All Demons Said: Starting from the Smiling Proud Ming Dynasty

Since you are writing a martial arts fan novel, you must respect the setting of the original work and show the spirit of the original characters. But the first few chapters give me the impression that it is more like rewriting a novel by borrowing the names and settings of the original martial arts novel. You have not written the spirit of the original characters at all, and you have added original features and added characters from different eras. For example, are Wang Yangming and Linghu Chong from the same era? Just one word: chaos. I don't even know what the audience is for a fan who writes like this The plot arrangement is not good. The protagonist's appearance at the beginning implies that there is a lot of background, but if it is hidden and not directly stated, it stands out as all kinds of inexplicable. Almost all fan fictions can be written well and popular without the word "simply", because the plot setting of the fan fiction itself is exposed to the eyes of readers and the protagonist. The author may be thinking of foreshadowing, but when you want to write foreshadowing and conspiracy in the fan novel, the novel will be half as cool. What readers want to see is the different choices of the protagonist, the use of different perspectives to understand the world, and the storyline that should be changed from the original work. This is why it is becoming increasingly difficult to write fan fiction, and the plot lines have been almost mined The protagonist's character is also extremely unlikable. The protagonist can have his own way of doing things, no problem, but the character must be well grasped, but it is obvious... In short, it is not an orthodox white novel, the writing style is still a little bit, but very average. There are many white novels that give people a good impression. It is comfortable to read at a glance, just like a fast food. This one is more like a waiter with different cooking skills using mid-range ingredients to copy out a half-cooked meal, and also messing with the seasonings, tsk tsk

Isn't the protagonist a demon? This should be an evil figure. In the world of martial arts, there is cause and effect. If you don't think about it, it is cause and effect. If you think about it, it means nothing. National affairs have nothing to do with the protagonist. The demon should be unscrupulous and do whatever it takes to achieve the goal. I would rather let the world betray me than let the world betray me. What is it like now?

I don't understand why the so-called three great masters in the Tang Dynasty are being praised, and they are said to be restricted by the world. After the time traveler gets through, the realm will be greatly improved. Isn't this just nonsense? Bianhuang, Tang Dynasty, Shattered, and Fuyu are from the same world. Murong Chui in Bianhuang stabbed all the so-called three great masters to death with one shot. In Shattered, let's not talk about the protagonist. The Supreme Grandmaster Ling Donglai relied on self-realization to be invincible. The world is shattered. Even Meng Chixing, Ba Siba, and Li Gong also beat the so-called three great masters in Datang. In Fuyufanyun, there is also Lang Fanyun who watches the broken Dongting Lake. The three great masters in the Tang Dynasty are just pure La, and they have to talk about world restrictions.

Who do you want to show this idiot character to, the author?

Use an attractive title and introduction to deceive people into coming in, and then go high and low to win, and screen out the readers who are not angry away... Excellent business ideas!

I came here to ask for the evil way, but in the end, I laughed proudly and persuaded him to quit. It's not that I don't like Swordsman, but the writing is terrible. You need to be clear about the fun points of writing a book, such as harem flow, unlimited flow, Thirty Years of River East Flow, Xiu Xian flow, you have nothing, and you still say that you talk about demons, are you a shemale?

You can basically understand what the author wants to write. But still unhappy. The protagonist is controlled at every turn and has been counted several times, which is inexplicable. Many plots deliberately put the protagonist in danger. I can understand the author's idea of ​​advancing the plot, but it is too deliberate. The protagonist is plotted by Wang Yangming and is not allowed to be a "demon". But the protagonist being a "demon" is the plot the author needs, and he relies on this to show off later on. The protagonist also readily agreed. After all, Wang Yangming is dead, he is willing to die, and I (the protagonist) is even more willing to be buried. The author and I (the reader), and even the protagonist, all know that the protagonist wants to show off, but the author and the protagonist have a tacit understanding, and I (the reader) do not. I still remember the last time I encountered this work of saving the doomsday. After the protagonist got the news of the doomsday, he continued to go to school, then pretended to be cool, made money to start a business, and even got married... Of course I knew that the end of the world would not come until the protagonist finished the plot, but is it really okay to be so relaxed? This is also because the author and the protagonist have a tacit understanding, and the readers are at a loss. This kind of gap in intelligence will really turn into a poisonous point. Seeing Chapter 16, there is only one reason for the protagonist to interfere with the plot, and that is because of the cause and effect, or because someone caught the flaw. There is absolutely no possibility of the protagonist benefiting.

It is inevitable for a newcomer to write a new book that there will be mistakes and omissions. Please give me some support from readers to help the seedlings grow healthily. But forget it if you want to give the author some advice on how to write. It will make your mind more confused and your writing worse.

