author wants to construct a situation of how people and pets live together, change, and fight, but no matter what, buddy, this is a novel. If you want to retain readers, you can't just rely on constructing the situation, but you also need to have some fun. There are not many people who can continue to watch life-like scenes, and their eyesight will be tired. 3. I didn't go into details about many things. There were many places where I thought the protagonist would find something and then it would be more exciting or stronger. Let me give you an example. For example, the mosquitoes on the campus at the beginning. I thought there would be some kind of opening when the dog was exploring. I came to a small copy of the Novice Village, and then the protagonist grew up after eating it, but nothing happened. All that can be seen so far is a strange creation from the exploration.

All I can say is that I am full of regrets, the introduction is very good, my expectations were high, but the result...

There are a lot of typos and inappropriate words. At first some readers were reminding me, but I didn't see any changes. Now no one is reminding me. . .

It feels like the weakest and most restrictive beast control system. First of all, the Zhengqi Art is just rubbish among the rubbish. It doesn't matter if the cultivation speed is slow. The key is that the upper limit of Yuan Power is strictly limited. However, Beast Control requires the Yuan Power of the Beast Master to release it. Is this Beast Control? Why do I feel like it's some kind of external equipment? If you want to become a strong man normally, your own talents, skills, and external equipment must be at the same level as the beast master. Otherwise, even the best beast master will be useless!

The recipe dares to be leaked. Where did it come from? Since there must be a better deal, is there anything else? Zhang San and Li Si, go and kidnap him back.

I personally think the image of Zero is more like Yu-Gi-Oh Snake Eyes Red