Corpse Dao Ancestor Demon

There are a lot of typos. The author is a primary school student?

What you wrote is too childish, and the events that happened are too inexplicable, and there is even a sense of déjà vu like a headless fly that can't find its head. The plot connection is also awkward for people watching. If the plot connection is not well written, then this is just a drama manuscript, not a novel. I'm not belittling you, I'm just asking whether you should listen to some suggestions