Divine Abyss and Mountains

Generally speaking, the first few chapters of this work are full of flaws, and the advantages outweigh the flaws. Let me talk about some of the problems I felt after reading it. They only represent some personal opinions and the author does not need to care. 1. The biggest feeling is that it is slow to warm up. Qidian novels have always been said to have "three golden chapters". After reading the first three chapters of this article, I still can't figure out the main plot. The first chapter is about the argument between the boy and Keshuwei, the second chapter is about Keshuwei killing the hunter, and the third chapter starts again and talks about the Gongyu. The plot unfolds relatively slowly, without clear contradictions or main lines, and is not very friendly to new readers. 2. The title and writing style are not very similar to Internet articles. The title "Gods and Mountains" is a bit vague. How can I put it, after reading the title, I would not think that this is a novel about an imaginary world, and it does not highlight the selling point of the novel. To give a few examples, for example, the title "Lord of Mysteries" has a mysterious color in itself, which is more attractive to readers. In addition, after reading the novel, you will find that the mysterious style of the steam age of the novel also fits the title very well. Another example is "Dafeng Watchmen". The title clearly states the dynasty and the identity of the protagonist. It is easy to think that this is a story about the watchmen in ancient times. The second writing habit, I think the most important one is the branching. The whole text is almost composed of natural paragraphs of more than four lines, and they are evenly distributed. This is very rare in the many online articles I have read. Long and even distribution is not in line with the reading habits of the Internet people. In fact, I think that dialogues like characters can completely occupy a natural paragraph, and if the language skills are in place, it is not necessary to say so-and-so, so-and-so, and the speaker can be judged just by the lines themselves. 3. It's not enough to be cool. The author may not have this ambition or may sneer at cool articles, but I really feel that if an online article wants to be popular among the public, it must be cool. For example, in Qidian's masterpiece "Lord of Mysteries", the protagonist has the golden finger of a time traveler and can understand Russell's diary, so it can attract readers to explore the cool points, and the author also sets the cool points very cleverly, which is an implicit coolness. Not just this one work, almost all online articles are inseparable from Shuangdian. Either the protagonist's invisible pretense makes people feel happy immediately, or the exciting fighting makes people feel happy watching it, or the ups and downs of the plot make readers feel happy again and again. In short, when readers read an online article, if it is as bland, watery, and tasteless as some academic tomes, then it will be difficult for this online article to achieve results. In summary, I mainly talked about some of the problems I think in this article. It can be seen that the author does not seem to have an attitude of writing online articles, but more like an attitude of polishing masterpieces, so some habits are not consistent with online articles. I think the author has great potential, but judging from the current chapter, I think the author will experience some setbacks in the future. I hope the author will not give up. There are obstacles and long road ahead in the online writing process. There are always shortcomings in chewing words and refining ingenious ideas. I look forward to your subsequent updates! "The Tribunal sends its regards."

Since it was not convenient for the brother who won the prize to order takeout, he could only settle the red envelope.

It's interesting 😄 but the names are a bit hard to remember.

More updates from the author, I am in a hurry!

Is this an old author? Why did Qidian send me a message?

I read the first few chapters and I don't know who the protagonist is

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This chapter is wrong

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Brother, give me one more chapter. I'm tossing and turning now and can't sleep. Please give me one more chapter. I'm dying. Please. I feel like there are ants crawling on my body. I feel like I'm shaking all over. I can't breathe. Please, brother, just give me one more chapter. Just one more chapter. I won't touch it again. Please, brother. Just one chapter. I swear I'll never touch this thing again. I really can't bear it anymore. Brother, I kneel down and beg you.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

If you have no future in civil engineering, come and write a book. You have the talent of an author.