Hogwarts: Obscurus Is Really Not a Golden Elixir

What is the golden elixir? Traditionally, it is said that the essence, energy, and spirit are integrated into one body. The light compressed into a ball is called the inner elixir.

First, the writing style is not good, which leads to inconsistency. The first chapter is obviously intended to write about the feeling of being two out of ten, but as a result, most people feel that it is "crazy", so when the funny character is exposed later, they are said to be inappropriate. Second, there is the issue of the identity of the protagonist. The setting is an adult, a twenty-year-old adult. However, after time travel, he is not only very paranoid, but also bold and arrogant, unlike an adult. (But I don't realize that this is the problem. The magic of time travel, the perceived magic, encountering magic, and doing extraordinary things.) Third, the plot problem is also the poor writing. I won't talk about it later, but the first twenty chapters are all like this, a mess. I deeply agree with this, no matter what. I can't refute it, but it's not that I can't make a strong argument, it's just that the writing is not good enough. As a result, I can't hold back the original plot characters when they appear, and I unconsciously bring their own stories into their language, so the plot line is messy and not clear at all. Four, four, let me think about it, it seems that there are none, mainly other Shennong, they just talk about the difference but don't tell where the medicine is. Who is a good Shennong but doesn't tell where the poison is? I'll sort it out myself, and I'll post it myself when I think of it later. Five, fifth... Personality! Start up!

First, it's a bit confusing Second, it's better to say that I didn't travel through time, or that I haven't read the original work.

The setting is too speechless. Even if you don't know Obscurus, you have probably heard Harry Potter's name before, and even called him Scarhead. How could Pigfoot think that he was in the world of cultivating immortals? He must be thinking about magic. It's better to just write an indigenous pig's foot, and the first few lines are all messed up, and the pig's foot looks like a lunatic.

The plot is very blunt, and the main plot is forced upon me after the game, and what serious time traveler writes a diary? ! The Obscurus represents that person's explosive strength, which is at least at the professor level!

I saw the author said he didn't know how to change it, so let me talk about a few points. First of all, the protagonist met Lao Deng a year and a half in advance and knew who Lao Deng was. . Such a long time wasted. . It has been emphasizing the state of mind but just brushing it off, which is equivalent to doing nothing for two years. After entering school, I can't feel that the protagonist has any pursuit of cultivation, which feels very strange. It might be better if you just set the protagonist as a native. Secondly, the description of the protagonist's spell release effect, the protagonist's strength, and the control of various spells are too poor, and I have no idea what the protagonist is doing. . Finally, Harry Potter cannot live without Hermione just like the West cannot live without Jerusalem. Hermione in the movie is the soul of Harry Potter. Don't look at some comments saying that they hate the heroine Hermione. In fact, there are very few good Hermione heroine stories. The most popular Potter fan fiction on the Internet is the heroine Hermione, but there are really very few

Why are you always influenced by other people? The protagonist is obviously a Taoist enthusiast and a time-traveler who doesn't understand the original work. Why doesn't he stick to what he firmly believes wholeheartedly, instead of being led by others? Besides, there is no Obscurus over ten years old in the magic world. Since you have used your own method to live to ten years old, doesn't it prove that your method is actually better than the magic world's method? Why not concentrate on research? The protagonist claims to be a Taoist lover. From the past life to this life, he feels that there is no Taoism at all. No matter how hard you don't read the book, have you heard the saying in the Tao Te Ching: "All things bear yin and embrace yang, and the energy is in harmony" It is not that there is happiness with the patron saint curse, but there is the patron saint curse with happiness According to the current theory, in the world of Harry Potter, there is magic (or magic) first, and then there are wizards (including magical animals). In this relationship, it is obvious that the protagonist is studying the "Tao" of the magical world. Why should he ignore the basics and study magic to solve his own problems? Magic spells are originally meant for wizards to comprehend Tao (magic) and use it to solve their current problems. The protagonist uses someone else's shoes to cover his own feet. It can be said that it is completely wrong.

The first chapter behaves like a psychotic novel, but unfortunately I found something wrong in the second chapter. I came to the comment area to check and found that the author intended to write a relaxing story, but his writing skills were not good enough and he ended up with a brainless idiot 😅

I don't know why, but they only set China in the direction of cultivating immortals. If I really can't figure it out, the background setting of "Under One Person" can be copied directly. Well, there is no sense of violation. The setting is more reasonable, the world view is larger, the content is richer, the story is more feasible and exciting for external expansion, and the understanding of countries, ethnic groups, and cultures is deeper.

I haven't read a few chapters of the book, mainly because I feel that the writing of Pig's Feet is too neurotic, especially since I was also poached for the "gold elixir" in my previous life 😅

Is this time travel for children? Or mental illness? How can a normal person act in such a cool way?

The golden elixir was a bit interesting before. After entering Hogwarts, I felt that the protagonist had been assimilated and was no longer that interesting. He kept quarreling with Hermione. Whenever Hermione said something, the protagonist could quarrel with her.

I haven't read the book yet, but after reading the reviews, I found that the author is talking nonsense. I was originally very interested in this setting, but now I don't know if I should read it 🙂🙂🙂

I was confused in many places and felt quite confused. Or maybe I didn't look carefully? For example, the conversation between Dumbledore and Nicolas Flamel. Also, after reading Chapter 20, I didn't realize that the protagonist is an adult. Just like a naughty kid. There is no thinking, just naughty children playing.

I've read Chapter 15 and haven't started the actual plot yet. I'm still confused and don't know what I want to say.

I feel like my writing is useless 😥

Isn't it what the author wanted to write? The main plot has no logic at all. No idea what he was going to do. Learning magic is not easy. Alchemy elixir, you don't practice it.

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It's better than this if it's written in a shabby way, even if it's written with a bean bag.

I knew that anyone who wrote about the Chinese magical world in Harry Potter would be dead.