Witcher: I Am Not an Alchemist

Putting aside the subject matter, at least the entry point is very good, but how can I put it, the writing style is so stiff, my God.

The writing is okay, but the writing style is a bit stiff, and I feel like a newbie. It can be seen that I am working hard at writing, but my writing skills need to be improved.

There is nothing wrong with treating the elven people under his command as equals, but if the Scoia'tael don't do anything else, they are a scourge. The Scoia'tael and Israel are on the same page. I have been persecuted as a matter of course, and it is natural for me to harm others. The only difference is that they are just dogs of the Nigerian Empire and can be dealt with at any time; unlike those in the real world who have an American son and can be lawless.

Triss has already had sex with a camel. Isn't it good for Alice who cuts the heart of Hu Shi?

Why do I feel that the book you wrote is very similar to a book I read before? Some contents can be said to be exactly the same.

Toss a coin to your witcher!🤓

Is the author of this book the author of Mysterious Alchemy + Sharingan Demon Hunter?

I have read dozens of chapters so far, and there are a lot of minor problems, but there are no fatal points. I can read it. I am an old bookworm who has read hundreds of books. I will tell the author some of the problems I see. I wonder if the author can see and accept them. 1. The problem of sentence fragmentation in the paragraphs, the sentences are not fluent, and there is basically one problem in a few chapters. 2. The characterization is superficial, and the understanding of the character's personality is insufficient and superficial. 3. The description technique does not match the background of the story and cannot increase the sense of substitution. It feels like reading a modern urban novel. 4. There is too much inner drama, whether it is the protagonist or the supporting role. Not only does it fail to realize the idea of ​​enriching the characters, but it also exposes the author's shortcomings of lack of character understanding and poor writing. These are the main problems I have seen so far. Everyone is welcome to add to it or the author can correct it.

😁Rise up, I'll rely on you to survive from now on

Isn't the territory developed? Earth magic can be a good way to build the territory. The protagonist can engage in industry in his own territory. If he can't build a mobile castle, the Wild Hunt will invade in a few years anyway. In the end, the protagonist's armor can refer to (Warhammer) and (Armor Warrior). The above are my personal suggestions and opinions

The co-authors of the brothers released an update, it's not enough to watch 😍

How to arrange the two hair loss technicians? Are you going to kill him directly this time?

It's okay, it's very thoughtful, but there are too many long dialogues, and some characters talk a lot to themselves, but it's okay.

My hands are too slow

Big update😆

From the Demon Hunter to the Lord of the Empire, they are all excellent products😄

Come on, I voted for another monthly ticket. There are too many posts to read.

When are you going to play in other worlds (Baldur's Gate)? Now I'm bored. Can you show that the protagonist is strategizing and fighting has no technical content? Isn't the protagonist very intelligent? Can the martial arts concept of the previous life be combined with the swordsmanship of this world to form the protagonist's martial arts style? The above are my personal suggestions and opinions

Has the second chapter been corrected today?