Transmigrating from the One Piece Phoenix

First of all, I don't really understand the meaning of going to Marvel. Let's talk about gems. The settings in Loki are useless for other cosmic gems. With the current strength of the protagonist, except for vibranium, it is useless. You don't plan to practice boxing, right? Will we go to Conan in the next world? Really, apart from this novel, I have never seen Zhu Tianwen write about Huihara Ai as the heroine. What's the point of going to Conan?

Brother, you have made the effect of this fruit so weak. In the later stage, I can only be a wet nurse, how to survive in Marvel. When I went to Zhutian, I was even more bombarded, and I didn't have the mentality of a strong person.

Everyone who comes in to watch is here for the Phoenix. Are you going to teach me Wing Chun on Destruction Day?

I saw Sasuke on the profile. Is Sasuke a suitable partner?

The protagonist's strength is too strong, the protagonist's Phoenix Fruit (can turn into a bird all over), a portable space with countless weapons, Tony's armor of at least Mark IV, and the magic of the Marvel world and the Suqing world. After many dungeons, he has become proficient in fighting skills. With this configuration, he was defeated by Wuhan, really! It made me laugh. Let's see again. After dozens of chapters, cats and dogs can still ride on each other, so I gave up.

The Zhenzhen Fruit doesn't match Tanjiro at all. They don't share the same style of painting. The Zhenzhen Fruit seems to match a very strong person. Isn't the Thunder Fruit more suitable for Sasuke, directly the Thunder God Susana? If it's the fire dragon form of the phantom beast, the mighty Susanoo is okay, but if it's the Burning Fruit, forget it, and Sasuke's Susanoo can directly shoot Amaterasu flames, so it's not that good for the fire dragon to directly spit out Amaterasu, and the blue dragon is better. After all, Sasuke is actually better at lightning escape, and the green dragon is more handsome. Haibara Ai feels that the painting style of the Surgery Fruit, Brain Fruit, and Weapon Fruit matches a little bit.

Your book deliberately suppresses the protagonist so hard. No wonder so few people have read it. The world travel has to wait for cooling down, and the ability cannot be used when it first travels. The protagonist is really ambitious to be able to travel and play. He can't even designate a safe place to travel to other worlds. If you don't have the ability to protect yourself, you can't die because of the aura given by the author. If someone who is not the protagonist dares to do this, he will die suddenly because of his negligence within a few worlds.

A magician without magical power. . . . Ah. . . . It feels like watching Neon Different World Toilet Paper. . . . .

