Starting with the Rocks Pirates

It would be better to persuade someone to quit by calling him Wang Kai directly.

Some people in the comment section said it sounded like Hikaru's writing style, but I felt that reading it was like reading a fairy tale written by a mortal. The characters in it did not have any characteristics of pirates. Each of them behaved too much like a normal person, or an ordinary person. I did not feel the magnanimity of the hero of the sea at all. The author has never described the banquet that pirates must have, and the magical laughter of Big Mom Kaido has not been written. All the characters in the book act according to a set of values. The dialogue between the characters is full of philistine and very boring, especially the part where the aunt grabs the spring fruit, which is especially like the middle-aged aunt helping the children grab toys in reality. The author should try to figure out what each character would say due to their different personalities. It is recommended to start by writing more onomatopoeias for laughter.

The level of a newbie is just that, so I won't read it and give you an opinion. Can you give the main character a nickname? It's so strange to see the supporting characters Wang Luokai and Wang Luokai being called Wang Luokai. Regardless of whether Wang is the last name or not, it just gives me the feeling of calling him by his first name and last name together. Even if he is called Kai or Wang Kai, it would be better.

By the way, does the author really plan to give the Thunder Fruit to Ka Er to eat in the future? Personally I don't think it's necessary! After all, the Thunder Fruit is now the protagonist's second fruit ability, which greatly improves the protagonist's strength, and now everyone thinks that the protagonist's Blue Dragon Fruit also has the power of thunder and lightning. If the Thunder Fruit is handed over in the future and cannot use the power of thunder and lightning, wouldn't it be easy for people to guess that the protagonist is a dual-fruit ability user? More importantly, compared to natural fruits, I personally think that the magical beast fruit will increase the strength of Ka Er more! So, when the protagonist goes to Wano Country in the future, it would be better to collect the Phantom Beast Seed Fruit and give it to Kaji to eat... By the way, the same goes for Jhin. The ancient Seed Fruit eaten in the original book is really too tight on the crotch. If the protagonist takes him under his command in the future, he can also change him to a Devil Fruit that suits him better! For example, the natural type of burning fruit. I remember that his physical ability seems to be related to fire, right? In this case, if the Shao Shao Fruit is in his hands, he might really be able to develop a power stronger than Ace Sabo! Alternatively, the author can create his own fantasy beast fruit related to fire, such as the Golden Crow Fruit. After all, the Golden Crow is also a god born in charge of fire in the mythological system, and I remember that Jhin also seems to have a pair of big wings. Whether it is the shape or ability after transformation, this fruit should suit him very well, right? (Personal thoughts, don't comment if you don't like it)

The Blue Dragon Fruit is just like that, although it is very strong. But the sensory function is not as good as the regular ability: Yellow Spring Fruit, Childlike Fruit, Food Fruit, Momo Fruit, Every Time Fruit and Vegapunk's Brain Flower Fruit, Earthquake Fruit, Dark Fruit. Clearing the field is not as good as the natural awakening (light, fire, ice, thunder, sand). One-on-one is not as good as the superman type: Earthquake Fruit.

The great pirate Wang Zhi, a passerby who was killed by the Blackbeard Pirates, was briefly mentioned in the original work, and his territory was also robbed.

I can't find a place to report it, brother, is it really all about deception? Are they all repeated chapters? Is this how my eldest brother got rich? I admire you! 🥵

The name is useless, there is no need to read further.

😒 When I listen to books, there are always three words in my ears, Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai Wang Luokai! ! !

The writing is very good. The 48 chapters so far have been written very smoothly, and the plot arrangement is also very reasonable. If it continues to this level later, it will be worth paying to watch after it is released. The characters, plot conflicts and battle scene descriptions are all very comfortable to watch. A little suggestion is that when writing the plot of screen switching, you can add dividing lines or write the place or time first, and then write the character dialogue, so that it looks very organized and not chaotic. I just don't know who the heroine is currently considering. Seeing as Fisher has been written, are you planning to arrange an empress?

It feels a bit like Japanese light writing. The character description mainly focuses on language and the psychology of the protagonist, with very little facial expressions and movements, and almost no description of the environment.

One chapter a day? Too little? 😔

It's understandable that there won't be many updates in the new book issue for the sake of performance and recommendations, but isn't it a bit outrageous that you only have 1,000 words for one chapter a day?

At present, it seems that there are no big poisonous points. Apart from slow updates, everything is still OK.

The author didn't even release the update, won't your conscience hurt?

The combat power is ruined

Do all the novels you open have multiple female protagonists?

The book is good, I invested in it, good luck to the author!