Warhammer: When Humanity's Stars Shine

It's not that Qunxing Technology is bad, but you have to ensure that it can still be used normally without being contaminated when traveling across the universe. For example: someone in NC Warhammer can make a diamond suit by hand. Do you think this is possible? The superiors have not given you permission, so you are imposing the rules of the world! Stronger than the God of Creation! !

The progress is too fast, it's like writing in a skip. A major event like the Siege of Terra is skipped in two or three chapters. Without the continuous flow of thoughts, I'm afraid this book will be difficult to follow.

The three golden chapters are poorly written. In the first chapter, I don't know what you want to write, who the main characters are, and what you want to express. The characters that appear at the end of the second chapter and subsequent chapters are unclear one after another as to who is the primary and secondary, and the setting is constantly thrown away. There is nothing written about how to make a plane.

There are too many narrations, and the writing is raw. I hope the author won't add so many narrations, otherwise it will be difficult for the 100 chapters of this novel to express the excitement of the Star Technology helping the human empire to fight, and at the same time add some details of the fighting. The progress should be slower, the Warhammer universe is so big, write slowly, mainly to have fun, refer to the artillery arc, the Mexican model, but the plot cannot be too fast, otherwise there will be nothing written. Write from the macro to the micro, and intersperse the battles with the thoughts of some people at the bottom.

I'm too lazy to say anything about the setting of Warhammer. There are a lot of mistakes, but for the stars, well, you really didn't take out the etheric phase engine, did you? You are really afraid of the Four Pedlars. The subspace will make you fly.

At least the Mechanicus is not that big now and is still holding us back. The protagonist can temporarily replace it and then abandon it after the empire has cultivated a group of scientific and technological talents.

Does this start from chapter 30? I'm a little confused if the first 30 chapters are missing.

There's Half-Life, and there's Dead Space but basically no one writes about it, and it's still a eunuch.

The writing and plot looked uncomfortable. I originally wondered if AI wrote the book, but then I thought about it and AI seems to be better than this.