Holy Lord Tianya of Douluo Continent

If the elder brother doesn't want to update, just say so. Why bother to deal with the younger brother so casually? It seems that the younger brother is being sentimental. That's right. The elder brother is weak and needs more rest. The younger brother is urging the elder brother like this. It is the younger brother's fault. It hurts the elder brother's body and makes the younger brother feel distressed.

Damn it, Tang San still has merit, and wants to control Tang San to unify the continent. Could it be that the protagonist is SB? Tang San is a war monger. If the mainland is in peace, then what is the use of his Tang Sect's hidden weapons? As long as the mainland remains divided, it will be conducive to the development of the Tang Sect and Shrek. I don't know.

The heroine should return it to someone else, Zhu Zhuqing! Nowadays, the fandom is full of her, which is annoying to death. She only has big breasts, what else is there? ? ? ? Effort? Ridiculous, there are so many people working hard, fighting against fate? It's ridiculous. If she really wanted to fight against fate, she would have joined the Spirit Hall. She came to Shrek just to win the battle for the throne. . . . . . . .

To be honest, except for Zhen Heizi, although everyone does not like Xiao Zhao San, there is no need to be stupid. There is no conflict of interest as long as you don't give away girls, kneel and lick, and be a nanny.

This person Tang San. It's actually very hypocritical and cunning. Especially starting from the later Douluo series. You have to be able to suppress Tang San all the time. And Tang San must not be allowed to become a god. Just let him be the tool man. I knew it from the moment I saw him attending Haotian Sect. At the beginning. It's all my father's fault. I would like to accept it on my father's behalf. What was wrong with my father when he banned his account? It was all forced by Wuhun Palace. After becoming a god. You bunch of cowards. You may know your sin.

Zhu Zhuqing is just a trash fish, his upper limit is not high enough, and he is useless in the early, middle and late stages. Remove or replace someone who is worthy of the protagonist, and support each other and make progress along the way.

How can Tang San say that his early values ​​were still due to a lot of problems caused by the influence of the Tang Clan in his previous life. Later, Tang Hao also failed to fulfill his father's responsibilities (although it is said that Tang Hao knew that the current Tang San was not his son). Later, he was led astray by Xiao An, and later... The messy things like hatred, profit and the concept of respecting the strong have made him become a black man. Although I am not explaining anything to him, some of his behaviors are indeed disgusting. If we really want him to change, it is better to change when worshiping the anus. I feel that the turning point is here.

Why do so many people like to write emperor's edicts and like to use Zhu Yuanzhang's Fengtian carries the emperor, the edict says ah Could it be because too many TV dramas use it? This is because Zhu Yuanzhang felt that he became emperor because of God's will. Of course, the founding emperor basically thought this way "The first sentence of the Yuan Dynasty edict is 'God's destiny'. Taizu said that this did not mean humility and obedience, so he changed it to 'carrying destiny' to heaven. Everyone's words and actions are based on heaven, and he does not dare to be independent."

Why do so many people hate Tang San? I feel Tang San is right. Bibi Dong loves Yu Xiaogang. Why do time travelers like Tang San? Why does Tang San help the poor? The key is that modern people are jealous of Tang San! How hard it was for Tang San in the early stage, but he was so good in the later stage! To be honest, Hu Liena and Qian Renxue are both Tang San's lickers. The so-called love at first sight is just lust. I feel it is the truth. There is not so much true love. Some women are true love. Bibi Dong likes talented ones, Hu Liena likes the powerful Tang San, and Qian Renxue likes those who defeat him. However, Qian Renxue is too strong and ordinary people cannot grasp it. Xiao Wu likes her third brother who is willing to protect her, and there is nothing wrong with sacrificing for the sake of it. I prefer Tang San's classic mantra! You have a way to die

I haven't started watching it yet, can anyone give me a hint? At least you have the Nine Heavens Divine Weapon and the Four Great Sword Techniques. The power must be dozens of levels higher than the peerless magic skills in martial arts (such as Xuantian Gong), right? If the author's writing was about the same power, it wouldn't be worth watching! I estimate that as long as you practice the Four Great Sword Techniques to a small degree, you will be invincible in the mortal world, and in a big way, you will be invincible in the divine world!

There is more and more nonsense. In the latest chapter, the whole article is about the dragon god. It is obviously an insignificant thing and can be summarized in one sentence. However, the author has no ink in his stomach, so he can only count the words and dissect and analyze an insignificant thing and write out a reason. So, later, , finally, forget it if you wrote like this before it was put on the shelves, but if you write like this after it was put on the shelves, you are taking my money as the wind blowing, right? I paid to listen to your nonsense, and I have to repeat some things there. Say one sentence in the front, analyze it in the middle, and mention the above words later.

