Following the Pirate Journey of Enichi Kuni

The part where I was knocked unconscious and competed with Peach Rabbit was too poisonous to bear. I estimate that many people have abandoned this paragraph. If the author wrote this paragraph to screen readers, it was very successful This paragraph exposed several problems 1. The character is OOC You can understand this if you understand it a little deeper. There is so much disconnect with the characters in the original work Ji Guoyuanyi was actually over 80 years old at that time, and has experienced great sorrows, great joys, and the horror of life and death. Can you imagine the ambiguous interactions between men and women that an old man who is a generation older than people like Garp and has a more indifferent mood can have with people who are at least one granddaughter older than you? If you want to have an emotional line, the first thing to cross should not be Yuan Yi in old age, but Yuan Yi in youth The original work of Peach Rabbit does not have this kind of character. If you really want to write an emotional drama, you have to have a general understanding of the character's charm before writing, otherwise it will really ruin the perception 2. Cool setting Knock yourself out Most of the plot settings of the handicap match are poisonous rather than exciting. It does not show that the protagonist has a high emotional intelligence and is comfortable in fighting, but it is also a humiliation to the opponent (unless the opponent has some unspeakable secrets that he must win, even if the match is fake, he can accept it) How many people can see the relationship between Yuanyi and Taotu in this game? Disparity, handicap in public is equivalent to public humiliation and letting people talk about her female identity 3. Screening readers does not mean ignoring readers Before this paragraph, many readers have reported problems in book reviews In the acceptance speech, the author positioned himself to satisfy some readers The product is still You need to adapt to the market instead of waiting for the market to adapt to you. If you really want to go further on this road, it is inevitable to filter out useful experience and make changes. You can't really feel that you are already very good now. As long as you cultivate a group of hardcore readers, you can sit back and relax, right? With that said, I wish you the better as you write.

The most important thing for fans is to respect the original setting as much as possible, because what fans want to see most is the adventures of their favorite characters in the new world. Jiguoyuanyi is a test for the author. This kind of charismatic character is not controlled by the author. If the author forces the character to complete something for his own personal gain, something will happen, such as opening a harem (

In the eyes of passersby, Jiguo Yuanyi's character is the son of God, just like the sun god descending to earth. He is so hot that people can't get close to him. Passersby will only look up to him like a god. But in fact, Jiguo Enichi is a very gentle and kind-hearted person. How gentle can he be? It felt like he was reluctant to destroy even the wild flowers on the roadside. At the same time, God-like destiny is to want an ordinary life, and the strongest ones often want the most ordinary things.

As soon as Tsukuni Enichi ate the fruit, he felt like the sky was falling 🙄. Jikuni Enichi was already a perfect person, and the Devil Fruit would only add a weakness. Readers who read this book would prefer that Tsukuni Enichi have superb swordsmanship instead of this fluttering fruit. Instead of pursuing the ultimate in swordsmanship, he would develop Devil Fruits 🥵

Now there are actually people writing about the navy. After being massacred every three years, the navy is a clown. Calculating the time it takes for the World Government to be established, at least a hundred kingdoms and islands will have to be destroyed in the beginning. Each time, the navy was escorted to blockade the island.

The front was okay, I mean before I met Peach Rabbit. The author whose mind is full of women and Yuanyi who doesn't care, I can only say that if you don't like it, you don't have to write it.

This is the cover drawn by Mr. Crocodile himself

The reason is ridiculous because of his talent, what kind of breathing method, He Dao should not compete with pirates. Not on the same level at all

The navy in the original book was completely ruined. The Celestial Dragons massacred a country in three years, and the navy was involved, like the Valley of the Gods.

If you don't write Peach and Rabbit, or if you don't write it like a disgusting romantic drama from 20 years ago, the rest of the content is pretty good, but I can't accept such an abrupt romance plot. Why do you first write Peach and Rabbit inexplicably, and then write that the protagonist knocks himself out when they compete. Even if you explain that there is no heroine, shouldn't it be written like this without a heroine? It's really a big deal for readers.

A big problem with this book is that the author failed to capture his readers and find out what the readers wanted to see. So, what did the readers want to see? The answer is Tsukuni Enichi. Tsukuni Enichi's character and his position are a powerful background board. This character is suitable to be used as a background board to bring out his own divinity. This is what readers want to see. It is not appropriate to let this character be tempered and improved, or to interfere too much in "human" things, because this is the character of one person, not the character of a "sage" or "god". The position of God that people want to see is that they hope to be rescued by him in times of suffering, and hope that he is a high-ranking character in peacetime. For a role like this that is full of gods and saints, what everyone wants to see is that he is high-ranking, rather than him personally going down to intervene in some things. He can use his own existence to influence some opinions and thoughts. He cannot use his own existence to interfere with a behavior of "people".

The most amazing thing about Ji Guoyuan is his incredible understanding

I gave up. I spent money to watch it for so many days. I was afraid that I would encounter this kind of plot to defend O'Hara. I didn't expect it to happen again. So bye bye. Ordinary people in O'Hara can be saved, but those scholars deserve to die.

If the protagonist is changed from Ji Guoyuanyi to Anger, the perception of this book will be greatly improved, and there will be few rivals among Dragon Clan fans. The author's writing and narrative are very obviously Jiangnan literary style, but the problem is, not to mention the original text, as a fan fiction, most of the time this style is not adapted to the local environment, and it is only a plus when writing Jiangnan works such as Dragon Clan and Kyushu. Because this kind of writing, especially the narrative, conflicts too seriously with the style setting of most original works, it will completely destroy the original style. And since the setting of the original work itself does not serve this style, the Jiangnan style that replaces the original style will also look very awkward. Obviously, the two original works, Demon Slayer and Pirates, have little resemblance to Jiangnan's style. Or to put it another way, some people may like to write about the world of pirates in the style of dragons and the protagonist of Demon Slayer. However, with this title and introduction, most readers who are interested in this book want to read about Demon Slayer, Pirates, or even time travel and cool stories, but it is basically impossible to want to read Jiangnan.

