I Ask for Immortality in the Fairy Palace

There are no other problems, but the setting of the realm and some details are really a bit uncomfortable. For example, after the seventh level of Qi training, you then add Qi training eleven and twelve levels later. I really don't know what the author was thinking and wanted to increase the word count! Also, what does it mean for a sect to have less than a hundred people to form pills? Just one Yuanying. How poisonous are so many pills? A junior with perfect foundation building can make the protagonist leave his medicine garden, but it is in a Yuanying sect, and the number of people to form pills is less than 100. When did the sect with perfect foundation building become so awesome? It is really set to open the door without thinking about logic. Enter the secret realm of foundation building once every 50 years. A practice Qi may only be a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity, and if you later add the setting that you cannot build a foundation after the age of 60, those who missed it when they were 20 to 40 years old will miss it forever. I like the character of the protagonist very much, but the author just talks about the details of the setting without considering any rationality. A junior with perfect foundation building can change the rules in a sect with golden elixirs everywhere. Is this really the Nascent Soul Sect? Is this really a sect with golden elixirs everywhere? There are less than a hundred Jindan people. How many people do you really have? "The Legend of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality" There are only seven golden elixirs in Huang Maple Valley, and everyone has a Nascent Soul. Your setting has more golden elixirs than the seven sects combined. It seems very unreasonable at first glance. It is completely nonsense to complete foundation building in such a place with so much golden elixir.

In fact, what is Immortal Mansion? Once you understand this, it will be very simple. The Immortal Mansion was the training cave for high-level monks and even immortals in the past. It's just that this cave has been miniaturized with the magical power of Sumeru Mustard Seed. It might be a jade pendant, a scroll, a mirror, or some other form. It can be taken into the body, or the Dantian, or the sea of ​​consciousness. Each function has its own advantages, but overall it is a portable cave.

It feels like immortality in an immortal mansion, which feels okay

There is no description of the size of the fairy mansion. How many miles is the size of the fairy mansion? What's the shape like? There is also the spiritual root of the protagonist. He is not the kind of five spiritual roots that were described so slowly in the past. If the description of the three spiritual roots is still so slow even though the middle-level qualifications are now available, it would be better to write about the five spiritual roots.

Why are there such a shortage of elixirs in the later stage of Qi training? There is no reason to hold an auction.

Why do you need the mirror-breaking elixir in the later stage of Qi training to remove the three spiritual roots? Such a waste?

It feels a little bit similar, as if they are basically the same genre, and they all seem to be written in this way. I always feel a little bored. I feel like I could be innovative. If you try different methods, you may get different results. If this is always the case, it will probably be very boring later. Because you can probably guess it. I feel that I need to focus on the plot itself. If I keep chattering, it will be uninteresting. I can write a little bit in the front, but I still have to write about the plot in the back. It's better to write a big plot. Then write some small plots and so on in the background. Then if you become a sect or an organization, you will feel better if you become a back stream person. Immortal clothes are very suitable for behind-the-scenes or sect style. I feel like the plot would be better. Because now Xianfu style is basically a routine, it is actually better to practice it once. This is a personal opinion. Not all. Some people may like this style, but not necessarily. If you had just graduated, you might have liked it, but now you might not like it that much. Usually when I'm in school, I watch pirated versions, but after I graduate, I basically watch genuine ones. I feel that the group of people in their twenties and thirties should belong to that kind of consumer group. The possible part below this age, I am talking about the part that watches pirated copies. The author should not get paid. If you want to have a good meal, try to get closer to this group and feel better. Personal opinion.

After searching for a long time, I finally found another Xianfu-style novel. I read more than a dozen chapters and the writing was pretty good. The others were all unfinished. The author is looking at you. Come on, I won't say how much the reward will be. If you have votes, I will give you as much as you write!

It's bland and boring, and the protagonist doesn't take advantage of the Immortal Mansion at all.

The writing is good, but the portion is not large, and it doesn't make you full.

The rhythm is very good, the cultivation level has not improved by leaps and bounds because of golden fingers, there are battles and adventures, it is not just hard work, come on

Mengxin wishes all the big guys that their wishes will come true and use your valuable land to advertise. "The Yang Clan of Mortals"

It's too fast to cure. You have to learn to ignore unfriendly comments. The majority are silent.

Update it well and I will put it on the bookshelf for you. There are too few chapters and I will save them first.

Add it to the bookshelf first, and read it together when you save more. I just hope that the realm can maintain its value and have more girls, but don't lick 😌

I have a suggestion. The function of the Immortal Mansion can be added with the function of dismantling magical weapons. In this case, it will not have to sell too many magical weapons like other novels, and you can also make weapons on your own.

The Immortal Mansion elixir must be restricted. For example, the protagonist can cultivate the Immortal Mansion elixir by cultivating Qi and cultivate the elixir of the Immortal Mansion at most. Otherwise, it will easily collapse in the later stages.

Although there are some minor flaws, it is still good overall. Good luck, author!

I feel like I can't operate quietly because I deliberately find enemies for the protagonist. And it's very frequent, just after one moment comes another one