Song of France: the Executioner's Glory

Please don't be a eunuch. It's not easy to have legal reform. I'll give you the votes.

I have to say that I am really lucky to find a book about the French Revolution with such a pure taste. However, due to the obsessive-compulsive disorder of an old bookworm, I still want to give the author some advice (and offer a reward of 10,000 points as a sign of sincerity). First of all, I can see that the author wants to play some jokes, which I also think are very good. For example, adding elements of Assassin's Creed is very suitable, and adding the concepts of Akatsuki and Pain is also acceptable. However, when a book about French history suddenly appears with a Japanese-style name, it is a little weird. The concept is good, but personally I still care about the sense of conflict, which will instantly take me out of the situation created by the author. Since the problem has been pointed out, I should give a solution and some suggestions for the author's reference (you don't have to listen to me, and don't feel pressured) The name problem is actually easy to solve. Akatsuki is translated into French as aube, which means dawn. Personally, I don't think it is a big problem to use "Akatsuki" from the protagonist's perspective, but from other people's perspective, maybe "Dawn" can be mentioned. In my personal opinion, it can make the plot more integrated. Pain is also dealt with in a similar way. Pain means pain in English and bread in French. Judging from the current plot, it is obvious that the protagonist uses English pronunciation, otherwise other people will not find it strange. Then this point can be extended to make some people who know English suspect that there is a British behind this organization. In addition, the bread aspect can also be extended to focus on the food and clothing of the common people, hoping that everyone can eat bread. And this can echo the previous story when Bami met Bami for the first time, and Bami was eating bread, and after meeting the protagonist, the protagonist helped these little beggars to eat. Finally, this is a more imaginative extension (you can regard it as my nonsense). Since the name of the organization is called Dawn and the boss is called Bread, then other cadres may use breakfast as a nickname, such as milk, croissant, coffee, etc. After entering the political arena, they can also be called breakfast party members (?

Is France an old revolutionary area? Haha

Double guns, look at this!

Overall, it's pretty good. It's just that Akatsuki actually plays a role in Fa Ge. A reminder for latecomers: If you want to watch a documentary-oriented work, then you don't have to read it. If you're just looking for fun and the new organization that can accept the protagonist is called Akatsuki, codenamed Payne, then continue reading.

Brief comment: The beginning is not bad, and it can be seen that the author still has the ability to draw materials, but the subsequent writing is too whimsical and does not establish a solid narrative structure and character logic, but it is already better than most starting point novels. It is suggested that it is best to write a character biography for each character to focus on the narrative. In addition, many words and sentences need to be further optimized. For this point, you can refer to the French Revolution novel written by Lucky Sura outside the station.

The beginning is good, the weak and evasive father, the strong and wise grandmother, and the protagonist who is not afraid of danger are all established. But after meeting Louis XVI, the plot drifted away, and the brotherhood became even more abrupt. Either the protagonist takes his time and gradually understands Voltaire's thoughts, or sudden changes force him into the whirlpool of political struggle. The originally brave and beautiful neighbor girl turned out to be stupid. Even if it is to advance the plot, she should not be smart. It can only be said that the author's writing skills are not strong enough.

There is no sense of French speaking. . . Or is there less French local flavor? After reading it for a long time, there is no difference between the exchange with Seris. Can you write more about French customs and the like? Or French jokes, how the French mock foreigners, etc.

To be clear, executioners are a highly discriminated profession in France, and they are still poor. Such a profession and family background cannot develop in France, a place where family and status are important, unless after the industrial revolution, capitalists replace

So far, it's generally good, but Akatsuki is a bit too dramatic, and the assassin is a bit off, but okay.

Reprinted from Zhizhihu

Dan Bell

The author is very thoughtful. There really is such a family of French executioners in history.

Is this Jeanne still the heroine? 🤨

Risking beheading for a neighbor is incomprehensible

Can the protagonist change the fate of Louis XVI's children?

Emperor of France

It's been a long time since I've written about the European royal family.

It's best to read the supplement of Octopus Yida's French Revolution series. It is the French people who are great, not the emperor and aristocrats.

The writing reminds me of the feeling of reading foreign masterpieces many years ago, like reading Hemingway

Shire

In the end, does the protagonist want to become emperor?

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I would like to ask where the author obtained the details of the execution? Very detailed. Which book is it from? Can you share it, thank you😄

He should probably find another country to marry... Dan Beier's status is not enough

Does the author know anything about the wars of that era?

By the 18th century, mortars had been miniaturized and accompanied by infantry. They could be carried by two people. As for the reason why modern striker-type ones were not found, it is completely due to the lack of technical level. Therefore, this cannot be solved by using imagination. It can be regarded as a golden thigh for the protagonist.