Hogwarts: I Came from the Ring and Became a Horcrux

It feels like Melina and Hermione don't blend well together. Why not just set them up as independent people?

Pure trash protagonist. Nothing but fighting and playing. Taking part in Quidditch is described as being more serious than studying. He really doesn't know how to learn and only knows how to fight. As mentioned before, the result of King of Elden is not impressive at all. Hagrid was repeatedly hostile, the school was monitored and targeted, Harry and Ron were fooled, and the broom was tampered with. If someone didn't have the strength, it would be useless. There was no investigation or revenge. All of them were treated as if they didn't happen. What kind of King of Elden is this. He doesn't have the temperament of a strong man at all. My personality is just like a gangster who is good at fighting on the street. They just eat and wait to die and fight.

Shennong, I'm here, we'll see in one day

If you write about B Quidditch again, I will really withdraw it. Don't you know what Harry fans and Ring fans want to see?

Come on, you can see in just three chapters that the main character is a fool. A fool who secretly kills chickens in the middle of the night. I don't know if the author did it on purpose or...

To be honest, if I want to go to the world of pure magic circles, I don't know of any new books that I can recommend.

The character and personality of the protagonist are not like a king who has been tempered by the blood and fire of the borderland, but rather like a childish kid.

From your introduction, I am only interested in the Holy See spreading the Golden Dharma.

Just the name alone will dissuade you.

Just try some poison, I am not Shennong. Let me talk about a few more sensitive points. For some people, they are poisonous points, but for others, it doesn't matter. 1. The protagonist has collected quite a lot of things before traveling through Harry Potter, but after traveling through time, it is equivalent to opening a trumpet and reconnecting with the game understanding. The things collected before can only be exchanged for the newly earned points in the hands of the system. 2. Chapter 2 begins with a body, but starting from a child, the body is only about ten years old, and can only grow up by collecting soul fragments. Probably to enroll in Hogwarts to follow the plot. 3. Both Lani and Melina are soul-piercing. Lani was reborn on the body of a girl. Currently, she has mastered a magic to make a magic arm (Mage's Hand) to achieve the effect of four hands (to satisfy some people's 4. The protagonist does not like theoretical knowledge. Even if he gets the memory of Tom Riddle when he was a student, he will not study the theoretical knowledge of magic. The protagonist should be of the "fighting, fun" type. He will not focus on magic learning like other HP novels, but on the characters of the old ring and HP. 5. The combat system of the old ring is severely suppressed, and the protagonists, Lani, and Melina are also very weak. There are very few actual hands-on parts, and the enemies encountered are not strong, so the protagonist has not yet been defeated. The two spiritual duels against Voldemort's Horcruxes from different periods lasted almost every second, and there are very few actual battles at the moment. In general, I personally think it is readable, and some of it is relatively novel, but the author has relatively little interaction, and I am not sure whether it will be a eunuch. Anyway, I personally think it would be more interesting if Lani and Melina could live in the HP world. It would also be good if written as a daily novel. It just depends on whether the author has an outline and whether he can continue writing.

The main character's name is a poisonous point for me.

Do you like the original CP so much? Why not bring Hermione and Ron together? Nausea

Not bad, quite novel. But why is it not updated😰

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If you don't set restrictions, what's the point of hanging out in the magic world? Just go to the war zone and hang out.

To be honest, even if your protagonist is written as a beast's house, it will be better than this. Being a beast is better than being a frustrated ghost. At least the beast is cool enough.

Fallen leaves bring news On the other side of the fog, in that broken foreign land, there is a legend It is the legend of kings and gods It is the legend of gold and the dark moon This is the legend called [Elden Ring] In the long years, the giant tree and the furnace Reconciling each other to bring harmony to living beings But there is no balance between life and death, the supreme ring is broken, and a terrible disaster comes The order is in danger, the dynasty is no longer In the war, death will collapse Then, the supreme gods will cut off contact, and the world will fall into eternity The stagnation of eternity However, the light of hope will eventually shine Three heroes appear at the beginning of guidance The Faded Man, the girl with dark eyes, and the princess of the dark moon Only they can kill the [Star Beast] and return the eternal night to this land Only in this way can the world Can restore balance and avoid the silent doom Now, the [Golden Giant Tree], the giant tree supporting the foreign land, has lost its light But recently, another golden starlight appeared in our night sky... Its appearance has shaken the balance of life and death.

Why are there so few comments? Is there any Shen Nong?