Red Mansion Full of Spring in the Garden

It's okay in all aspects But it's not cool, it's not good, it's annoying Why don't you just state it in the marriage certificate? Come to grab family property? Counterattack, I want it to be more exciting, there are several pictures, the maid is gossiping, slaps in the face The Red Mansion is about the girls, the interaction with the various golden hairpin maids, daily life is so exciting! It's not that there's no fighting or anything like that. You have to distinguish priorities There's nothing cool about it. A lot of Red Mansion novels are similar to yours Put it on a bookshelf and observe.

Traveling back in time six years in advance, relying on Lin's father to build a large chamber of commerce, and writing off his backer Lin's father to death just after taking the imperial examination?

The Marquis reward mentioned at the beginning was cut into several merits and added up to become a count. More than seventy chapters have not yet been sealed, and he is acting as an identity that is nothing. Does the author really feel comfortable writing like this? The qualitative change of identity in the ancient setting is the key to the fun. It's so disgusting to drag you down.

Pretending to be a pig, why are you afraid that people will find out if you have a marriage certificate?

You have established a chamber of commerce in the past 6 years? Lin is still dead. Your chamber of commerce's protective power is not good enough. He is really a pig teammate. If there is a system, you can make him angry enough to untie him.

Author? It's not even fun at all! How do you write it? Isn't the purpose of fan fiction to make up for the regrets and pleasure of the original work? It's okay to show off! If you have the strength to show off, that's called showing off! The male protagonist also has some strength! Why are you still so rubbish! I can't stand it anymore

Just support Baochai, who is the protagonist of the fucking novel. Does marrying have to depend on family background? Time travel is the biggest problem. Sister Bao's character is a good candidate for a real wife in ancient times. Sister Lin, a heroine with many personalities, is really not suitable for a real wife.

To be honest, Baochai is not a good match for this powerful protagonist. She does not lack her family's wealth or her talents. She also has to bear the burden of her dirty brother and the Wang Jia family's rotten relatives. It would be better to pass it on to the big-faced Baochai, and then she will be a wife and have a hat.

Updates are slow and the content is poor. Why do you do both? How can you achieve good results?

It was too watery and obviously slowed down the pace. There was basically no progress in the plot for a few days.

There is a "Champion of the Red Mansion" next door, and he kept filling more than 300 chapters. In the end, no one read it, and he became a eunuch. The author should take this as a warning.

What I wrote above is very good. There are so many chapters to describe it. I thought it was at least a little bit of fun, but it turned out to be so anticlimactic.

Your fiancée was bullied, where are you? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?

The opening design to kill Jia Zhen was okay, but I didn't understand the idea of ​​throwing wires into the latrine. There were also big loopholes in drilling holes in rockeries, and there was no real or fake cover. But this officer was also a confused officer. At least the police and the police would have to examine the body. The ancient investigative techniques were not bad. This was by no means a mere collision. There were external reactions to electrocution and the death of the corpse from behind, but it was more reasonable to combine it with the later attempts to cut the knight and make the fake come true.

So far it looks pretty good. . The story is well told. Not too verbose.

The multiple threads of the plot feel very messy, causing two or three things to come up before the last thing is finished. In the end, it is not enough to satisfy the audience, and the viewers can't get out of it. In addition, the background explained in the early stage is too many and complicated, which makes me feel like I am reading a multi-thread narrative composition. It may be interesting to focus on it, but the author has stretched the threads too long, making it more and more boring.

Compared to me, who can't even be considered a provocateur, you're doing quite well. I'm just a part-time coder, so it would be best if I could have a reader. I can write three thousand words a day without me. Just keep your original intention and entertain yourself.