The Red Moon Rises Again

Prodigal son, prodigal son, there is really no need to insist on eating this bowl of Cthulhu. And lustful, greedy, this kind of character is really outdated 😅 This kind of person who has a lustful heart but no lustful courage is worse than someone who has no lusty heart, or has a lustful courage 😅 And it is too "two", so it is better to invest in the two-dimensional sector, so that more people may be on the airwaves. The Prodigal Son is still suitable for writing Western fantasy, and the Western fantasy story system is quite good. Of course, the Western fantasy combat power system of the Prodigal Son is too 'traditional'. Extraordinary power can often be blocked by mortal metal without extraordinary enchantment 😅. As a result, the combat power system always feels chaotic, sometimes extraordinary, sometimes mortal. 😥 At the legendary level of Yalari, it is exhausting to fight those beasts without extraordinary abilities. In Sunless Moon, the opening copy was almost wiped out by the physical rules of the 'mortal' level. Spore parasitism and the like may indeed be a catastrophe according to our physical rules. But according to the extraordinary system, there is really no reason why spore parasitism should be a disaster. Your shield can't even block out spores, and the poisonous mist and the like are simply invincible. 😅 Especially since the protagonist is the favored one of the gods. If the power of the gods cannot handle a few spores, then these gods are too weak.

This chapter has a very big problem. The woman just said that you should believe in signs. Even if you are over-sensitive a hundred times, you can't be dull once, otherwise you will die. Then the woman said, "Is it your illusion that he glanced in this direction?" Do you think her answer makes sense?

Natalie Angel

I'm speechless. Pig's feet are always setting up flags for me. I'm obviously a weakling. All kinds of monsters and monsters are setting up flags with pig's feet next to me? Is this a time traveler? Come on, as anyone who reads novels knows that as long as the flag is not set, it will be gg in the next minute, or it will be gg after a while! Many places are very unreasonable! Various explanations are too reluctant

There is really no need to write an opening bet. The main character's purpose is to survive, not to bet. This writing is a bit putting the cart before the horse. In addition, the previous dialogue of the female police officer gave the reader a good sense, but this bet directly lowered the senses, creating a sense of tearing. The female police officer should leave directly when the protagonist still wants to investigate, because the protagonist does not listen to advice, and death is a personal act But the female police officer bets with the protagonist. According to official rules, this behavior is enough for her to take off her police uniform If the protagonist dies or is seriously injured after betting, the seriousness of the situation is not just a matter of losing her job.

Chapter 19: The author and I have different views

I think adding a one-month countdown at the beginning is a failure. From a psychological point of view, Zhang Chi needs to be moderate. If you let the protagonist solve the five-hour countdown, it is best to design a plot that can relax the reader. Either it is to fuse a certain contained object to obtain the burning ability, or to kill the villain. This is the climax design of many books. As a result, you immediately added a one-month countdown. My evaluation is almost good. I wouldn't be able to write without a countdown, right? In my opinion, writing a book is similar to making a game. On the basis that your writing style is difficult to change, the plot design should best meet the needs of human psychology. Immerse yourself in writing regardless of the reader's psychological feedback, and don't expect the reader to give you any performance feedback.

But! The problem is that the author doesn't know how to write at all, which makes it very disgusting for the readers. In the early stage, the female police officer kept causing trouble. After the trouble was done, she was like a giant baby and couldn't solve it. It was all up to the protagonist to wipe her butt. The supporting female aristocratic lady is even more outrageous. She is a completely unfamiliar person and has even been met a few times. The protagonist accompanies her to sacrifice to the evil god to save her soul, and uses his own life force to heal her. I really wanted to throw up when I saw this.

Both the title introduction and the beginning are very attractive to me, at least to my taste. But the writing skills are very poor. It really ruins everything. The description of the environment is actually okay, but the characterization is really bad (The female voice of the system, the dialogue between the protagonist and the police are really awkward)

The Prodigal Son, when are you going to write a western fantasy? I have read Yala several times and I still haven't found a meal replacement. I particularly like this kind of adventure novel, just like watching anime. Unknowingly, I was immersed in a different world. There is no need to step out of the comfort zone 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