Hunting Fairies and Demons

I subscribed to a chapter specifically just to write a review. I finished listening to it for free, but I don't have the motivation to subscribe, so I don't feel good about reading it directly. After all, I can see that the author is sincere and really puts his heart into this book, so I'd like to give you some suggestions. Advantages The setting and world view are very good, very complete and not obtrusive. The writing is up to standard, concise and comfortable The story rhythm is also very good. Problem The characters are forcibly set up for the development of the storyline. The characters are reduced to tools to advance the plot and are completely undepicted. People have human nature, and with human nature they have habits and behavioral logic. Only characters full of humanity can become the fulcrum of the story, supporting the logic and completeness of the story. A simple example The protagonist's mother, this role is very empty. Why do I mention the role of mother? Because a large part of the protagonist's character setting in the early stage is family affection, so it is necessary to have a full-fledged parental character image to make the protagonist's character image more vivid. Appearance is skin, behavior is flesh and blood. Only when complete can the character have vitality. The role of mother has no image and no behavior. In this novel, the only description of the role of the mother is that she loves her son~ Well, this is like writing about your cat. My cat has one nose and two ears... It is recommended to depict the mother's appearance "Yan'er, Mom is not hungry, I will give you this bowl of porridge." Wang Cui handed the bowl in his hand to Lu Yan. Lu Yan looked at the old woman in front of him. Her wrinkled cheeks were sunken, her figure was slightly stooped, her eyes were half-open and she looked very weak, but she still showed kindness. … The two elders couldn't resist Lu Yan, but the mother only drank half of the bowl of gruel before passing the bowl to Lu Yan again. "Mother,..." "Yan'er, drink." Lu Yang just wanted to refuse, but when he looked at the old woman's tender eyes, he couldn't help but trembled in his heart and took the bowl. In the next paragraph, when meeting the three young people in the mountain village, Lu Qingshan blocked Lu Yan behind him and changed it to Wang Cui tightened his body and immediately pulled Lu Yan behind him, blocking Lu Yan from behind. Lu Qingshan stepped forward, holding a hunting bow in his hand, with the bow and arrow already on the bowstring. The focus is on the third paragraph Lu Qingshan was injured while hunting and returned home. In the article, the family reached a consensus that Lu Qingshan needs to hunt more meat. Here you can let the mother stop, depicting a woman who loves her son and husband, and is unwilling to sacrifice her husband for the sake of her son to take radical risks. Finally, let the protagonist propose that he go hunting with his father in a safe outer area. This can smoothly extend the plot and make the image of his parents more vivid. Of course other small conflicts designed for mothers are also possible, but they must be reasonable. Tell me about another character? It can also be said that there are three, that is, the three little Luoluos in the village. Um..., These three people are unreasonable. Just delete them. It will have no impact on the plot at all. 1. Three people cannot dominate among tens of thousands of refugees, so it should be a group of many people, and these three people are only three of them. 2. Mr. Liu chose a group of young men to die, but missed these three? Is it reasonable? This kind of orphan gangster will be forced even if he doesn't volunteer. Is he the best candidate for the job? 3. How can a small mountain village that can hardly support itself afford to support these three gangsters? 4. Is there no one from the Liu family to guard this small mountain village? With this trio, readers will naturally think of this. Then the question arises, why don't the old villagers run away? Is it because they don't know there are monsters, are they not worried, or are they just the ones who don't run away? Well, anyway, it all falls apart upon closer inspection. (I'll add more when I think of it. Wu Ling's appearance is very suspenseful, and the psychological description of the original villagers is extremely contradictory and unreasonable, and is forced to be mysterious. Personally, I feel that the original villagers who stayed should believe Liu's words, and their psychology is lingering fear, but not too scared. After all, everyone is the most Seeing the corpse but not the monster, Liu should make his lie more realistic, find a beast corpse or something, so that people can stay in the village with peace of mind as bait) The three people can be replaced by villagers, and the original villagers can use conflicts over farm interests, and the protagonist shows off with a little force. Alas, the plot is unnecessary anyway, the character conflicts are unreasonable, and it is also very cliche and boring. The plot after entering the city is very compact, with many characters appearing, but I have basically forgotten it after watching it. The characters feel like they are just nouns. For characters who can appear twice or more, it is recommended that they briefly describe their actions and expressions, and make their speech and actions more personalized, so that they are more vivid, and the number of words can be reduced. The comment was too long and I got a little confused and forgot what else to write, that's probably it. Nowadays, good-looking novels are all in the form of narratives, which have the same feeling as a movie, mysterious and infinite, or the kind of copy written by a mortal. There is no need to delete the plot. If it is necessary to extend the plot and add a few more twists, the reading effect will be better. The setting of this novel is really good. The characters would be more vivid and reasonable, and the plot would be more focused. It would be perfect.

