I Raise Evil Spirits in Tokyo

This looks like a detective story about supernatural beings. It is constantly battling wits with the air and is very verbose.

It's a bit long-winded. After a while of analysis and mental struggle, the choice was a reckless one.

. . . Nothing was introduced clearly, there were only a few cards, how dare you, and there were no means of attack at all.

Isn't there the evil spirit that keeps returning to Ola Ola from time to time?

The update is too slow. The main character has been grinding for a long time. Isn't this update speed a problem?

Although, but, maybe, maybe, probably. . . . The fear of Moji is gone, it was quite scary originally.

The writing is strange and weird. Not only is it verbose, but it also has a big problem with grasping the rhythm of the overall plot. The first few chapters are okay, but after more than ten chapters, the secrets start to show up.

It feels very awkward, neither scary nor exciting, but the subject matter is good

The first three chapters focus on the description of daily societies, leaving out the most important cheats, which are used to play mysteries. Who likes to see you write about a few men playing judo? You can just mention it in one stroke. You have to focus on it.

Why does a protagonist whose mother is Chinese have his surname Lin? When he was young, he had to change his surname when he got married.

It's too complicated to write, and it's a lot of verbosity.

Too little, please write more😭😭😭

It's anticlimactic, but the rhythm and plot arrangement of what's written later are not as good as what's written before. The key point is that it's too slow 🙂