Martial Arts, Starting from the Parting Hook

It's a rare good novel, I hope it can be kept.

The protagonist who can even let go of Long Xiaoyun and his son, Lin Xianer, is not a good person, but can only be regarded as a double standard. The first few chapters of this book are very exciting, but the author can't stand it. Saying "it's tasteless to eat, it's a pity to discard" is all praise for this book. It was completely forced to follow the plot, and the plot that could be written in one chapter had to be squeezed into more than ten chapters.

The biggest poisonous point is the suppression of strength. Some systems even forcefully suppress it, and now the strength is on par with Gong Jiu. Ten years wasted. Ten years ago, the protagonist could beat Shangguan Jinhong to death. Ten years wasted. Now he is an ordinary master who is as good as the protagonist. So disgusting

This realm division is very discouraging! Nature and nurture are enough.

The writing is poor, the rhythm is messy, the protagonist cannot be established, and the author only has a junior high school diploma.

Another protagonist who doesn't mind becoming a eunuch just to practice martial arts. . . The author is a talent

🥵 Just open a single chapter and explain some problem settings to readers? ? ? Author, you have to write a separate chapter to explain these issues to readers! ! ! Haven't you realized that what you need to explain is exactly what you didn't write well? Do other excellent novels by great writers include individual chapters to explain the settings to readers? You explain to the readers why you didn't kill Long Xiaoyun and his son, why you didn't kill Lin Xianer, and why Bai Xiaosheng's matter has nothing to do with the protagonist! ! ! Why are you explaining this to your readers? ? ? ! ! ! Because most readers hope that the protagonist will kill them, hope that the protagonist will be happy and uninhibited! It's better for you, you insist on arguing with readers! ! ! And then you will write a separate chapter to explain to readers the issues of nature and nurture in martial arts? ? ? Why explain? Have Zhe Tian, ​​Mortal, Dou Po, etc. Explained his realm to readers? Because your writing is not good and the readers do not accept your setting, you are forced to explain to the readers! ! ! Many authors know they are wrong but do not correct it! ! ! Same goes for this author! ! ! Always remember, when you want to open a single chapter to explain some problems, then these are the areas that your novel has not dealt with well, go and revise it! ! !

In fact, the quality of current online articles can indeed be judged from the three golden chapters. Most current authors have no control at all and often show what their level is and what their concepts are from the beginning. Even this article starts directly from Xingyun Village, under Long Xiaoyun, and you can see too many things. So don't have any illusions

Martial arts are originally fairy tales for adults. They don't describe rivers and lakes, martial arts, Lao Moji's chores, nothing can you talk about it?

"Since it is a hook, why is it called separation?" "Because this hook will cause separation no matter what it hooks. If it hooks your hand, the human hand will be separated from the wrist; if it hooks your foot, your foot will be separated from the leg." "If it hooks my throat, I will be separated from this world. "Yes." "Why do you use such a cruel weapon?" "Because I don't want to be forced to say goodbye to the one I love." "You really understand?"

The previous content is good, but the climax in these two chapters is like shit. I give up this way and that way. I was almost beaten to death by Shangguan Jinhong. I didn't rely on martial arts but relied on Gu to survive. It's said that if you hold back a big move, the result will be shit. Once you use it, Shangguan Jinhong will know it. He probably relied on the system's numerical values ​​to kill him. In the end, he said he would stop being a human being and just go do shit. What I wrote before was good, but now it's become shit

When I read The Day After Tomorrow, I knew this book was not suitable for me.

I don't know why the author would consider suddenly suppressing the protagonist's strength. Can't you find the problem even if you look at the zero chapter reviews of the 50-50 chapters?

When I read about Long Xiaoyun deceiving Li Xunhuan and helping him, and talking about showing kindness, I knew it was rubbish and a waste of the theme of the ancient dragon world.

Add some characters and tone of voice, otherwise it will feel lifeless, and it will feel like you are writing in a notepad, not a novel.

This is garbage. The writing is nonsense. I can't even understand the basic levels of martial arts.

The brotherhood between Long Xiaoyun and Li Xunhuan, and the love between Lin Shiyin and Long Xiaoyun are all written. What can I say? I haven't read the original work, so I probably read the plot from other fans.

Your uncle, Long Xiaoyun is still an innate master? How about playing?

The protagonist's desires are very weak. And it often disappears for several chapters, which I don't like very much.

What was written was a piece of crap, the martial arts skills were not clearly explained, and the data on energy and energy were completely meaningless and just nonsense. No wonder I wrote so much and didn't even get a few replies, which made people confused.

The main character of this book goes in a ruthless direction to practice cultivation. The further back he goes, the less interesting he becomes, and he can no longer even pretend to be fake.

When I see innateness, I can't stand it anymore. In the past, Gu Long didn't have the term innateness, and there was no need for innateness.

Not enough refreshing, but a lot of poison. Suppress the protagonist and cheat everyone in the world.

This book originally looked very exciting, but the performance of the somewhat boring protagonist was not lively and full enough. Whether it was the means or the intelligence and strategy, it felt very forced. Take into account this person's emotions and that person's feelings. It's like you owe someone something. The most important thing is that the protagonist has no direction, whether he is seeking himself or the world, and there is no clear explanation in the story. The exciting scenes of the protagonist's inner world are not dull. On the other hand, the other supporting characters are very lively and exciting, each with their own characteristics and performance.

Why is there always "~" ahhhhhhhh it's so weird

That Shuiyun old man made a thunderbolt edit

Trash, even a glance at you is superfluous, you are committing suicide slowly.

It turns out to be a holy scripture, extremely poisonous

Currently we see Sun Die and Yuntian meeting. Advantages: The writing and logic are smooth, the IQs of the main characters are still online, the combat power has not collapsed, and the control is still in place. Disadvantages: The plot is relatively bland and nothing exciting. The way the protagonist group handles some things cannot be said to be wrong, but it just feels uncomfortable to watch.

Book friends, is this mixed martial arts? I stopped watching Zongwu. Nowadays, everything written about Zongwu is a mess.