Corruptor of Realms

Brother, I feel that the protagonist's strong character is not brought out. The terrifying feeling of the strong man's own wind pressure and the inhuman atmosphere. Let's have some big scenes, otherwise I will be sorry for the title on the introduction. Come on

The tension expressed in the writing is quite good, and it also has its own ideas. There are many shortcomings. First of all, the first one is that the stacking is too serious. To put it bluntly, it is just watering down. The eloquent 4,000 words actually don't push much of the plot at all. If you write like this, it will be difficult to accumulate results. The second thing is about the selection of materials. Your own writing style and the accumulation of this kind of emotion are very strong. Paired with Harry Potter, this doesn't go very well. It is more suitable for the two-dimensional style, such as traveling to other animation worlds. The third issue is setting. What you originally set is a high-level existence. In game terms, he is a high-level player himself. If he wants to quickly regain his strength, he must climb his original skill tree instead of opening a new track out of nowhere. And I don't understand why the male protagonist wants to defeat the American Magic Guild. The development of the plot conflicts with the original setting. The current situation is very stressful for the male protagonist's growth. You yourself don't push the plot very much. Most of it is just for rhetoric. That's about it, I'll write more when I think of it.

Advantages: The setting is very good, and the overall worldview of Rick and Morty is referenced. The protagonist is like Rick, a Rick who has lost contact with Ruicheng and cannot return, leaving only his conscious body and wandering in a different world. It can be said that he has a clean start with only a brain. The way he behaves is also very ruthless and unpretentious. He does it cleanly and neatly when it's time to do it. It's a bit like Sour Cucumber Rick leaving home empty-handed and using his imagination. Disadvantages: Inadequate expression, lack of excitement, and slow plot advancement. 1. Many ideas only stop at [noun] without explanation. It should be expanded. This is cool. For example, the state of the devil muscleman and the state of thousands of tentacles. Where did these things come from? It is not a lengthy discussion like writing a paper, but it is expressed in a pseudo-scientific way, such as the wizard's magic stimulates human hormone growth, the body size is rapidly stimulated, and the cell telomeres are transformed into tentacles. Or the dark fantasy of the wizard's magic awakening the subconscious side of the human group imitates super ancient monsters. But if it is just a chapter that is suddenly brought out as soon as the butt is slapped, and there is no foreshadowing, it will give people the feeling that the protagonist's actions are completely unpredictable, just like Hallownest, which is suddenly brought out, is as abrupt and deus ex machina. No matter how you say it, it just needs to be reasonable and self-justifying. It should give readers an unclear feeling that the protagonist's actions are well-founded and natural. 2. The characters in the plot of the Harry Potter world are not sufficiently involved. The author wrote a lot of self-created characters, which is also very good and expands the world. However, these people have no background, no foreshadowing, and no emotional basis, so they are very stiff. Whatever the protagonist does to them, they are just ordinary. For example, the American wizard who stole the parchment must have a premise to say that he has friends and a girlfriend who have just graduated and are working as righteousness masters, and everyone has a bright future. Suddenly the protagonist comes to cause trouble. People in the wizarding world are panicked. His family is worried about his job. Then his best friend goes missing at a party. He goes to investigate and is caught and trained by the protagonist. He recalls the feelings of his childhood sweetheart, and then is sent to the Wizards Council blah blah blah. To tear beautiful things into pieces and show them bloody and naked can better reflect the charm of the protagonist. Either the characters in the plot are deeply involved. For example, Newman, the original male protagonist of the movie, was caught by the protagonist and was killed without mercy. During the experiment, the magical animals that Newman cherished were anatomy and transformed, but Newman refused to give in and was hung on the wall to watch. Another example is that the passerby wizard who looks directly at the protagonist is replaced by the original wizard who falls in love with Muggles and can read minds. This can increase the sense of immersion. The original villain boss Grindelwald is the character that the author has mentioned the most, but it feels a bit like shooting in the void, too far away. There are too many passer-by characters, and readers have not gotten to know them as well as the original movie characters, and there are no self-created characters through short stories, so it is a bit boring. 3. The protagonist is not strong enough. This makes the Parliament of Truth useless except for fun. Just like the X-Men Apocalypse immediately found the four knights after his resurrection. War, famine, plague and death. Regardless of loyalty or not, at least the momentum and oppression are there. How can I collect a bunch of subordinates and fight an Auror team myself? Regardless of whether the human body-modified mechanical armor self-destructing tank is useful or not, these subordinates must use it first. The boss face is never so easy to see. Of course, there are also protagonists who are still in the development stage and there are not enough manpower. But it's still growing, and if you don't play well in the jungle, what's the point of always running out to join a group? Isn't it right to just get up first and secretly develop the church to increase the abilities of your subordinates? —————————————— The above is just my personal opinion. Overall, it is very good. I hope the author can write better.