Ji Guoyuan is a bit of a supermodel. If he were to play in One Piece, who could beat him in the later stages? More than 3,600 knives per second, entangled with overlord lust, Nika will die

Xu Guoyuan's greatness is not just because of his breathing skills, but why is the version updated? ! You have gone backwards in version

The first ten chapters are good, but the further they go, the worse they get.

After reading Chapter 83, I finally couldn't help it. The author has always been OOC in terms of character design. , And then he never came back, without even the thought of rescuing him. If Genichi Jiguo had rarely shown his feelings before getting married, his emotions were direct and simple, and he was a very calm person. If it were him at this time, you might be more in line with the personality, but when you traveled through time and his wife Shi was eaten by a ghost and died of old age, at this time his personality became more serious and serious, so he would not scratch his head! And as time goes by, in addition to getting stronger in swordsmanship, Tsukuni Genichi's emotions become more and more indifferent, which means that unless he encounters a situation with great emotional fluctuations, he will neither laugh nor cry, and even if he does, it will only be a tearful lament or a shallow smile. From the beginning, people have been asking you to pay attention to the fact that the characters have started to be OOC, but in chapter 83, it is still OOC, and it is getting worse and worse. 😅

If you don't write Peach Rabbit, your score will be 8 points. If you include Peach Rabbit, your perception will plummet.

It does have the same flavor as the original Yuanyi, but it's still a bit stiff. Mainly in the interaction with Peach Rabbit in the early stage, especially the deliberate loss, it feels very disconnected and destroys the character setting. Because the character is set to die at the age of 80 and lose his wife and son. It should be difficult for him to behave like this towards the newly appeared Peach Rabbit. The protagonist uses this method to force Peach Rabbit to have a good impression of him. This makes people feel inexplicable and also tears the character of Peach Rabbit. Fortunately, there is no excessive emotional drama later. In the mid-term, One Piece World does not have the flavor of One Piece World. The specific reason is that the strength of Big Mom is strange. Big Mom's ideal is to establish all nations. For this reason, her biggest goal is to gather all races, so there will be no such drama of training to become stronger unless you want to destroy the nations she created. The same is true for other strong people. Because the three domineering colors of the Pirate World itself are a conceptual issue, and the real charm of the Pirate World is not written. The aspect of eating fruits is also a bit stiff and feels fluttery. There is no need for the protagonist to eat it like thunder and give it to others. It has no special impact. The setting is also stabbed by Oda in the back like other fans. Moreover, the character growth and relationship changes are too rigid in a single line. The specific manifestation is that there is no story and it is like a running account. The protagonist starts fighting when he encounters an injustice. How to arrange supporting characters after killing the enemy. The supporting characters' personalities and stories are rarely described. This is also a common problem among One Piece fans. They all default to the settings of some characters. In fact, if you think deeply about it, The description of the character's original setting and background may actually be more story-telling. This lack of deep-rooted and humanistic portrayal makes it difficult to attract people, and ultimately leads to a loss of interest in watching. Moreover, the power behind the protagonist also develops inexplicably quickly, and the final ending is actually based on the theory of lifespan. The summary is that the portrayal of the protagonist is okay, but the story and plot writing may not be strong enough. It is a semi-streamlined story. The portrayal of the supporting characters and the changes in the world structure are also a bit stiff, but considering the direction of the story of the reborn grass in the original painting, I still forget it. The summary is okay, but in the later stage, you can actually know what is going on by looking at the title, and I am not interested in watching it. In summary, I don't like the protagonist's setting, but the plot is actually average.

After reading many chapters, this book gave me the feeling that it was not high enough when it was supposed to be climax, too dull when it was supposed to be dull, and the rhythm was a little wrong.

At first, I didn't understand why the author let the protagonist eat Piaopiao Fruit, but now I understand the author's foreshadowing. The protagonist joins the revolutionary army. He is no longer a single strong man, but a group, an organization, and a group of comrades. With the Piao Piao Fruit, in a sense, you have established an air strategic unit, with exciting and flexible tactics. After awakening, you can add the ability of others to take off, and hide the front line. These will play a big role and complement the dragon's ability!

I haven't read it since Pig's Feet Eats Fruit. Where am I writing now? Is there any reasonable explanation for eating shit?

I can't understand the plot of the story that just ignores Garin-sung...

May I ask how many chapters there are without this Gion plot? It's too embarrassing. I came to see Enichi Tsukuni, not Gion. I wanted to skip the plot involving Gion and go straight to the back part.

I'm back again, I've finally gained weight after being raised for so long 🙂

Although it's not that amazing, at least it was a book that kept me interested enough to read it all.

My thinking is almost over, so I won't vote for these two monthly votes 🙂😌

It is a very good book. It grasps the character and behavior of Enichi Jiguo well, the plot is also innovative, and the self-created characters are also remarkable . The only drawback is that he ate the Piaopiao fruit in the middle and later stages, but there is little description of the development and application of the fruit's abilities, which is acceptable. Highlights: The understanding of the breathing method, the development of swordsmanship, the description of fighting, the interaction with the characters in the original work, the innovative characters of Nine Pillars, the spread of the breathing method, the undefeated record, the fight with the strong men from all walks of life In short, it is a good book, top-grade, worth reading

It has been added to the collection. It has great ideas and the author's writing is very good. This book title makes people want to click on it. I visited with my work "The Witcher Begins in America". Thank you!