Here, the Lord Said This Is a Good Thing

A lot of people in the front kept complaining about belittling gods and being inhumane, but didn't the main character do the same thing? Sacrifice his subordinates casually for his own pleasure, but it didn't happen at all At first, he took Liu Ying as a maid and thought it was the casualness of the mercenary life But later he turned out to be just a stallion Holding a D-0 and daring to mock gods, but when encountering evil gods, dragons and the like, forget about D-0. You keep talking about having fun, but in the end, is there a difference between a person who dies for fun and a god who sells people in your mouth? It's okay to insert a bunch of growth experiences of supporting characters that are useless to the protagonist's main line. It also has to be written in a protracted and slow way with a world of foreigners and foreigners. In fact, for readers, is there a difference if it is skipped? Not really. Adding new pits without burying old pits, adding new settings for a bunch of people, even if it is a foreshadowing, there are more than 2 maps on the first side and no pits have been filled, is it useful? Alas, this is the end of this book.

Obviously the author doesn't know much about firearms, so it's a bit of a gimmick. The character of the protagonist is also weird, and the purity is too low, just like Schrödinger's cat. The blood hunter appears for the first time, but he can still carry it for a while, and behind him are the miscellaneous soldiers who shoot each gun. An expansion, at least comply with the set body structure and fatal parts. What affects the perception the most is the protagonist. He is neither high nor low. The main focus is a middle-of-the-road. There are many blood connections and Hell Song, but the bad news is that the sewing is not good.

Give some advice without discussing the story, characters or setting. I suspect that the author may be in primary school or junior high school, or may not have studied much. Well, I respect your courage. Not irony. I am just an ordinary reader myself. I don't have any literary literacy. I only speak from the perspective of a reader. (1) Proper nouns, or self-conceptions, are found in many books, especially novels involving extraordinary elements, including various rank names, power names, etc. However, this is the first time I have seen such a drama written. It's okay to put [ ] in brackets for nouns that appear for the first time. If you explain and bracket them a few times to deepen your impression, that's fine. However, if you keep writing like this later, it's suspected that the word count is too high. For example, your [Moon Glory] church actually appears a lot. Writing it a few times and then simply abbreviating it to Moon Glory will not hinder readers' understanding, but it keeps repeating the full name. I don't know what others think, but I think it's all nonsense and redundant punctuation. (2) Do you know how to use punctuation marks? It is not required that all usages are completely accurate, at least the common usages must be known. I saw someone pointed it out in the chapter review, but since I didn't read the subsequent content, I don't know whether to correct it. (3) This is the point that others have also said, and the "that" that has been repeated. What is the original intention? Why use pronouns? Is there some kind of setting like monster lodging that cannot be told to readers? Yes, only those involved in the worldview know it, but are you writing a story? When you describe the character's actions, they are hiding it from ordinary people; when you describe the character's psychology, they need to give some hints to the readers; OK, you don't have to give any hints, but how can characters who are familiar with each other act like the Riddler without even a mystery? Are you writing from a third person perspective? Then, if you want to describe other scenes and characters where the protagonist is not present, use the opening plot as an example: What you wrote before is actually okay, until your "that" jumps back and forth and everything falls apart. In fact, you can watch this episode, as long as you don't watch it. Speaking of which, how to write it? I point out again that this is just from the perspective of an ordinary reader with no literary literacy. I just raise some questions and hope that the author can learn some good writing methods. I think the author can still be saved. One is to elicit clues from the psychological activities or action descriptions of the two characters. The setting of being possessed by a monster is nothing new and innovative. But if you don't want to state it clearly at the beginning, then you can only hint to the readers that this is the case; and if you want to be a bit mysterious, then lead the readers to guess what kind of monster is living there; if that doesn't work, then give up first. There is another one, which is to directly describe the strangeness of the two characters. Whether it's danger or illness, after describing it, change the perspective and start directly from the protagonist to the setting. Okay, you started off with a sense of mystery and didn't say anything. Of course, the final effect depends on the writing style. My own reading experience is that with ordinary plots and flawed settings, if the writing is good, it can be written smoothly and attractively, but if the writing is not good, it can only be criticized. Oh, but the lack of interest in the plot doesn't save anything. I hope you can still be saved, and I hope you can write better.

