I Created a Second Empire in the Ring World

As it stands, I personally feel very disconnected from this book. On the one hand, judging from the game experience of Ring World, the author is right. The content in the game is just like this. It is nothing more than manipulating the characters to run their own camps. This aspect is very restored. But when I look at it as a novel reader rather than a gamer, what do I see? Just a protagonist who says one thing and does another. The author's setting in the article is that on the one hand, the protagonist shoulders a great mission, has superhuman abilities, and has ideals; on the other hand, when faced with some problems that should be fought or solved, the protagonist turns a blind eye or compromises and accepts them. This characterization is very bad, even disgusting, and uncomfortable to me. The reason is that under the current portrayal, I can only read hypocrisy. The author describes that the protagonist has great power and can decide all matters of territory and territory with one word, but he also tells the protagonist that his own will cannot be implemented, and these unimplementable things are what the protagonist thinks he should set an example for... Such a description really does not make me believe that what the protagonist is thinking is what he says. In short, if this is a game record, then I have nothing to say. It's a game, just have fun. The game mechanism is like this. But if I regard it as a novel, then I will definitely think that there is something wrong with the author's characterization, plot arrangement and description. What is the reason for the conflict between the protagonist's ideal and the reality? What is the current reality? Where are your thoughts on this issue? What's the solution? What happened after the plan was implemented? I feel this part is missing in the article. Is the protagonist a person who has traveled to another world and has his own thoughts, or is he actually a game program on an electronic screen? This perception problem also needs to be dealt with urgently. I think this is why I am wondering whether this is a game record or a novel. As a game record, it adds too many things. As a novel, it is too restricted by the framework of the game and does not resemble a world. Finally, I wish the author can finally write a satisfactory work in his mind and be liked by readers.

A little more in one day, what is enough to see?

Instead, when writing a ring world, we should downplay the main plot and strengthen the branch plots. Grand goals are too difficult to grasp, and life bit by bit is more suitable. An ancient can was opened here today, and a shuttle dropped there tomorrow. A psychic weapon was found after cleaning up the pirate base last time, and this time a caravan came to bring new news. All in all, events are the focus, and the main line is at most a stage.

Hello, I am a sub-chapter of the Ultramarines of Macragge's glory, the Sons of Slaughter. We are very interested in the Second Empire you proposed and I think we have a chance to join. IP: Eye of Terror (crossed out) Macragge

After reading the beginning, the author will not write about the protagonist of the Unity of Mary, right? Raise a bunch of things that have been massacred and tried to enslave human beings, and call them human beings?

I can't stand it anymore after reaching chapter 50. 1. At the beginning, it was a game about running around the world with few people, and then the sculpture of a donkey eating dry food was very well described. It wasn't until the protagonist met a alien for the first time when he went out, and the difference between the subsequent interaction with the alien and the description of the empire's power towns and the interaction with teammates and the power towns in the game, that I felt that I was out of the frame of the Ring World game, leaving only the story background. It turned into an ordinary novel about fighting for hegemony in another world. Later, the ring world system turned into an ordinary golden finger. Technology does not require time to study and download instantly. The construction and trade at the core of the game are also covered in one sentence. The howitzer can be clicked in just one sentence. Transactions are only for triggering the plot rather than replacing resources. 2. The excitement of Warhammer is the flash of light that shines forth when human beings face suffering and despair. Even though their efforts and sacrifices may have no impact on the final outcome, they continue to do so. The four hawkers in this book only affect the protagonist, but as the protagonist, it is impossible for him to really join the gang. These four hawkers are more provocative than the elders of the Soul Palace. In a normal Warhammer novel, let's just say that in the first battle, I don't believe that the noble son was not influenced by Tzeentch. But these four gods have been watching, from Chapter 10 of the first chapter to Chapter 6 of the third chapter. He did not even seduce the hostile high-level officials to fall. The main character, Xiao Bing, doesn't have much of a role. The main character has Wushuang. The younger brother applauded him afterwards, but his subordinates are useless at all. 3. What did the protagonist think when he fell to the ground? In the past, I told the alienated people that everyone is equal, but later on, I created a privileged class. He himself is even a centralized leader. And he is the only one who has the system. Void takes out seeds and the robots only listen to him. Only he can research technology. He holds all the means of production and then makes everyone equal. Isn't this a little bit? . . I only briefly glanced at the title later, and after seeing the second female lead coming to deliver it, I felt that this book was just an ordinary otherworld hegemony novel with Warhammer and Ring World skins. After all, Ringworld factions will not trade a noble to gain favor from other factions, and there is no such thing as marriage in Warhammer.

