Rule-Based Dungeons: Starting with the Bride in the Mirror

Why don't I change my name? It's over. I'm trapped by a beautiful woman and sucked a lot of traffic.

There is a book called "My Wife Is Eight-foot-Eight" with an interesting setting, but it's a eunuch.

This feeling

Can't pass the repeated code?

It is better to delete the books you have sent, as they may affect future book reading by book friends.

To be honest, serious people are attracted by names, like me 🙂

This book is expected to become a god! I won't talk about the good aspects. Let's talk about the problems: 1. The description of the environment is a bit sparse, and the scenes are not detailed enough. For example, the small dungeons "Girl's Country" and "Black Snake" lack detailed descriptions. If each small dungeon goes straight to Huanglong, it will not leave a very deep impression. The point of improvement lies in the description of the environment. For example, in the Kingdom of Women, you can describe in detail how the prince seeks pleasure. If you suppress it first and then expand it, it will not have that shocking effect if it is completed directly. 2. The pace is a bit fast. However, the current market style is to write fast-food and cool articles, and as a new author, there is nothing you can do about it. The progress of the more important dungeons in the future should be slowed down a little, and twists and turns can better retain readers than direct explosions. How to control the rhythm is to use water, but it needs to be done at a good level. 3. From the current point of view, this book is actually very similar to the style of previous online game novels. This theme has been recognized by the market and has created such great gods as Tomato Tang Family San Shao. Now if you want to go for the second wave, you must first stitch the theme, such as mystery and suspense reasoning, and secondly grasp the general direction. It is difficult to move forward just by writing down the copy. You need to improve the pattern and use some tactics. Burying clues and layout in the fairy tale is a good idea, but you must pay attention to synchronization and connection with reality. 4. Xianxia and Xihuan are going to PK to determine the priority. Because it is difficult to please all reader groups, especially since these two are often in opposition. Furthermore, it is not yet clear how the hierarchy in the book is divided. Don't underestimate the leveling thing. This part is actually the real watershed between a masterpiece and a second creation. The strength system is not just about realm or title. The logic behind it truly demonstrates the author's level. For example, I won't go into the old stuff like Zhe Tian Perfect, The Dragon Clan's Word Spirit, Land Gods in the Snow, Best Friend's Series, Feng Huo's Kendo, and Tomato Three Young Masters. This system will determine the height of your book, it is your business card, and you can even rely on one trick to spread all the subsequent books, such as The Third Young Master of the Tang Family. 5. If there is really no way to break through, the next best option is to stick to a certain system and make small changes. You just need to think about what the combat power ceiling is called. For example, this book directly copies the online game in the later stage. The main god just gives the level and treats everyone equally. The final profession relies on strength props and equipment. But like I said, if you write like this, you won't be able to get out. The upper limit is limited and it's hard to get out of the circle, unless you find a way to drive🚗

When will I be able to drive a big car? If I can't drive a big car, wouldn't there be MINI and supercars?😃

Mrs. Bachi

After reading the last book, I found that a small problem with the author is that there are very few long paragraphs in the writing, and they are all short sentences. This is the lack of detailed descriptions I mentioned before. The description of the environment should be long, and the characters' actions, language, and demeanor should also be consistent. But if you look at your writing style, author, one shortcoming is that you divide it into paragraphs too quickly. On the one hand, this shows a rapid change in thinking about writing. On the other hand, the explanatory text is not sophisticated enough. I write immediately when I think of it without thinking about it. It is recommended that you don't rush to post it after you finish it. It will be better to polish it when you re-read it. For example, the psychological description of the environment can be divided into long paragraphs and multiple sentences, and the language, action, demeanor can be divided into short sentences, so that it is detailed and has a sense of hierarchy.