The World of Mortals at the End of Dharma Is the Dojo

Brother, I suggest you write 100,000 words. If you don't sign a contract, then cut it. After all, you have more than 70,000 words and only have a dozen tickets. There is no need to stand alone. If you want to write again, you can find more interesting topics. Come on! Brother

There is basically nothing written in the first three chapters. The sick sentences and so on are uncomfortable to read. The beginning needs to be polished. The angle you started with is outrageous. I spent a long time trying to figure out nothing. The first chapter of "Surveying the Sky with My Heart" failed to explain the world view for a long time. You spent a long time just to make the protagonist lose his memory. You also typed thousands of words without saying anything about the story.