Are the heroines Qian Renxue and Ye Lingling? Zhu Zhuqing and Zhu Zhuyun. Ning Rongrong. Hu Liena. Dugu Yan. Consider adding one or two. Being an emperor is supposed to have three wives and four concubines. In this way, the heroine and supporting actress of the original work already have their own traffic. Although there are many people writing. But most people can't stand it and still like to watch it. Oh right. And the two ice and snow emperors

The heroine of the author does not have to be useful in the later stage. The biggest use is to win over the power. For example, Ning Rongrong, if you marry her, the Seven Treasure Glazed Sect will definitely be able to get it. Also, the Blue Lightning Tyrannosaurus family and the Haotian Sect can marry a legitimate daughter. Most of the women in the emperor's harem They are all politically married, and their greatest use is to strengthen the connection with local forces, strengthen the connection with ministers, and shorten the relationship. It is really not important whether they are vases or not. What is important is the power they represent behind them, and the emperor's attitude towards local forces.

After reading it, I would like to comment on my impressions and give some suggestions to the author. Well, first of all, from what I have read so far, I feel that the author should be a pure newcomer. This should be his debut (I hope I am not wrong, otherwise I will be a clown)? In general, I feel that the writing style is relatively immature. Ꮚ･᷄ꈊ･᷅Ꮚ. Looking at the whole novel so far, there are quite a few good aspects. For example, there are not a lot of long sentences and paragraphs. The understanding of Douluo is quite good for me. I also know how to advertise my own book (I didn't click on this book when I was scanning the list, but I was attracted by your advertisement for another book). Of course, there are many shortcomings. Firstly, from a structural point of view, I strongly suspect that the author did not make a detailed outline (it is not like there is no outline), so the narrative is a bit confusing. The specific manifestation is that too much space is used to lay out the background story. You used about seven chapters at the beginning to explain the background that is not closely related to the main plot. I personally think it is a bit too slow, and it is not very clear where the main plot is. I personally think the main plot should start from the first travel. Then the second point is that the entire narrative is too bland, and there is no need for the structure of inheritance, transfer, and integration. In other words, there is no need to be more enjoyable. . . In fact, I think this is more important. The current writing is relatively streamlined, and I feel that it is not attractive enough to readers (I only speak for myself). I see that there are relatively few fans of Immortal Black Tang San, and you and I agree on some of Douluo's views, so the airwaves are in sync, so I have kept it until now. It can be seen that you want to write cheats that are not so obvious pig feet, but to be honest, if you are simply practicing writing and using love to generate electricity, it will not be a big problem, but if you do not have a complete structure of starting, inheritance, transformation and integration, if you are not happy, the signing problem will be bigger. The third point is in the skill design and combat description. To be honest, it is more difficult to write a martial spirit with a single function like a sword, because it is difficult to use your imagination to create new settings. However, copying the skills of King Li Bai and Li Xin is still very abstract. In addition, I personally feel that your description of the battle is not strong enough in some places. For example, in the description of Pig's Foot "decisively using the second skill to dodge", the author can certainly imagine the enchanting posture of his dodge, but at least describe it well so that I, the reader, can see it clearly. If the second skill cosplays with Li Bai, it may be better to describe the classic description such as "the devil tiger tears apart the afterimage", but this is just a personal opinion, and it depends on you how to do it. I suggest you use a reading software. Next time you finish writing an article, use the software to read the article to yourself. Although based on my own experience, it is easy to miss three rooms and one hall, but at least I can pick out a lot of unclear description errors. In terms of character design, the relationship between Pigfoot and Qian Renxue seems to be progressing too fast. Qizhang directly picks up the girl, which is too abrupt. Even the character creation is over. Anyway, I am confused. Or is it the author who drove too fast and caused the river crab master to kill everyone? Because Pigfoot has been acting alone for a long time, the character's personality has not been fully described. Now he urgently needs to interact with NPCs. I think the scene between Dugu Bo and Xiancao is suspicious of OOC. I think in the original work, Dugu Bo, apart from being nice to Tang San, is also very arrogant towards other people. Regarding his Tiandou Royal Academy's attitude towards the three Contras of Mengshenji, I personally don't think he would be nice to Pig's Feet. All in all, the most important thing is not to make a running account like this. It can be ignited at a faster pace. If you continue to talk about this fan in such a straightforward way, it will become an incombustible thing like Boruto. This account is my small account and I don't have much resources, so I'll give you three recommendations first. Come on, author, I'll sign a contract anyway. If you sign and I invest, I'll get fifty doge coins doge

If you are not strong enough, you will easily be beaten to death if you wander out.

The writing is very good, why are there so few monthly tickets? Oh, it turns out that he went to the palace to serve the emperor.

A book with potential, as long as it doesn't collapse

Chapter 11's evaluation of Tang San's Killing City is completely embarrassing, and cannot be called "neutral and objective" at all. It belongs to "in order to prove that he is neutral and objective, he has to sing the opposite tune. As a result, he forgot that the guide in the original book told Tang San what the Killing City means to Wuhun Palace and the outside world, and what benefits it has, and Tang San directly made malicious speculations when he heard about Wuhun Palace."