Since the thing that can travel through the world has been shattered by the power of the world of cultivation, I have taken it. The first poison is that if you travel directly and encounter space turbulence, I will teach you if you don't know how! Second The start was so awesome, you had a soul, even though it was a low-end version, you still went to practice martial arts and participated in all kinds of pornographic things, and then Prince Ning died, not in the hands of a dead pig's trotters. The master and junior brother were treated so miserably. As a result, you traveled all the way, pretending to be cool everywhere, and then you were set up when you saw Lao Wang. , He also said that he owed others and then went to help. May I ask your master, if you don't avenge your junior brother, you still press the pig's feet. You have a soul, and then you can't cultivate your own Taoism. You have to look for it everywhere. Your skills are all over the place. The idea is good, but the writing is messy. No wonder the score of the book is so poor!

After reading dozens of chapters, I have one feeling: chaos! The writing style is obviously good, and it seems to have its own system for the inner strength of martial arts. The appearance and encounters of the protagonist are also typical martial arts style, but it feels chaotic and people can't stand it. Could it be that too many things that are not in line with the original work were mixed in, and it was caused by unscrupulous magical transformation?

After reading twenty chapters, the writing is messy and unorganized. At the beginning, write that the protagonist is very awesome and show off, but later on, he will be walked around by people from each lineage, and people from each lineage will show off. The protagonist is shown off, and then start writing about Yuan Shen achievements, Qi refining innateness, and later on, write down the performance of swordsmanship in detail, or you don't write how high the protagonist's equipment is.

When writing about astronomy and humanities, remember to be decisive and decisive in killing, and have an online IQ. When writing about systems and marriage, remember to be in charge of "gou" and run away when you need to.

When I saw a label that said someone was pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger, I immediately felt embarrassed. It was either a fake or abusing the protagonist. One look at it and it's accurate

Did the author think that the word "demon path" is very powerful, so he slapped his forehead and opened the book. There is a eunuch book. Although the protagonist is not a demon path, he is more like the protagonist than you. Oh, that book is called Alien Arrival. The famous lines are "Praise to the Three Yangs" and "Praise to Me".

Many of the heroes and villains who are proud of the world are people with deep hearts. Only a few, such as Linghu Chong, Lin Pingzhi, and the nuns of the Hengshan Sect, are very simple. Did Linghu Chong kill innocent people indiscriminately? Apparently not. Did Linghu Chong ever have the intention to harm others? Apparently not. When something unfair happens, will Linghu Chong help? Obviously it will. Such a person, why should the readers here thinklessly criticize him? Everyone has shortcomings. As readers, you can naturally comment on the people in the book, but it is really too despicable to put aside the advantages and only talk about the shortcomings, or to put aside the shortcomings and only talk about the advantages. It is better to do less. Bad people do bad things throughout their lives, and they can be forgiven because they only do one good thing. And some people have done good things throughout their lives and are denied everything just because of one bad thing. Is this reasonable? If it is reasonable, does it mean that even if you do a hundred bad things, you can feel at ease as long as you do one good thing later? No one is perfect, shortcomings and advantages coexist. If you only have prejudice in your heart, you will lose justice.

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What kind of thing is this written? I don't understand what the main character is doing. Messy

Watching Xiaoao come in, it turns out that the first script is the second creation of Xiaoao, which has nothing to do with Xiaoao. If you like editing so much, why don't you create an original world?

To be honest, I didn't even finish the three chapters, so I ran away.

The Emperor Shennong actually died reading this book

There is a big disadvantage in the beginning. The magic weapon that can transcend chaos is crushed with a slap, but the person who can crush this magic bag with a slap cannot even transcend his own universe. To put it another way, can you crush a magic weapon in the Nascent Soul stage with just one slap during your Qi training stage? Moreover, the protagonist is given the character of a little diaosi at the beginning.

Thank you Shennong, see you again 😎

Swordsman, is his strength worth such a high level?

Old fox! I can recognize you even if you turn into ashes, and pay me back my subscription money! A rotten old thing!

Chapter 10 couldn't stand it anymore, so he slipped away, what the hell were you talking about.

The book is still okay, but the part about Huashan in the back. It also contains new ideas. Book friends who like martial arts can go and evaluate it. If you're looking for faults, read the beginning of the book and then decide whether it's good or not.

For book lovers who like martial arts, this is a book to read. You can start reading from Chapter 19 and continue reading to the beginning.

After reading Chapter 51, I really can't stand it anymore. Goodbye! ! Dealing with a few little things, I spent a long time writing in a long way, and the big scenes were covered in one stroke, but the characters were inconsistently portrayed in the previous and later texts. With such a high level of martial arts, I thought it would create a different plot, but after working on it for a long time, I still returned to the original. All the way down, killing, killing and fighting. Things that happened decades ago have been revealed. Things that happened decades ago have nothing to do with the protagonist. The cause and effect of this one has to be settled, and the cause and effect of that one has to be settled. Why don't you trace the cause and effect to the beginning of Pangu? ? Anyway, I can't tell what the protagonist wants to do.

The second piece of persuasion to quit: foot-wrapped

Finished spreading flowers, goodbye in the world Full nails