One Piece: Torturing Luo from the Start

Most of the comments praise how talented the protagonist is, how shocked the Navy is, and how the protagonist is a "Shock Man" who can become stronger by eating the Shock-Shock Fruit.

One Piece is so satisfying to write about this kind of person.

The idea that "a wise man avoids dangerous situations" feels out of place in the One Piece world. Some authors even copy communist ideology into One Piece, which is also jarring. Individual power alone prevents anyone from working 996 (9am-9pm, 6 days a week), and those with Conqueror's Haki are all stubborn and unyielding. Instead, the evil American ideology seems more fitting… If the Celestial Dragons weren't so extreme, their system would be perfect.

To be honest, I admire you for being able to write forty chapters about just one thing.

The biggest problem with this novel is its excessive padding. Battles that could be resolved in one chapter are stretched into dozens. Even the free chapters are like this; after it's officially released, nobody will subscribe. Without subscribers, you yourself won't be able to continue writing, and it'll be abandoned sooner or later.

Let me point out a few flaws. First of all, don't create your own moves that you think are cool, or use compressed sword techniques—first, they'll get boring, and second, they'll look awkward. Secondly, it would be much better if the setting allowed the protagonist to only exploit Roger's resources.

Go write martial arts novels, stop messing with One Piece.

Even the One Piece anime is so watered down. Luffy becomes a Yonko in two years, and the Birdcage takes up dozens of episodes in just a few hours. If the protagonist could surpass a Yonko without even needing to do it for two years, how can this book not be ridiculous? Putting aside whether the original work can even have a bit of Oda's imagination, whether the readers and One Piece fans can accept it is another question.

I haven't read the novel yet, but the synopsis has already shocked me. If Luffy is the protagonist's brother, how can he even talk to Roger? Roger died a long time ago, didn't he?

The main character's name always reminds me of Peppa Pig, which is a bit distracting.