{"TopicId":"847235287436099584","TopicName":"New Book Trial Reading"} Recommendation: The new work of the talented shepherd boy Tingzhu. Needless to say, the writing style is stable and updated. In addition to the twists and turns of the plot, there are also detailed descriptions of the characters' hearts, clothing, and camera transitions that can make people think richly. It starts with a traditional fantasy of warlord rule. The soul is pierced with a needle, and the coma is used as a thread at the critical moment, spreading out through reality and the other world. Lu Yan, who possesses the Golden Finger Taoist Book, will have a different life experience. Book title: "Hunting Immortals and Demons" Author: Shepherd Tingzhu Status: Serialized Tags: Soul Penetration, Golden Finger, Ji Dao, Doppelgänger, Hot Blood, Darkness Plot: Lu Yan, a modern street writer, travels to another world with his soul. Facing the warlord separatism, strange things happen in troubled times. He follows his parents to escape from place to place. In order to have a better chance of survival, he learned skills from his father, Orion Lu Qingshan. Although he was not a good third-rate martial artist, he inspired the golden finger - Taoist book while practicing bow and arrow, and discovered the secret of the clone. From then on, he fell in love with practicing and couldn't stop it. While in Kaoshan Village, he killed the Three Evils and captured the burglar Lu Chuan. He used the red guards to frighten the evil around him. At the same time, he received the kindness of the captor Zhang Jun and learned the information in advance. Thanks to his efforts, he actually bought a house in the city at the age of fifteen and sixteen. Faced with the conspiracy of his colleagues and superiors, he acted according to the situation and outwitted three captains and teammates, the leader of the Green Bamboo Gang, and two deputy gang leaders. Even though some of his skills were stronger than his, in order not to leave hidden dangers, he had to deal with his injuries. Faced with the ferocious Wu Ling and his employer Liu Xingren, the eldest son of the Liu family who avenges kindness and revenge, he saves himself rationally... The road to martial arts is not smooth. How much good and evil, true and false, beautiful and ugly will there be in the future? Can he resolve them one by one?

Among fantasy novels, Komaki's novels have the clearest logic. I have been reading them all the time. It is also because of this that I have read many fantasy novels. The two novels I have been able to read include "The Dragon Emperor of Ten Thousand Paths" and "Divinity Player" by Komaki, so now I will directly follow "Hunting of Immortals and Demons". Although the protagonist upgrades slowly, I still appreciate the writing style.

Upgrading depends on whether the dishes cooked by the chef are fragrant, but pig trotters are not chefs.

I have been reading The Dragon King of Shepherd Boy before, but I didn't expect that Shepherd Boy would quietly release a new book. I didn't see it until after get off work in the evening. I have caught up with the latest chapter. It is pretty good, but it is relatively slow to catch up. It can be seen that the shepherd boy is gradually becoming more creative. The writing style of this work is much more delicate than that of Dragon King, and it is still very comfortable to read. It is still a new book period, so I will first reward the shepherd boy with a silver alliance to cheer him up. I still hope that the shepherd boy can continue to work hard! Looking forward to the next plot.

