Hongchen Daoyan

The writing is good, but the overall feeling is stiff. The words and deeds of the protagonist, including the strategies, are not very natural. Especially when arranging various means, the role of the arrangement is immediately written, and the various backgrounds and arrangements are explained. The heavy sense of setting and the large amount of information in various settings lead to an uneven storyline. Because the switching back and forth between the development of the plot and various explanations makes the plot not smooth and seems a bit stiff.

The writing is quite good, but I was a bit confused when I read it. I didn't even seem to read it after reading it.

I feel that the protagonist is too calculating, and cultivation of immortality must be based on strength first. When I saw Taoist Dragon and Tiger enter Central Continent, I pushed him directly. I don't care about your countless calculations. If you enter immortality, I will directly open a new path. I don't care whether you have destiny or not. Destiny belongs to me as a monster. When I am immortal, can my power regress? I am such a genius. What happened to me in the end? I keep scheming and repaying palace fights, but I fall to the lower level. I feel uncomfortable watching it.

If you want to become an immortal, then you should become an immortal. What kind of palace drama should you write?

I'm going to read the book you're reading.

The author can take a look at Dragon and Tiger Taoist Master and write it as a genius style. The protagonist is dedicated to seeking Taoism and does not need a female protagonist. The overall situation must be considered when planning and writing less palace fighting dramas. In the early stage, it feels okay.

To put it bluntly, I feel like I've always been obsessed with obscenity. It's all the thoughts in the protagonist's head. I've watched it but it's good to watch. Although there is a cultivation level, there doesn't seem to be one. I wrote about cultivation, but I don't know how to practice it. The protagonist's life is also unclear. There seems to be no difference between having it and not having it. Everything is just a set program and no process.

Twenty thousand years can be said to be an era

Keep updating, I've been following it

The writing style is okay, but the overall feeling is a bit stiff. The various backgrounds and arrangements are explained. The heavy sense of setting and the large amount of information on various settings lead to an uneven storyline. No one likes to read the manual 😅😅. But the biggest problem with this novel is that it is a palace fight with too many plots. This is the biggest failure in a novel about cultivating immortals because it does not match 😅. Also, I write for everyone to read, don't be too excited, write for yourself (many authors like to instill their own opinions and ideas), so fewer and fewer people will follow you.

The protagonist has a Dao Qi of the first level and cannot even defeat the Dao Qi of the second level of Tianxiang Tower. The family does not inform them in advance of any plans. How dare they participate in the conspiracy of the eighth level? If you saved Dashan before, what ability do you have to fight the evil dragon? The clone of the man in black can fight with the fifth realm for a long time, right? Why is the protagonist? The protagonist's father, in the eighth realm, is also an old monster that is hundreds of thousands of years old, and the protagonist's brothers are only thirty years old. After being the head of the family for so long, he has not had children for hundreds of thousands of years? You are the one who writes about a small shrimp with great moral integrity who participated in earth-shattering events? A primary school student attends government work meetings every day, delivers speeches, and thinks about the profound meaning of every diplomatic speech made by a beautiful country. Can you really do it😜

Is this the author's trumpet?

Yes, yes 👍👍👍

The writing is strangely good, but the middle feels a bit stiffhard

The author's writing style is good, but after reading about twenty chapters, as a fairy tale novel, it is full of various plots and schemes, which is really not my taste.

But if you continue to improve your skills, you can write very well

First of all, the actual strength is too low, and the combat strength standard has collapsed! Secondly, the labels of this book are laid out behind the scenes, focusing on calculation and understanding, but what about security? Finally, in fact, your level is very good. After all, the difficulty of writing novels is: beyond imagination and thinking (mythology) > truth and abstraction (witches/science fiction/behind-the-scenes calculations) > principles of life (the real person can see human nature) > refreshing narrative (the plot has twists and turns)

Fairy grass, it looks good. Recommended

You can write well. Why are there so few comments?

Added to bookshelf, I like reading this kind of book