A Trainer Arrives in Pokémon Adventures

What can I say, my writing here really needs practice. Sometimes it is better not to omit the subject and object. There is also a lack of environmental description and background transitions. Often the previous chapter has one event in one background, and the next chapter jumps to another background and another event. The narrative structure is also incomplete. The minimum methods for special events must be: Scene I: life background, environmental description, and foreshadowing of major events. ①Initiation (inducing event): catalyst, the reason that promotes the protagonist's action. ②Inheritance (rising action): The protagonist takes actual actions and encounters difficulties for a certain goal. ③Turn (key turning moment): The situation becomes very good or very bad, which determines the outcome. ④Heading (Ending): What the protagonist gains, what material things he gets, or what he realizes. Scene II: It is decided by the ending of the previous scene whether to go to Scene II. ①Start: The entire incident in the previous scene is the cause. ②Inheritance: The difficulty in this scene can be left over from the previous scene, or it can be a new difficulty. ③Turn: Just like the turn in the previous scene, it can deepen the atmosphere of the plot. If it continues to get worse, it will increase the sense of urgency. If it continues to get better, it will give you the refreshing feeling of pursuing victory. If it were different, it would be a major plot twist. ④: The ending of this scene. There should not be too many scenes of a continuous incident. Four or five are enough. Turning around is like an old lady's foot wrap. For example: in "Digimon 4: Infinite Zone" where the protagonist group fights the Royal Cavalry, scene I is when the protagonist group has just defeated Cherubimon and Lucemon is about to be resurrected. Lucemon sent the Royal Cavalry Lord Knightmon and Sovereignmon to collect data all over the world (start). The appearance of the two royal knights was the difficulty faced by the protagonist group (Cheng). Then the protagonist group was beaten violently by the royal knight (transfer). They lost and fled to the next scene (combined). The second time they were still beaten violently, and they escaped to the third scene. The third time they boarded together in the Creation Village with ten warriors. In the battle against the Royal Cavalry, the Imperial Cavalry was a little afraid for the first time (important transfer). For the fourth time, the protagonist group was able to defeat the Royal Cavalry in a market. The last time we were here at the Angelmon Castle, the protagonist group had crushed the Royal Cavalry. Then Lucemon took action (important transfer). The Royal Cavalry plundered the entire Digital World data and passed it to Lucemon, who was resurrected (integrated). The entire event structure of the protagonist group's fight against the Emperor's Cavalry is very complete. The end also leads to the next event of the fight against the Emperor's Cavalry. The difficulty that the protagonist's group has been facing is the Emperor's Cavalry duo. Then what about the protagonist in the author's works, take Chapters 8 to 9 as an example: Scene I: The scene in Chapter 8 does not need to be written, because the protagonist has been in Da Mu's research institute, and it was not mentioned that the protagonist is going out. ① Starting from: The protagonist has insomnia and nightmares. ②Inheritance: Tells the plot of the protagonist before he travels back to the special episode. ③Transfer: The protagonist travels to a special episode. ④: No. At this time, the protagonist can wake up from his dream and think about why he traveled to the special chapter. Is it possible that the Dragon Stars were launched by Dialga and Palkia? Scene Ⅱ: Yuhong City, there is basically no description of the city's style. ①Start: Go shopping at Yuhong City Department Store. ②Cheng: I met Xiaolan selling fake goods. ③Transfer: See through Xiaolan's trick. ④Join: Go to the game hall and be followed by Xiao Lan. Scene III: Rockets Arcade, there is basically no description. ①Start: Go to the game hall to gamble. ②Cheng: Playing slot machines. (Gambling basically means you lose every time you bet. This does not explain how difficult it is to win when playing slot machines.) ③Transfer: Hit 777 to win the grand prize, and the person in charge of the Rockets game arcade was punished. (There is no explanation here why the protagonist keeps winning, and Team Rocket does not suspect that the protagonist is cheating, and actually exchanges the prize for the protagonist. Even if there is no suspicion, the protagonist has to be blocked. Team Rocket who keeps winning cannot be welcomed, and the transfer is very poor) ④ Together: Give advice to Xiao Lan and conquer the new elves. (Conquering the elves is too sloppy)

Why is it always just the main plot? It doesn't make any difference. There really isn't much difference whether there is a protagonist or not.

1. The writing is really messy and difficult to read 2. The protagonist has a weak sense of participation and presence 3. Players who have not watched the special episode will feel that the plot is unclear (although I have watched the special episode 😅)

The writing is young, the descriptions of dialogues and situations are too flat, the descriptions of some dialogues are a bit deliberate, the plot is a bit confusing, and there are some errors in punctuation and other places. The writing does not make people feel like the protagonist at all. Some parts are like reading a running account without ups and downs. It seems that this is a completely new author, but he still has potential. Come on, author.

Every time the protagonist arrives in a new area, he must do the following: (including but not limited to) being provoked by relevant members of the alliance and then slapping these members in the face, and cleaning up the poaching group. 😅I am also quite speechless. There are more than 400 chapters in Guandong and Chengdu. Do you have to write about these two things in your branch? But the biggest poisonous point of this article is the character design. First of all, both the original characters and many original characters are too money-oriented. The alliance members and poaching groups mentioned above all do things for money. Obviously, money is rarely mentioned in the original work. I don't know why I am so entangled with this. One difficulty is that Fangyuan's technology already has its own satellite, but there is a limit on the number of times you can send cross-regional emails to Kanto. If you exceed the fee five times a year, it will really mess you up 😅. I have never seen such an outrageous setting. Of course, that's all for the original character. The most difficult thing is that the original character is also greedy for money, causing the character's personality to collapse OOC. Can you imagine that when Qianli heard about a poaching group, he immediately stood up and said it was great and could make money? Qianli also beat the poaching group to death or maiming just like the protagonist. In the original work, Qianli was such a careless person? There are also people like Huoyan Shuiquan who have joined the fire and rock team's water fleet to work as a tour guide for the protagonist in order to earn tour guide fees, and they don't know how to fight. This kind of plot arrangement is really inexplicable. In addition, like the normal friendly sparring match between the protagonist and Naqi, Mikri was worried about something next to her. Naqi was also fighting while thinking about what Mikri would say at this time. Really, not to mention the ex-boyfriend and girlfriend, the current boyfriend and girlfriend are not as abstract as you wrote. They are not at all like the character setting of the original work, and the character design is completely ruined for you. It can be said that there are many places where you would not be able to imagine what this character would do/say even if you look at the character's name. Also, did the author not make sure to mention the skin when interacting with the female character? When Xiao Lan told Nazi that her skin was not good, wasn't it just a tactic to anger Nazi? Besides, Xiao Lan, who is only a teenager, could have bad skin? Later, when the protagonist saw Nazi, he mentioned the skin issue twice. Then when I first met Huo Yan, I didn't know how close he was to the protagonist. Within three minutes of meeting him, I felt that Huo Yan's skin was not good. In the comic Huo Yan, there is no skin problem at all. The protagonist's behavior is a bit low-key, right?😅

Written by you as the main character, it feels like a comic turned into a novel.

To be honest, I still like to call them Pokémon or Pokemon!

The writing is okay, but I need to practice my writing. Some of the sentences are unclear and affect the reading experience.

After reading almost a hundred chapters, I can't see what the protagonist's thoughts and plans are for his future. As for his previous Pokémon, his previous family and friends, he has almost never thought about how to get home. It seems to be just a background board, just following the plot of the comic. There are many places where the past is briefly described, such as where he went to get something, and where he went to fight. This description

Well, I would like to ask, can the author correct the broken sentences? Many of them are missing subject and predicate, so I can't read them clearly~