I'm in Tokyo, My Achievements Are Not Right

I came in after reading the introduction. After reading it, I found out that this is a book about fighting against nuclear war. The introduction is about physical resistance to nuclear war. It turns out that the content in it is either writing novels or making games. What will others see when they read your introduction? It would be hell if you don't hit the streets like this.

The protagonist is too stupid. You can buy it after making money in college. After the Plaza Accord, those colleges are also short of money, or they may choose special recruitment if their judo scores are good. It is the most time-consuming to take the exam to meet the protagonist's conditions.

It's too complicated. I have to write an entertainment line, a business line, and a supernatural line, which seems a bit out of place.

I have almost read the latest chapter, and I can only say that the concept is very good, and the cheats are also very interesting. But it doesn't hide its flaws. There are many bad points in this book, and it lacks in character creation. This is a problem of writing skills. Apart from the protagonist, there are no other characters that leave a sufficient impression, and even the protagonist's behavioral logic is not smooth enough. Are there any better advantages in writing? I think there is. The author's description of Jiu-Jitsu is more detailed, and the names of various moves are also written more smoothly. At least it is enough to fool me, a layman. But I have to mention the biggest poisonous point of this article. From the beginning of the book when the author conceived the protagonist to be targeted by a gang of gangsters, this part of the plot was completely torn apart from the main plot, especially after the protagonist was separated from the group alone. The protagonist behaved like a reckless man from the beginning to the end. It's really hard to understand why someone, after setting fire to a crime scene, insists on staying there until the police find him before running away. If the protagonist escaped directly from this place, wouldn't there be a situation where he would abandon his raincoat and be chased by the police later? Later in the plot, a police kendo master meets the protagonist one-on-one, and the protagonist readily admits all the facts of the crime. Even if the author has written that the police did not have any recording equipment on them, this plot is also a wisdom. I don't want to dispel the police's suspicion of myself, but directly confirm the facts of my crime. I don't think this is the logic that a normal person should have. Does the protagonist really like and enjoy the feeling that the police are always watching him? My current evaluation is that the author wants to write about too many people, but firstly, the writing power is not enough to control it, and secondly, there is not enough thinking about the direction of the plot. The author can think of the fact that the previous plot will lead to the subsequent plot, which is good and can echo back and forth. However, the author has not thought about why he wrote the previous intellectual plot. If he did not write it, there would be no need to bring about subsequent troubles. Moreover, these troubles do not help the growth of the protagonist. They are just troublesome for the protagonist. It is recommended that the author make major changes to some of the plots of this book, otherwise it will be difficult. That's it, best wishes.

It's not enough for your protagonist to remember only one frame. Many novels have this shortcoming. A masterpiece needs more than just a frame. There are too many good outlines and frames. If you have no writing style and no connotation, you will not be able to become a success.

The writing is too messy, there is no main line, martial arts, writing novels, starting a business, tutoring for college exams, gangsters, all crowded together, everything has to happen in one day, as if someone is urging me, life is divided into stages.

Not bad, not bad, a bit nice, but will the force value become more and more outrageous? For example, the previous urban supernatural flow and ancient martial arts flow. There are also hidden families, innate masters, etc.? Then what about ninja stealth, onmyoji, western genetic warriors, werewolves and vampires, Thai head-dropping, curses, etc.?

I want to know what the author was thinking when he wrote Chapter 28. I just can't bear it anymore. The protagonist is of such high caliber, fighting a group of people with bare hands, while others have knives and guns. Can't the protagonist learn archery and then fight? Can't you buy a knife? If you are afraid of leaving evidence, then why not at least grab the blade with your bare hands? Moreover, when the gun custodian was found, the first thing he did not look for was a gun. The author simply wrote that the villain leader had a pistol with no bullets. The protagonist had already killed all the bullet custodians and thrown away the bullets. Is this logic written by normal people? Author, if you didn't write it well and just skipped it, or skipped the Spring and Autumn writing style, or just set the villain up to have no gun in his hand, what the hell did you write? Have you read it yourself?

It's generally not good. In the early stage, he clearly knew that someone was targeting him, but the protagonist stupidly waited for the opponent to attack before fighting back. He defeated a group of thugs and then stupidly developed again, as if nothing had happened. Not to mention eradicating the roots, at least continue to investigate. The protagonist just ignored it. What kind of plot is this? Like a fool, before After a face-to-face investigation showed that the underworld was targeting him, he just let it go as if nothing was wrong. Later, the gangsters hit him with a car and kidnapped him, but after dealing with them, they still acted like nothing happened. I am really speechless😓. Normal people would figure it out first. Others have knocked on the door more than once. He still has to act like nothing is wrong. He really has to hit the protagonist before he moves, right?

I'm halfway through this book now, and I'm quite tired from reading it. It should be said that the main line is too messy, there is no priority, here and there, this and that, and is this world a low-level martial arts world or what kind of world? When I saw the introduction, I thought it was a fighting upgrade stream, but it slowly turned into a literary and artistic stream, and then inexplicably started an urban business stream, a hodgepodge

I've read Chapter 4 and it's a mess. Did you write about self-pleasure?

I'm afraid I have schizophrenia.

Why does the extraordinary business of entertainment feel so strange? 😰

You were not born in 1980, so you don't know much about that era. Also, is this a world with supernatural beings? Don't end up with a one-person-only-spelling, one-person-reading type. Basically, you don't have to watch the dragon king, the assassin, the mercenary king, and then return to another world. The rest are basically pretentious, and I'm a little tired of watching them.

At first, I was wondering why this book was not placed in the light novel section. The protagonist kept thinking about the hatred between the country and the family. I knew that this must have nothing to do with the relaxing daily life I wanted. All I can say is that I am superficial.

This book is the best Japanese book that I have read recently. The plot of the Ji Dao has been changed, and the power system is as bad as the Naruto books. If you persevere, you will get good results.

The writing is good, but it feels like it's going in the wrong direction. It shouldn't be so messy, there must be a clear line of advancement.

So ugly

It's easy to say, I only had it for more than half a month, and suddenly it disappeared.

This is another slow-motion battle. At the moment of the battle, the protagonist is thinking about the countermeasures again and again. Damn, this is considered a top superpower. He is learning Judo.