Devouring the Starry Sky: the Beginning of One Punch Man

The original father died 20 years ago. The protagonist is 15 years old. Why? She was pregnant for 5 years.

Becoming a king and becoming immortal at the age of 18 is the minimum requirement for the protagonist. There is no way to do it. If you set such a big hurdle for the protagonist at the beginning, but later you cannot keep up with your progress, it will make the protagonist look like garbage, which is very unappetizing.

In the past, there was Destruction Day who learned Wing Chun, and later there was Saitama who learned to exert his strength. What a pair of crouching dragons and phoenixes who can write this kind of novel.

I wanted to see Saitama's violence, but the first few chapters were all about falling in love, and then there were more

As long as the novel contains Saitama, Superman, Saiyans, Doomsday, etc., This kind of gold-fingered novel can basically only be written in the invincible novel category. Because the readers who are attracted to this genre are attracted by this category. If you still suppress the protagonist at this time, or write a long story about the development of the protagonist, these readers who are attracted by the invincible music article will feel a sense of gap, and then dislike the protagonist.

Saitama template, 1000 years is not too much to say it will come true, I still feel it is too slow 🙂

It won't be like the genius stationed on the battlefield outside the territory again. Saitama's talent may not be able to demolish the planet in three years.

It's boring. I won't go into the shortcomings of Saitama and Good Fortune Jade Disk appearing at the same time. What is the key characteristic of Saitama? Any enemy is just one punch, no matter what fancy skills and moves you have. You have sword skills and mental skills in the early stage, but in the later stage, you still understand the law. What's the difference between following a time traveler protagonist? Since you are writing about Saitama, you don't need to worry about anything else. Just be unreasonable and strong, and you will be done with it. You can do all the work with one punch, such as clones of laws and power techniques. There are so many bells and whistles, selling the dog's head as a sheep's head, nothing new, and really boring.

If you don't know how to write about emotions, don't write about them. It's like shit, it will affect the perception too much.

The Saitama template in this book is rubbish

It's quite a narrow-minded mzism. When there are not many resources, all the resources on hand are given up to others in exchange. The portrayal of the protagonist's mother and girlfriend are both distorted and annoying. The mother lost her partner during the Nirvana period and still has such an abnormal personality. The girlfriend is a real green tea bitch who worships money and Muqiang's investment. There is nothing exciting about it. She can be treated as an ordinary harem woman, and there is no need to act like a licking dog. There are also advantages, rapid growth in strength, no pressure level, decisive killing, creating your own methods, and following your own path, that's all for the time being.

Don't give the protagonist invincibility and then turn him into a dog

Don't write emotional scenes in Swallowing the Stars. Just brush it off in one stroke. What we want to see is a cool story about increasing combat power, not romance.

My suggestion is to change the name, otherwise people who are attracted by this name will not be able to stand it. Qidian has learned bad things from FL now. It is like bad money drives out good money. How could there be such a title before?

The cheats are too much, and the nanny is too dedicated to her job.

Saitama's physique, why is he the strongest spiritual master?

Your introduction plug-in is so well written that I ended up using it once or twice after reading it!

Saitama's setting is to practice sword fighting skills with just one punch, and directly give those laws and secret fighting skills to one punch at a time to knock him down. If he can't solve it with one punch, he will just run away. Wouldn't it be nice to learn a special running skill?

1: Yes (please explain the reason) 2: No (please explain the reason) 3: Both yes and no (XX)...

Pursuing reading is very important. I hope you can follow it more. It's related to new book recommendations, so I'm sorry to bother you (●--●)

Recommend a fan novel "The Eternal God Brain of the Swallowing Star Sky" [Single heroine·Ai Chen] The protagonist travels through the Swallowing Star Sky and obtains the Eternal God Brain. The Eternal God Brain can integrate all things and turn into its own clone. It has its own innate abilities and can evolve infinitely! Integrate with computers, gain computing talent, and evolve into the most powerful brain in the universe, capable of performing calculations tens of trillions of times in an instant. Integrate the immortal-class spacecraft of the mechanical race, obtain the talent of mechanical creation, follow the path of mechanical style, and create mechanical treasures that are better than those of mountain riders. Integrate with the Zerg Mother Queen, gain the talent of genetic analysis, and integrate various powerful bloodline genes in the universe to create a perfect divine body. ...................... Zerg: Damn it, how did this human Li Xin create warriors that were so much stronger than my Zerg? Mechanical Tribe: We are the worst off. Originally, we had the most advanced technology in the universe, but now human technology is even stronger than our Mechanical Tribe! Yaozu: Let's not talk about other things first. Why is the gene multiplier of human beings now higher than that of our royal family? Human: We don't know these questions of yours, you can ask him yourself. Each alien tribe: We sent people to ask, but every tribe member who went to ask died and could not even be resurrected! Li Xin: Why didn't I find anyone asking me?

After a tiring day, I thought I would find a novel to relax, but I didn't expect to read it in one sitting. Reading this book is really a stress reliever.