Start Fighting from a Ball of Phosphorus Fire

After reading books for so many years, I am very confident in my vision. I can't say that your book is flawless, but it's definitely not bad. The writing and characters are excellent. The only shortcoming is that it's slow in the early stages. But this kind of rhythm is a common problem with this kind of subject matter, and it is indeed quite challenging. Because of this, this kind of books often have a lot of experience. The most classic ones are: Mortals, and "Surveying the Sky with a Heart." I still remember that when I first watched "Red Heart Patrolling the Sky", I was astonished. The characters, plot and rhythm were all so good that I couldn't fault it at all. However, even such a masterpiece was facing difficulties at the time. While writing the article, the author of "Chixin" talked about his troubles and encouraged himself, and gradually he persisted. As of now, it is already number one and number two on the list. In comparison, you have only written so little, and you haven't even developed your world view yet, and you are delusional about achieving good results. That is indeed a bit too ambitious, and things are far from desperate. Having said that, I kind of want to knock you on the head to wake you up. Okay, the above are words of comfort, then I am going to talk about how to strengthen it if I continue to write (ps please cooperate with me who is trying hard to show off). First of all, the plot has developed so far that it is too simple. The cool points in the article all come from the slaps in the face after the strength is improved. The improvement in strength is too rapid and the face-slapping routines are obvious, which makes the cool points not enough. If you want to modify it, you must first weaken the role of emotional values. For example, upgrading experience requires more and more, which drives the protagonist and creates new conflicts. Only new conflicts can create sparks. Otherwise, how can we make trouble if we are all hiding in the mountains? The new contradictions can be wild and imaginative, such as how many days later you will die, or be captured by others, or the younger brother is a schizophrenic, not only a fun-loving person but also a big pervert, who transforms into the one on the night of the full moon. This part is actually a very interesting point. The gameplay of Leziren is really easy to get out of the circle. For example, in the first sequence, the king has mercy on you, there are similar gameplays. Again, the worldview is weak. The main manifestation of this problem is that the protagonist's sense of substitution is not strong, because he does not "explore" and has no goals, so the corresponding reader's sense of substitution is not strong either. Writing this, I also have a headache. Writing a book is indeed not easy. I hope the author will persist and work hard.

Why not start the struggle from a pile of rice fields? According to legend, in the ancient years, when the heaven and earth first opened, the Hongmeng still existed, and all living things in the world were supreme gods and demons. But suddenly one day, a god and demon that looked like a human but had a huge mouth in its chest suddenly twitched in its abdomen, and a lump...

The protagonist is suitable for possessing the red and white band. He can go to people's weddings and funerals to get his fill.

Is the tiger called a ghost? People who are eaten by tigers are called ghosts.

I feel like the protagonist is a bit like Sui Yang. He feeds on emotions and is in the shape of a will-o'-the-wisp.

According to the initial setting, phosphorus fire is the soul of people, animals, and even insects after death. It can be seen everywhere in the deep forests and is a background creature. It can be easily broken into smaller pieces of ghost fire, or it can be blown away by ordinary people's breath or even the breeze. He has basically no intelligence and only knows how to unconsciously chase around fast walking and running people and animals. In this way, phosphorus fire is harmless and useless, and breaking it is troublesome. It would be normal for the protagonist to be easily let go or even ignored. After all, it is too common, just like the cleaning aunt, she subconsciously ignores it. But the protagonist and his two separate soul fires were let go, which seemed deliberate. They could only use the protagonist's aura to forcefully explain it, which was not handled well.

Good guy, I really can't stand it when the natives use numerical values

What's wrong with books nowadays? Without a system, it's impossible to upgrade the protagonist 😅,

I originally thought I could still watch it, but I don't want to watch it because of the system, and eating other phosphorus fires for no reason feels very bottomless. The first phosphorus fire was just to drive him away, and because they are the lowest in the world, they didn't want to eat the protagonist, but the protagonist just went up and ate the other side, and And there is no grudge at all. When chasing, everyone on the other side surrendered, hoping to squeeze in, but the protagonist didn't listen. He is not my holy mother, but I still hope there is some bottom line. Everyone is at the bottom of his ability and has no grievances. And I am also the bottom of the human race, so I really find it difficult.

Why is there so much noise when the protagonist upgrades twice? It's better to do it once or twice. Even a fool knows there's something wrong with it.