Because it's a new book, it's interesting to read the introduction. It feels a bit like Dr. Chen, The Soul of Negri. I picked out a few chapters and read them with interest. To be honest, I really wasn't interested in the wizarding world at the beginning. The original wizards were too naive and taken for granted. But what the author wrote is quite interesting. Playing with flesh and blood technology is a dimensionality reduction attack on high-dimensional characters. It feels a bit like Chen Angqian's mutant explosion of technology. Looking at the author's intentions later, he plans to run Warhammer 40K, Black Robe, and other places. From the first world, it can be seen that the author has his own ideas. He will not stick to the current world but looks further and has his own development ideas. Then about the character of the protagonist. After reading these chapters, I feel that he is very sane, has goals and abilities, and sounds like a gangster. The author is very diligent in interaction, and I can see that I want to recognize it, but to be honest, this style of painting attracts me (now I like to watch some dark style and farming, there are too many SB stories at the beginning, I can't read them all, and in the end I have to rely on veterans to support them) The protagonist in the end keeps his IQ online, and he can be a "mafia" party or a farming explosive soldier. I am still very optimistic about the ratings.        The point is that you can't be a mother-in-law, just like a water essay. The early stage of Samsara Paradise is completely different from the mid-term stage. A real man depends on fighting hard battles. The most popular ones in Samsara are Su Xiaoqian's really hard boss (really hard) and Su's Art of War, which explodes with AAA troops.        ，，（，boss，，，），，，，， If nothing changes after the impact, then the protagonist will just travel through the ruins, there will be no possibility, and there will be no value in it. I think the greatest value of the Far Universe is the possibility. Only with possibility can there be a gorgeous infinite universe. If we follow the script, and then the protagonist starts to cheat and start hoisting hammers, it is meaningless. It's wonderful to have back and forth. Everyone has their own opinions on this topic. I only said mine. The author can just control his own opinions and doesn't necessarily have to listen to mine. That's pretty much it, let me just say this, this book attracts me for a few points, 1. The protagonist seems to be a wise man, it should be Tian Qiang, an old shady black hand like Su Xiao, the kind who can't beat him if he's darker than him, and who can't beat him if he's not. 2. Technological explosion, I like science fiction, I like all the possibilities of technological development, but I prefer hard science fiction, which is based on existing basic facts and then climbs up. Martial arts Qi has Qi punk, magic also has Dharma technology. The first flesh and blood technology is rooted in the established facts of wizards and is derived from it. I like this tone. 3. There is no more 3. As long as the author does not lose these two points, I will keep pursuing it. I read books now to look at possibilities. A gorgeous world unfolds in front of me, revealing its unique possibilities. In the infinite box, there is infinite development. It is like eating a big watermelon from the bottom of a well in summer. It is like the waving red flag, announcing that no one can lock our dreams. There are 40 million free souls in the new world.

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What kind of Tang Dynasty protagonist is so scary?

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FromChapter 71 "Tower of Babel"

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If you write a novel, you may say it is Cthulhu, but it is not science fiction enough. You may say it is science fiction, but it is not Cthulhu enough. It is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away.

Love comes from infinite dimensions, XP is diversified, (I didn't say these are characters from other dimension copies.(¯ㅂ¯Crimin))

FromChapter 71 "Tower of Babel"

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Familiar taste, another set work, Cruel Toilet Paper Angel! Lao Deng, I know it's you, stop pretending!

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I feel like the main storyline is vague (maybe it's because I haven't read the relevant original work). It has an average feel and can be maintained.

By the way, it seems to be body-worn now, right? Then why go back to the main plane? The laws of physics are so strict over there. Are there any special benefits there?

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——Chapter 89

Someone can tell me which work's combat system this is, I can't quite understand it.

This ultramarine is a bit weak. Judging from the composition of the heterogeneous iron-based protein, it shouldn't be a big effort to fight a C+ level 😰

I'm curious to ask how many words the author plans to write in this book. (I read that the author's last book only had over 500,000 words.)

The only drawback is that there is too little content and there are too many updates. I saved up a week's worth of it and read it all in one go. It's too little. I feel like it might be more interesting if the protagonist develops something similar to the Ke system to harvest ordered information. For example, a wizard or scientist is influenced by the protagonist's creation while pursuing knowledge, and then falls into the abyss step by step. Come on

It was well written and I read it in one sitting. Just don't be too dense with the jokes. Too much of this will make it boring. Looking forward to bigger ideas. Also, in Chapter 25, the author said that if you don't know how to be a eunuch, mark it and save it for whipping the corpse later.

This book has a sense of setting, imagination of various black technologies, construction of the magic technology system, and monster settings. Those who can deal with the radio wave will find it very enjoyable. However, I am afraid of a but in everything. The plot advancement is a bit slow, and the update speed is too slow. I kept reading it, but the later updates were too slow, so I bought the book.       ，，，，，，，，，

FromChapter 132: Alien Species Patrol Team

When will the author release a new book?

Speaking of which, allotropes are special isomers, right? For example, C60 football carbon is just a special arrangement of graphitic carbon elements.

Oye＾0＾Y