The background setting of this book is very good The character of the protagonist is expressed through two words: "destruction" and "fun", although there is nothing coke in this "fun". In fact, the protagonist of this book is not important. The main character is not important because: this book vigorously and vividly describes the psychology and experiences of the supporting characters. It can be said to be a group portrait novel. But there are a few strange points that make this book less likely to be read 1. The characters that are set off by the actions of the protagonist and the spouse around the protagonist are very much like writing down a few keywords for the setting, and then adding "charm" and "apricot" to each person. 2. The design of the civilian supporting characters in this book is much more detailed than that of the protagonist. With the names of some European and American people and their respective experiences, the civilian supporting characters are three-dimensional. But to be honest, some characters don't need to be named because they are not critical or important. Otherwise, there are too many names in the full text and it will be tiring to read. 3. The name and vocation of the god character are carefully designed, but the design of the character or goal may be lacking. 4. The charm of the protagonist does not need to rely on the plot of love at first sight that frequently emphasizes his good looks/handsomeness/the opposite sex which is not important in the plot 5. The women around the protagonist in the plot have character, have behaviors to set off the character, have goals, experience, and are very capable when the plot is unfolding. But it would be a bit strange that the protagonist becomes a tool without personality and ability after earning money (in the final analysis, there are too many people).

Chapter 57 was really beautiful before, but then I started to be a stud, and my IQ dropped rapidly. It was like this in several books. I was really speechless.

The first part was okay, it was in the style of a fantasy light novel. But in Chapter 23, the protagonist becomes a very extreme character... Hmm🤔 I think the author is younger or has less experience. I personally suggest to modify it, and don't make the protagonist more extreme in the future. You can think about it, has there never been a successful novel, online novel, or film and television work in which the protagonist was labeled as "extreme"? With this attribute, he is basically a villain. Why? As long as there are extreme people around you, you will understand that they are really scary, and the things they do will never be forgotten. There are many terrible and shocking news in society, and most of them have extreme personalities. The protagonist is the projection of the author. The more extreme behaviors you write and the smoother they are, it means that your own character is also heading towards extremes. You should pay attention to adjusting your mental state Experienced young people's lowercase fantasy series will be very advantageous and will be more true, kind and beautiful. It will be very comfortable to read occasionally. It would be better if you can pay more attention to the writing technique, structure, and the unity of the protagonist's character and behavior Above

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I can't understand it, but I'm shocked

Casey

No, why do you use mysterious words like "who", "that" and "that hell" throughout the article? Just forget it once or twice, it's everywhere. It feels like the Riddler can't tell the riddle and then pretends to be mysterious.

Halfway through, I knew why it wasn't popular. At the beginning, what everyone saw was that the protagonist tortured the natives with all kinds of firepower. Even picking up girls and starting a harem was regarded as a tonic. But in the middle part, the protagonist's firepower was not obvious. Often half of a chapter or even a few chapters described the background of the supporting character, how the supporting character fell in love and started a harem. Is this author sick? Not sure what you want to see? It's weird to write like this and not run away. I don't know if I want to read the rest of the content. What if I still write about supporting characters picking up girls? Wouldn't it be a waste of my money?

The blood disciple couldn't stand it anymore. . . 😑The characterization of the protagonist is a mess. I tried to get high but no one was saved, and I was not happy. The operation of the choir's collective offline operation and subsequent processing are also difficult to describe, so I just forced them to give out box lunches. . .

There are too many of them. It is no longer a mystery or a problem that needs to be searched for me. Now that I see what you wrote, I feel disgusted and disgusted, so I gave up.

The Rebellion Chapter and the Abomination Chapter are also too boring. The protagonists in both chapters deal with problems in a way that requires intelligence rather than intelligence, and requires force rather than force. The main character uses lust to deal with troubles, and his mercenary background is useless. The only expressiveness of destruction in the whole chapter is supported by the external god, that is, the author. The overall mental state is not as good as that of a chuunibyou character.