，，，，，        ，，       Just like I saw in Konoha's Zerg-based book and Aburame Tetsumaru's book, the chapters where the protagonist teaches his disciples are very good. They weigh the impact of the disciples on themselves, and then let the supporting disciples have their own ideas that are inconsistent with the protagonist's, and finally leave the team, and finally die. It's a natural narrative, from the perspective of the creator

So fun, a little phosphorus fire demon

Before the start goes well, a destined enemy appears! The enemy has figured it out and sent his men down. He's a little bit like Calabash Boy trying to save grandpa. It's weird and unpleasant. Otherwise, he's pretty good. Keep him up.

What won't happen again later is that the protagonist's body is actually those magical bones, and then his body is divided into many parts. If he wants to get his body back, he has to take back the magical bones bit by bit to form his own body. The ending can be seen at a glance when writing the plot in this column.

One thing to say, I always feel that he, the protagonist, is probably Suiyang? ? ?

Huo Huo, don't look back, I am Uncle Tai😏

Just a will-o'-the-wisp, a black dog directly lets you know what it means to be out of breath

It's such a pity that I bought another book to death

If this book continues to be written, it may be able to become a god...

It's a bit outrageous. Taking soul power as a reference, the protagonist's soul power of more than ten years cannot enter the first realm (transformation), while the ghost ghost and the flower demon have more than twenty soul powers. (In addition, ghost upgrades only require soul power to understand, even the Shenma demon has a body.)], And what about Yu Ling? For second-level players, using soul power as a reference, even if there is only a ten-point soul power gap in one level, Yu Ling is several points higher than the two guys above, right? And it is impossible to cut the flower demon to less than twenty with one blow, plus considering the ten-point one level for the first level (if the first level reaches the third level) I wrote about the gap between the two realms, so I'm sorry, I haven't seen it yet). It's understandable to defeat the demon at the cost of a broken arm. After all, he was tricked at the beginning (but an outstanding disciple of the sect was so easy to be tricked to death by leapfrogging...), But later on, when fighting the flower demon, he must be fully intact, his injuries have been healed, and he must be more careful... Of course, it may be because the gap between realms is not big... That's weird! If the protagonist's soul power is high, the opponent can directly cut one or two points, and according to the words of the newbie guide·Suspected Identity is not simple·Phosphorus Fire·Amber, if the soul power is a little bit higher, it will be awesome. If the ghost is so awesome and injured, won't the soul power be cut once it drops? Then there is the problem of eyesight. When you see the protagonist, you will say "Eh~ little Yakuza", and when the protagonist is not in sight, you will say "Holy shit! Boss". Well, of course, there is an explanation for this misunderstanding, but that's not what we are talking about. The little follower [Amber] feels the protagonist's change every time. Moreover, the description of the protagonist and Yu Ling after they separated for the first time to increase their soul power said that the before and after comparison showed obvious changes in cultivation (it seems to be Phosphorus Fire's 300-year cultivation? The color is obvious), and it was said that Yu Ling saw it and probably got a sword (of course it emphasized the rapid change) Inside, I just proved that the cultivation level of phosphorus fire is very obvious), but later his junior sister found out that he didn't throw a sword... Damn, this guy must have a soul power higher than that of a ghost. The system danger value is said to be avoided by ordinary people. Of course, it can also be said that you can't feel the cultivation level just by feeling the phosphorus fire through things... Furthermore, Chishan Junbu calculated that the threat sent his men to eliminate the protagonist (why not come in person, maybe he was injured, although he can also eat ghosts to heal, although his life is at stake, even though he is very angry), his men directly attacked the area where the ghosts felt abnormal, killing everything. Although the ants and other things may not have been spared, the two ghosts floating above "can't be them"????, Shit, they were all ranged attacks...  Then there is my explanation of the word "ghost". Well... After all, in this book, tiger demons and ghosts are the same thing, so I wrote about "ghosts" all the time. It feels quite outrageous. When the tiger demon is promoted to the realm of transformation, he is directly promoted to become a ghost... Sigh.       ，??            （！！！），，，

Doesn't anyone think it's strange? I upgraded two levels but my strength and speed didn't increase at all.

This system of adding points based on the surrounding emotion panels greatly satisfies the obsessive-compulsive disorder. The obsessive-compulsive disorder seems quite refreshing; it just repeatedly touts the protagonist's talent, which is very annoying. I hope it can be changed!

Amber is a bit strange, it should be a god

Nice writing, do you have any criminal record?

The setting is novel, it's beautiful and I love watching it.

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