Black Basket: Starting Wiggins Template

After reading more than a dozen chapters, let me share some thoughts First of all, the author's writing style is very immature and too colloquial, and there are many oral habits such as "I'm really looking forward to it", "It's so exciting", "I'm so happy", which greatly affects reading, and many places are not smooth. Secondly, the punctuation work It is used to segment and distinguish who is speaking in the text. A large number of missing punctuation marks, especially double quotation marks, make the reading confusing. I don't know who is speaking or what is meant. Because I didn't have enough writing skills, I chose a Wiggins template to get through the early stages of Didan so as not to affect the plot, and then when I was promoted to high school, I changed to a stronger template to lead the team alone. Although I just saw Didan win for the first time, I don't know if I wrote it until high school, but I can probably think of the plot behind it, but that's what I want to say. Yes, the coolness is not clear. Currently, the protagonist spends most of his time dawdling, and all the games are brushed off. The winning process in the first year is just mentioned, which is a bit too streamlined. Although it is true that the team was too invincible during the Emperor Dan period and it was difficult to create conflict points to increase the plot tension. Instead of constantly making up for the setting of the sister and family, and inexplicably raising a cat, it is better to create some comedy conflicts around the 18-point air split, and instead of making the Generation of Miracles too invincible from the beginning, it is better to create some difficult conflicts to make the championship in the first year more bumpy. In the second year after that, they started to be invincible. Some people's attitudes and thoughts about basketball and life serve as conflict points in the plot and pave the way for them to go their separate ways. Using basketball to speak and defeat other Generations of Miracles to change other people's wrong ideas together with the plot can also become a relatively smooth main line. I can feel that the author is a newbie practicing with fandom. I hope some of my suggestions can provide you with some help.

Oriental Three Styles: Kang Long Bu Regret Tornado Dunk. Pass three people in the air and then dunk. The teammates throw the ball into the sky casually. The protagonist jumps up and takes off for a dunk.

If you update it once a day, don't bury the story casually, because the pace is too slow. By the time you write about why it is like this, we have basically forgotten the previous one.

The first part was tolerable, the rhythm of the plot was pretty good, and the writing was almost okay. But once the foreshadowing came out, it immediately became numb. It was not a matter of the foreshadowing, but the content behind it was disconnected from the previous one. It was not the same style, the plot, and the coolness changed. Before the foreshadowing, there was one cool story with a complete plot. After the foreshadowing, the whole book had two or even 3.4 Cool stories with complete plots. The cutting was too serious.

Skill templates are just that, they can be counted as talents, but if you use physical potions to compete, you won't be able to watch them. You won't have the most basic competitive spirit at all. I hope these potions are used for training instead of cheating in the game.

Kuroko and Kagami probably haven't gotten along yet. Qingfeng in the plot is estimated to be able to beat the current Chengzhen by himself. The protagonist is pretty much better than Qingfeng now. So many chapters to write. . . And the five in the United States are much better than Miracle. Plus your teammates brought back from the United States, plus you, aren't you crushing the game?

It is recommended that you make a good outline when writing a novel. It always feels like you have skipped a lot of the plot when you are halfway through it. Is the treatment of the injury in front of you true? It's too sloppy The role of system templates is rarely highlighted in the works. At least when I read Chapter 30, I felt that it was not too obvious. In this type of sports writing, you must either really know how to write about the situation of the game and write it well, or you must know how to make a living. Otherwise, we will not be able to see the burning point and the joyful point when we read the novel.

I'm thinking about moving the bookshelf 🤔

It's just one chapter a day and you're still delaying the update 😅

The author revived the brothers, reattached his broken limbs, and rushed him!

The lack of punctuation marks is too serious

50,000 Words, come and hit me 🙂

Come on come on! To show off, you have to use the Oriental Three Styles, which is popular in basketball 😁😁😁

The punctuation marks are rubbish. It's very uncomfortable to look at. There are no punctuation marks when talking to others.

Black Basketball... You have the Jordan model and you are also a younger brother

Is there a female protagonist? Is the heroine Tao Zi?

Author, please write another book when you have time, and don't leave the eunuch behind.