In terms of behavioral habits, the protagonist's behavior is understandable. In terms of plot content, the protagonist pretended to be a bitch for a chapter and finally pulled the big one. In terms of character arrangement, he couldn't continue writing or was too tired to write and forced the character to quit. In terms of plot arrangement, there are a lot of bugs in this section, including but not limited to the fact that the protagonist who could fight level 6 before cannot defeat a level 6, and the female goddess does not even try to win over the believers. I wrote a whole plot. In addition to setting off a big firework to make people run away, the rest is a cross-brain exchange between the left and right brains. To summarize the advantages and disadvantages of this book, Advantages: the writing is relatively smooth, and some little bs are very cool. Disadvantages: The sense of logic is sparse, the left and right brains interact with each other in the plot arrangement, the context is not coherent, and large-scale plots cannot be grasped. Summary: AI writing is better than this personification.

It's good, except for the protagonist, the only other person in the world is a woman. Apart from the pale and spirited boy, there is no other distinctive male character. It's a harem story, but it's full of romance. The more I watched, the more boring I became. I finally managed to hide my blood relationship. I just wanted to watch the spirited guy beat up the moon god. Before it even started, people were thrown back.

Invincible flow + Riddler + group portrait. If you don't have enough skills, just taking out one of them will be quite discouraging, but 3 of them are stacked. Where do you want to write this sword?

The Lord said, this works well!

The setting is quite interesting, but I couldn't read it for some reason. The plot has its ups and downs, but somehow it feels very flat, which is also strange.

Chapter 1 The Riddler, I thought it was a book written by some platinum god. How could you be so confident? Slipping away

I feel like there is no outline. I write whatever comes to my mind. Many things are confusing. In the front, you can argue with the goddess because a child believes that her followers can enter the goddess's kingdom after they die. In the back, you can watch a flower girl being parasitized by a gardener's flowers and be indifferent. You also want to treat her as an observation object. In the front, you use a rocket launcher to blast the gardener who is making flower fertilizer, and then turn around and start making deals with her again.

Don't be too short, the new book issue is like this, I can't help it, everyone should read it more, after it is put on the shelves, I can update it every day.

To be honest, the more I write, the less interesting it becomes. After the characters in the previous chapter are written, they become transparent in the next chapter. Sometimes when I see the name of a supporting character, I have to look up who it is. If there is no scene in the back, why bother to describe so much in the front and open a separate copy? As soon as a single chapter is over, there are five or six steps all over the place. Whenever something happens, the protagonist is basically busy from the beginning to the end. After finishing the work, I see that the city is full of hidden bosses. I feel tired even if I am writing it together. I have collected a lot of subordinates in the harem. As a result, everything is done by myself. There is no supporting character scene. So omitting the aspect of collecting dogs to open a harem does not have any impact on the article.

It's really hard to watch. Is the protagonist Krent or Ye? Krent becomes stronger by fighting monsters. Opportunities, cheating, getting stronger, the writing is more detailed than the protagonist. The protagonist becomes stronger by unlocking points at will. It is written as if the protagonist is Krent's grandfather. When the protagonist is doing something, he suddenly inserts a daily routine of Krent becoming stronger. It's like you are halfway through the Inch Challenge and the target becomes a tank. It is really uncomfortable to watch. I can't tell whether you want to write about Krent or Xinye. Did you write 1 million words before the real male protagonist Krent began to rise?

According to the description at the beginning, the protagonist's strength is at level 5 to level 6. In the blood disciple chapter, he fights an incomplete level 6 lightless one for a long time, and then in the later stage, level 6 is everywhere like the miscellaneous soldiers, and there is also Ekaterina, who always feels that the strength is infinitely high because of the plot needs. Even if the protagonist has that space-based weapon at the beginning, his physical fitness is still at the level of a mortal, and his body cannot respond to the super-speed battle between masters.

To be honest, I just watched it, and I ordered more than 100 points to post it. I really have questions... What is the nature of this protagonist? It looked good at the beginning. I thought that the basic aspect of the protagonist in the character had been developed (a mercenary with his own code?), And the portrayal was pretty good. Then I saw him inexplicably chatting and laughing with the gardener who had previously said that he harmed people at will... Especially in the previous chapters, I had just finished writing the childish talk about the goddess for a child... It's not that the character cannot be complicated, but what is your skill? So sudden? There's too much conflict in the character creation... It's not just for the sake of writing the part about the gardener and the supporting role, right? A character can have many faces, but the same face does not have complex expressions, but the mouth opens and closes at the same time. What the hell is this?

I can't stand it anymore, the early world view setting is pretty good. But after arriving at the blood disciples, the plot suddenly became exaggerated. The rest was basically filled with numerical monsters, new maps, harem routines, and the key plots were not handled well. The writing was inexplicable, and it was impossible to read at all. It was boring.

