Zhutian: from the Beginning of Fengyun Becoming a Demon

In Journey to the West, anyone with nine orifices can cultivate immortality.

Every thought comes out one by one, here and there. The plot has no coherence. It is more of an outline than a novel.

The modifications are so messy that I doubt you have understood the setting of Fengyun. If your writing skills are not up to par, don't mess with the modifications. The most awesome thing you see when traveling through the world is the powerful remnant soul of the world of immortality.

First of all, I suggest you delete the blood orchid part in the front, it is completely redundant Then, the plot setting is really not good. You go out to find something for the first evil emperor to restrain the demonic nature. I guess it is Bingxin Jue or Dragon Vein. How long have you been looking for? And are you sure this is what you are looking for?

There are a lot of inconsistencies. The initial attack was suddenly counterattacked. He said he was looking for a solution for the master, but then he actually ran to take care of Nie Feng. For example, could you tell me that he went to the dragon vein to solve the demonic nature of the evil emperor 😥, behaved confusingly, lost consciousness in Lingyun Cave, and then appeared by the stream? ? , Can you passively teleport, or does Huo Qilin want to wash it all and eat it?

There are too many modern words, the character of the protagonist is like a loser, the tone of speech is no different from that of a loser, and he always makes a fuss. What a fool

In a mess, Xiongba asked Ni Bodhisattva twice for approval. The first time was before meeting King Nie Ren, and then he took King Nie Ren King's son back to the Tiandihui. The matter of fire happened after Nie Feng and Bu Jingyun came of age. There was an interval of more than ten years.

In the past, it was necessary to have all five elements in order to practice cultivation, but now, only a single spiritual root is the way to go.

The author, the real devil, can control his own desires!

Well. . Going against the wind and going with the wind and waves is not interesting.

The writing is poor and boring. I only read three chapters and have no desire to continue reading.

Is this routine still popular now? Not interesting

Too many modern vocabulary seriously affects reading

Can foundation building destroy mountains and seas? It's really just to improve cultivation.

Although the wind and clouds have swept through thousands of armies, the force of the sword can cut through Mount Huashan. It can't be faked like a hundred-meter sword.