Global Evolution: I Am Raising Kun on Paper

The writing is too messy and my sense of logic is very poor.

The content is outrageous, and the sudden environmental changes are normal. But in this short period of time, the villains and soldiers are all omniscient, with high strength, knowledge, and strong social connections. Even the officials have to study it, but the villain is just like knowing it from birth. It's like you learned calculus in the morning, mastered it in the afternoon, and was discharged directly from the hospital.

What a silly start. It's written in ancient times. It refers to character alone.

Create an opinion thread, I hope you won't criticize it too harshly 😭 I will read the readers' suggestions carefully and make adjustments as much as possible without affecting the direction of the outline.

At first, I was attracted by the topic of "raising Kun on paper". First of all, the premise of "on paper", the materials are simple, easy to carry and close to reality. Secondly, the act of "raising Kun" is very high-end and fantasy. From the promotion of various Shan Hai Jing games, we can think of the characteristics of Kun swallowing and evolving. The combination of the two is novel but not difficult to understand, simple but not cliché. During the reading process, the author's handling of various plots and contradictions completely caught my attention (laughing); but I feel that the author's control of the characters, or the foreshadowing of the characters' emotional changes and action drive, is not outstanding enough (for example, Qin Qin's attitude towards the male protagonist), and sometimes I feel that the plot is stiff. During the interpretation of the copy, the methods of obtaining power and materials are very attractive. I hope the author can continue his efforts and write this work well I also hope that the protagonist in the book will be better😊

The subject matter is good, but it feels a bit unclear. Many plots feel fragmented, without a complete main line, and the use of golden fingers is also very fascinating. It doesn't feel very good. I suggest the author summarize the content and make an outline or something.

There is no logic, it feels like it is going here and there, and it feels very unsmooth. I'm quite worried about the author's mental state.

Although it has some ideas, the writing is not good and there are many typos. The protagonist's character and writing style are very unpleasant. The logic of the article is confusing and it is difficult to tell the story. The plot is a bit inexplicable. From a comprehensive evaluation, it is not recommended to stick with it if you don't have a mine at home or if you take writing as a hobby (these two can withstand years of practice).

The classic villain organization is more powerful than the official one,

Let me tell you some very unfortunate news. My house was flooded... Well, my house was not flooded, but a landslide on our side of the road and a flash flood broke off three or four telephone poles. We didn't get a call until this morning... During the three days without electricity, I thought about life over and over again and read the articles I wrote, and finally found that it was indeed rubbish. After learning from the experience, I feel that revising the article is probably of no use (mainly because I don't have time 😭), so I will simply tear it down and start over. Alas, sad. After finally messing around, I wrote more than 100,000 words. If I persist a little longer, I can put it on the shelf and get perfect attendance. But first of all, this article is really rubbish. Even if you ask me to produce this kind of thing to feed everyone, I can't do it. Secondly, it seems that the update has been discontinued for too long, and Quanqin is gone. Alas. I'm so sorry! Friends who gave me monthly tickets and rewards, I am very, very sorry. I kowtow here to apologize! !

On paper, Yangkun is interesting and has a good idea, but what you wrote...

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Come on, author, the writing is beautiful 😆