Konoha: Menma Uzumaki Wants to Be the Protagonist

Shui's 🦆p, originally the best selling point was the encounter between Menma and Naruto, but it ended up being inexplicably more than ten battles. Finally, when it was time to explain the whole thing, Shui started dragging him out to be the Riddler. Why is there such a nice name? It's more real than seeing it with one's own eyes. You have to beat me up for just one sentence. This is a novel, not a TV movie or anime, okay?

The biggest problem with this book is not just water. The real problem is that the author's writing is incoherent. He has inserted a lot of his own complaints, and there are also many meaningless random insertions. For example, when fighting Obito earlier, the battle was too long, but there was very little real battle content, and the few unknown bandits seemed very disconnected... These are common mistakes for novel novices. The author's ideas are okay, but his control over writing is not very good. I can only hope that the author can write more and correct these problems.

The author is very suitable to be a Naruto TV animation, because you are as good as TV animation. You can write an episode with a small plot, not to mention that you are still the Riddler. Every little thing drags on for several chapters. It makes me vomit. The part I subscribed to is uncomfortable to watch.

Fuck, after all this time, I haven't done a lot of bad things like a clown, and Naruto didn't even hit him when he came to this world. Since we have to have a relationship with him, we have to leave anyway, so why should he reveal his identity if he has nothing to do?

I've read more than 80 chapters, but I still can't hold it in anymore I think the highlight of this book is the emotional scene with Hinata and Naruto's reaction after coming My dear, you didn't write a single word, what a shame, if I hadn't been studying late at night and had nothing to do, I really wouldn't have read this book

When writing a novel, you don't want the protagonist to be someone else, but you want a substitute character to become the protagonist. If you don't understand this at all, don't write it.

I have no desire to read it at all. You wrote about Menma who traveled to the main world when he was a child, and the Akatsuki organization and Naruto are fateful enemies. It is more interesting than this.

This book has a good idea, but the author's writing is so bad that it's a pity to throw it away. After reading it for a while, you can't put it down. Whether it's daily life, battles, or plot advancement, it's very confusing and uncomfortable to read.

After watching 30 pictures, the pig's feet look like a child's, and then I don't feel any pleasure at all.

Author, your idea is good, but if you haven't established a good character, can't you write about the normal mentality of a time traveler after fusion? It means not being merciful but having a kind heart, and then considering the choice of doing things according to the personality. Now I write sometimes cruelly and helpfully, sometimes coldly and rationally, and sometimes proudly with my hands on my hips, which makes me feel a bit disconnected.

I hope the author can write more scenes between Naruto and Menma, so that Menma, Minato and others can travel through the Fourth War period and help Naruto defeat Obito and Motor.

Thank you readers for your strong support😭

Everyone has commented and replied that Serizawa has read it, 😭 The status of the second volume has dropped significantly, 😭 I am willing to admit that I have worked hard to adjust the rhythm It is all mentioned in the new video. [Water Monster Serizawa's Chat: Bring back the state and rhythm!

Can't you be more insightful? At least two-thirds of the whole book is water.

It's okay to read online novels with a little bit of philosophy, and it's okay to read some private stuff, but in any case, it should be enjoyable. I can only say that modern people can't understand things like yours. I'm not happy where I should be, I'm the Riddler where I should be direct, I've been embarrassed where I shouldn't be for ten chapters, you really are, I'm speechless

Let's build a Q&A forum. If you have any questions, you can ask them below. I will reply promptly when I see them 😭

The writing style and character descriptions of the previously scheduled Tsukuyomi World are very attractive to me. Hinata's contrasting personality is also more vividly written, and the character dialogue is in line with the original character design style. From the intersection of the main world and the limited monthly reading world, it started to feel like a different author, the character dialogue began to jump out, and the inner narration of the character from a God's perspective began to appear and was too dense. The overall reading experience did not feel that it supplemented the plot or setting, but the immersion was repeatedly interrupted. There is no transition or plot arrangement in the plot. The two worlds meet. When Menma meets, he acquiesces that Naruto is his younger brother. He always refers to himself as his older brother in his words, which made me confused. This resulted in some foot-picking descriptions that I felt a little awkward. For example, (I should be the one to comfort you, little brother), (Dad would blame me as the elder brother if he knew it), "It seems that he has also been infected by his stinky brother" and other asides. After reading it for two days, I only saw the end of the first fight with Obito. The characterization and pacing of the limited Tsukuyomi world made me think it would be a good book. There may be a lot of points that I couldn't pick up on in the middle period. At the moment, I can't stand the escaping dialogue and extravagant descriptions. I will try to read it after taking it slow. I hope the author will get better as he writes.

Road to the Ninja has just been released, it's not going to attract a lot of attention

To be honest, I was really attracted to it in the early stage, whether it was the restoration of Menma's character or the feeling of being in control behind the scenes, but it was outrageous to become a kingly and passionate person from the middle stage.

I thought the author had watched Naruto, but I didn't expect that he still had only a little knowledge. There is no silver ryo in the currency in Naruto. It is a unit of banknotes. "Liang" is a banknote unit, which is the same unit as "yuan". The maximum number is two hundred taels. Many authors who know little about Naruto think that the currency in Naruto is silver ryo

Disadvantages: The main line and branch lines are not prioritized The bad thing about this book is that the author treats the branch lines as the main line. I can't tell whether the main character is Menma or Naruto. If all the words describing Naruto were removed, this would have been reduced by a third to a quarter. And in the same chapter, Naruto's world accounts for half and the protagonist's plot accounts for half. Wow, this look is really disgusting.

It was so frustrating to see Shiren. He knew clearly that he was coming, but he still got caught.

I remember that the third Hokage was Danzo, the leader of the root was Hiruzen, and Minato was just a special jounin, not an elite jounin.