I just watched the plot of Marvel and Conan, and found that the author seems to have made a mistake that most people have made. The transition of the plot is too fast, and people will read it in daily life. If the setting is that the protagonist is invincible, then the tone of the book has basically been determined as daily. If it is a battle series, extending the fighting time will inevitably weaken the protagonist or strengthen the villain in disguise. This is already a fatal bug. On the contrary, if you don't want to interfere with the character's combat effectiveness, then the battle will become extremely fast, and the excitement and details will not be written. If the protagonist's IQ is deliberately weakened to fit the plot, it will also make the book no longer attractive. In general, author, you have got the tone of this book wrong. If you write about battles, then the story about the supporting characters needs to be written in more detail, but the social relationships and psychological activities of this kind of characters are very difficult to describe. If even one mistake is made and the reader fails to resonate, the book will become a self-titled article. Comics have a strong visual impact, so it will be easier to do this (refer to One Punch Man). The previous article has laid the foundation that the protagonist is invincible, and the battle is easy to write down in one sentence, so it is better if this tone is based on the daily perspective. In daily life, the focus should not be on the trivial matters of life, but on the character's growth, the handling style of the protagonist and supporting characters, which determines the process and outcome of the matter. If you know enough about certain dramas or movies, then you can pave the way from the character's psychology and life details. If you want to write a transitional plot (such as traveling to a new world), then the author can actually consider letting the protagonist play as an "outsider" or a "person behind the scenes". The "outsider" is a simple "fun person", which requires You describe it from the reasonable development of the plot, rather than intervening at the beginning, to add a bit of interest to the original plot (refer to Saiki Kusuo's disaster, if you look carefully you will find that some things are actually very reasonable without Saiki's intervention). The "man behind the scenes" intervenes in the main plot at the beginning, letting the supporting characters transform into "Demiurge", allowing them to guess and figure out the protagonist's action logic. Both of these can smoothly add to the post-travel plot, and will not make the plot look extremely perfunctory. Everyday life pays great attention to the relationship between characters, so you must not "drop your IQ". For example, they don't think about things that can be guessed. This plot requires a lot of description of "extension of IQ". It depends on the author whether you dare to write branches within the original framework. What the author is doing now is that he doesn't know how to write battles, and he is afraid that the combat effectiveness of the writing will collapse and the plot will be poor. I don't know how to unfold the daily life. The character of the protagonist is uncertain. Sometimes he is having fun, sometimes he pretends to be a master, and he even emphasizes that he may become a "patriot". The character of the protagonist needs to be grown and shaped by himself, not a transformable doll. For example, in Conan, you can make the protagonist a "black bottom" or an "uncontrolled winery partner" to make the plot go in the direction of "behind the scenes flow". Later, you can scare Conan, Xiaolan, Haiyuan, or even scare Gin when you are bored, no problem. If you want him to be a "fun person", then you can follow Xiaolan to trick Conan from Kidd or school, and you can still write a lot of plots. What I saw was that two chapters passed inexplicably, and you said they had passed a year. . . Look again, if the next new world passes by in a hurry, then what's the point of writing about that world? The plot has been passed over in a nutshell, and the daily life has been passed over in a nutshell. Didn't you just run over and collect people? Speaking of the plot, I would also like to mention the character Haihara Ai. After escaping from the winery and suffering a serious illness, she was extremely wary of everyone there. Faced with the protagonist's silent tracking, her thoughts should be "escape", "death is approaching" and "gloom". Damn it, you can write the plot as "She feels that the person behind her has great malice, as if there is no place for her in the world. Then set up a plot of escape, but because her physical condition does not allow it, and the place is unfamiliar, she has no way to escape." You can give me an example, or you can look at the paragraph I wrote below. ["It seems that evil will eventually be eliminated, like rats in the ditch, and will eventually be abandoned by everyone..." Haiyuan pressed against the wall tightly, looking at the outstretched hand of the person in front of him, feeling that the world was dark, "I'm sorry... Sister..." However, there was no gunshot, no feeling of suffocation, and even no pain. In the long rainy night, Haiyuan closed her eyes tightly, silently waiting for her ending. "It seems that you are very wary of me." Su Wei looked at Huiyuan. Her face was pale due to being exposed to the rain for too long and being in despair. Her thin body could not stop trembling. Is it because of the fear of death? Or just plain cold? "Actually, you don't need to be so wary of me, I can help you." Although the tone was soft, in her ears, the person in front of her seemed to be teasing her like a cat and a mouse, after all. . . She has done something irreversible, how can she have any hope? The rain seemed to be falling harder. She felt like she was teetering on the edge of collapse. She was lying weakly on the wall. She could no longer think of anything extra. "If you want to live, just sleep." Listening to Su Wei's words, she finally accepted this choice after being tortured and unable to think. "I'm here... Sister..."] You see, this kind of rainy night meeting scene can be easily written into a plot of more than 700 words. Haiyuan's desperation, the protagonist's tenderness, the rainy night scene, the process and the result can all be described wonderfully, making people want to watch it. Haiyuan used to be a scientist, mainly engaged in experimental drugs, so in her opinion, a white rat that cannot resist and can only die silently is the best portrayal of herself, so she will compare herself to a white rat. Diggou, because she is in the winery, has long been a "dead person". It is irreversible because she feels that the drug she made has become the "best killing tool" in the winery, and she has made mistakes that she cannot get rid of. These can all be written. Instead of writing it as a tsundere little loli, being followed by a neurotic person with no idea at all, it is very wasteful to describe this kind of plot. The necessary foreshadowing is not written at all, but it will make the characters of Haiyuan and Su Wei completely broken. According to the plot of leaving the different world together at the beginning, it was absolutely impossible for Haiyuan to agree to it, because she had "the idea of ​​death" at the time, so whether it was for atonement or "comfort", she would not leave Conan alone, but in the end she left with him. The node of change was not written out, and the reason for the change was not written out. I only saw that she was very dependent on the protagonist, as if she had become a dragster who avoided responsibilities and her heart. Superpowers are just tools needed for the plot, not a master key to changing people's hearts. Complain a few words to Su Wei when you have nothing to do to show that you have a sense of existence? Author, if you don't describe enough and deliberately complain, it will only make her character stinky. Fortunately, there is an original work to protect her character. If she is considered an "original character", then your book can be said to have collapsed the moment she complained. What to write below and how to write it depends on the author yourself. Don't overwhelm the character. The Haibara Ai you describe is "later character" and is arranged in the "early plot" in a very far-fetched way. You have already overwritten the Conan plot. Don't make a quick transition. A quick transition is meaningless. If you write like this, you will not be happy writing it, and the readers will not feel comfortable watching it. This is also a big loss. Isn't it? Don't add characters to the book for "plot needs", but add "plot direction" for "character personality". The previous writing method will only destroy the book. The author please think more about how to write next.

I really like the creativity. The author said that the previous book was too bad... This one is also really bad...