I saw the recommendation on Tieba, so I came over to take a look, and waited until I saw a hundred pictures 🙂

He becomes a superman in the first few cards. Will fans of the deep world like it?

My combat power collapsed too fast. I only reached about 30 chapters when my working speed was 600%. I could instantly kill monsters when I threw a spear. I made a lot of overly righteous mods that left nothing to write about about the survival of the game itself. I also recruited a lot of subordinates directly from the tribe. In the game, these have to be knocked unconscious one by one before being surrendered. The real thing up to now There are actually only three characters, one is the protagonist, one is an intelligent species, and there is an external female character who is like a fish and a geese. The development and construction of the colony are briefly mentioned without a detailed description. After all, the character creation is boring. I hope that more characters will join the colony in the future and have a more detailed description. The biggest advantage of the game "Ring the World" In fact, every villain is essentially the same, with very high growth and plasticity. When writing novels, it is actually easier to describe the character arc. In addition, I don't know if the author is too good at the game and the difficulty of the game is too low. He has almost graduated from the beginning. If I play to this level, I will usually end it, because it has already been completed. It's invincible. Mechanical attacks can kill it alone. So what about pirate attacks and tribal attacks? Wouldn't it mean that the protagonist kills and explodes alone? There is no sense of pressure to survive. If there is not enough pressure, then the plot should be exciting enough. If it is not a survival novel, then it should be read as a post-apocalyptic city novel. But I think it is still difficult to develop it in this way.

Oh hey hey! The essence is here!

I hope there will be one that has the most fun in the world. The cooling and heating vents of the air conditioner were installed backwards, causing me to get heat stroke

Second what? (Bolter loaded)

The author should write the game process like a novel, not the novel like the game process.

People who write game fanfics, especially niche game fanfics, have a habit of liking to stitch together. The game itself is quite niche. For example, the theme of Rim World naturally requires a large number of readers to be screened Then add a bunch of mods and sift through a bunch more. After screening, most authors basically start to write in a self-interested way, and in the end they will probably sew a few more. Niche games The result is that the subject matter that is niche itself becomes even more niche Of course, this is not to say that there is anything wrong with this kind of fan game writing itself. Starting Point itself is an open software, no matter how niche it is, some people will read it There are people who write about Ring World Stitching Far Planet, but this kind of writing will inevitably filter out only a small number of readers.

I just saw the Second Empire, and my first reaction was the one created by Guilliman and Sanguinius.

A broken leg at the beginning is very discouraging. . . If you bring it in, it makes me feel very frustrated. If you don't bring it in, I feel that the protagonist is very pure

I saw Chapter 49. The protagonist has a very upright mind. Why did he ask the empire to trick me into it 😭

The author is addicted to the cos Warhammer in the ring world

I didn't feel like I had a sense of immersion when I read it. I hope some negative justice mods can be added

Ringworld is indeed too unpopular in novels, but the author does write it very well. At least the game is really familiar. I think people who don't play games can understand the biological and racial backgrounds. I think it is generally good-looking and I want to read it. But this is a filter for loyal players. Objectively speaking, the writing is actually good, in terms of cohesion and fluency, but personally I feel that the pace is too fast and the details are not enough. I can feel what the author wants to write and shape. Being limited by experience, there will be a sense of jumping and fragmentation. Don't be too hasty, spread out slowly, come on! ❤️

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He pretended to be dead, and then lay back down again

I want to hear carefully what is your second question?