The institute was plotted by the goddess, and they could complain directly to get more rewards, but they didn't say that they had to endure it. They said they were mercenaries, but they acted more like a collaborator, but they didn't act like a collaborator either. It felt like there was no price for breaking the contract. The positioning of the protagonist is even more outrageous. At the beginning, his attitude towards the goddess was still cooperative, but then after he became dissatisfied with the goddess, he directly turned into one. You prefer to answer or not. Anyway, I just want to take advantage of your attitude. The main thing is that there are two systems for the protagonist. One is given by the Buddha of Chonghuo, and there has never been any problem. The other is given by the goddess, but the attitude towards the goddess is more like teasing a fool. The goddess is even more outrageous. Many of her performances are that she can talk to her believers and issue instructions directly. So her church has been infiltrated by the vampires. Why didn't she issue the order earlier? The protagonist must burn the blood of God before issuing the order. Not to mention that the goddess doesn't know. The pitifully small number of orphans sent out to the church in the novel already shows that the goddess knows about this matter, which is acquiescence. Then after talking to the protagonist, the goddess B-square dropped completely! Are you really turning into a fool and being teased by the protagonist? Is it true that apart from issuing tasks and watching the protagonist, there is no restriction at all? Every time I can only tell you what to do, do you think the protagonist listens to the goddess? The character of the protagonist has also become very outrageous. At the beginning of the plot, although his methods are radical, he still prefers lawfulness. Later, he becomes more and more unscrupulous. When treating vampires, I can let them live if they are the people I want. The vampires I don't want are those who are not my species, so their hearts must be different? The relationship between God and the protagonist is what makes me most speechless! The protagonist teased the goddess as if she were a fool, and the goddess continued to act like a fool when she was teased. The other gods just agreed as agreed. Such an apostle of an alien god was worshiped by the empire as if he were an ancestor. Don't tell me that the goddess was the only one who discovered it. How could it be possible? The protagonist is obviously a celebrity, and then the other gods are just like the background board, except for mentioning it, they don't have any action towards the protagonist, an apostle of an alien god?

I looked through the discussion and found that it was full of curses. Although most of them are trainees and are suspected of being stooges, what they say is true. First of all, the first problem is the collapse of combat power. At the beginning, building level 5-6 can destroy the city, and a single lightless person can turn the world upside down. But later you will find that even in the current world, level 5-6 are not considered high-level people. In the city, there are not many crouching tigers, hidden dragons, and levels 7-8. So why did a level 5-6 blood disciple be able to make the industrial core of the empire helpless? There are obviously many masters, why is it that only Ye He can save the world? Why does it have to be him? Even if the author tries to remedy the situation, adding the setting of the void, and raising the ceiling of combat power in time, it is still irreversible. The second question is about the character creation of Ye He, which is full of contradictions! Why does a person who doesn't even care about himself, his lover, or his teammates care about children? His love is stable and lacks support. A person who doesn't care about anything and a person who respects nothing will care about children? And Ye He already has enough lovers, why does he have to mess around with many people who don't want to do it? What is his motivation? Is he lacking? He is not lacking. The third question, I haven't seen anyone mention this question, is the issue of the main line of the story. It was clearly stated at the beginning that it was to return to the real world, but later in the writing, it became confusing. All the actions in this world in the early stage can be understood as footing, but in the later stage, Ye He was able to control the righteous god and kill the god. At that time, was Ye He pushing the main plot? No, he was crazy about being a stallion, going to the meaningless federation to engage in political struggle for a long time, and he even called it "watching fun." Take a look at the character setting. He is a mercenary, a mercenary with a clear goal, and a cold-blooded killer. There is no reason for him to go to the federation to be a famous figure. There is no reason to spend so much time on romance. To sum up, due to the ambiguity of the protagonist's personality, the collapse of the world's combat power, the lack of a clear goal and the unreasonable development of the plot, and the author's insufficient ability to lubricate it, the book appeared vague and riddle-like in the early stage due to the overly large worldview. In the later stage, the worldview was finally perfected, but the author's writing was inconsistent. The end result is what everyone expects.

At the end of Chapter 7, a stack of money was stuffed in, and the shallow believer turned into a true believer. I just wanted to laugh.