If you want to make a guest appearance in the Dragon Tower, you can write down your name and the martial arts you are good at. I will look at the arrangements, but I can only try my best, and it is not 100% possible to arrange it.

I have read about 20 chapters. If you are a new book lover and read this because the author is a great master, you will definitely regret it. There are too many little bits and pieces. Even old bookworms may not be able to stand the free part.

Why do we always have to create extraneous things? To even break through to become a Wuhou, you have to go through many unnecessary steps such as buying tiger bones, competing for the purchase quota, being cheated and losing the purchase qualification, being robbed and killed, leaking the secret of cooking tiger bone soup, and being counterattacked by the Li family. This is just a breakthrough for Wuhou. This kind of incident that appeared out of nowhere cost the author more than ten chapters. The author is complacent about making bad money, but he doesn't know that he has already lost his favor as a reader, and the road is getting narrower and narrower.

Jiang Zhiwen, everyone is a great god these days

Well, I haven't read Ten Thousand Dragon Emperors. The setting of this book is very similar to that of the Martial Saint of the Ten Directions, and there are various little poisonous points. You can know them by reading the free chapters 🙂 I can't be too straightforward, I'm afraid of being criticized 🤐

It's not good-looking. The protagonist has a lot of cheats and is not as strong as others in higher-level skills. He also does a lot of nonsense. I have never seen the protagonist be able to do one thing. He just brags about the plot for the sake of bragging about the plot. It's a waste of time!

I'm curious what the protagonist thinks of killing three gangsters? Obviously it is not a sin to injure someone to death. As long as the protagonist has any brains, he will only break people's limbs and leave. This kind of person cannot survive. The protagonist can openly express that it is okay if the person he hurts is fine.

Poison, forcibly reducing intelligence, I was poisoned to death after reading Chapter 35, and I couldn't stand it anymore. It's another classic story of forcibly creating plot conflicts in order to develop the plot. It's particularly clever and forceful. I can't stand it. Don't the author know that this kind of operation will make the protagonist's character look special?

He pretends to be weak every time, and then gets rid of others to kill him. Seriously, in such a world of high martial arts, the investigation methods are as weak as a piece of shit? Killing people every day in front of others, everyone is blind and deaf

It's too cliché, it's too old-fashioned, it's tasteless, it's a pity to throw it away.

I feel that the back part is very watery, all the villains have murderous intent in their eyes (maybe they practice martial arts but not their brains) - The villain's strength is terrifying - The protagonist is defeated in a cross-border battle - Strange encounters from the sky (usually ancient ruins and wish patterns) - A wave of level improvement through practice - The villain is horrified - The villain is frightened - The villain roars unwillingly - The villain's leader dies, and the younger brother starts to run - The younger brother didn't run away/The younger brother ran away to attract the monster It feels numb.

You can still watch it as long as you can accept the author's endless water plot

It's a bit funny. Yesterday when I looked at the catalog, it was still the tyrannical Saru Tiandao. Today, it's Saru Tiandao who has been defeated again 🙂

When I saw Chen Sirong's confession, I couldn't stand it anymore. Either you have a single female lead, or you just accept Yinuo and Chen Sirong, don't add too many scenes to them, but why did you add so many scenes to Chen Sirong later, and confessed to the male lead, but the male lead didn't agree directly, was unclear about Yinuo, and didn't confirm the relationship with her. Later, there was a competition between the two women. I was speechless. I really couldn't watch it anymore. At first, Yinuo gave Chen Sirong so many scenes, but nothing happened to Chen Sirong. He thought it was a single female protagonist. Later, he gave Chen Sirong such a role, upgraded her talents, confessed her love, and asked her to join the villain sect. In the end, she was exterminated by the male protagonist's force. What was she going to do? I really can't stand it anymore, it's all ruined

The fighting is well written, but the plot is too cliche and uninteresting. The pseudonyms are all Lu. You might as well not change your name and go to a place to change your name and still have the last name Lu. As long as you get the treasure, someone will target you. As long as there is a big plot, some small characters will be planned in advance to target the protagonist, and then cause a series of reactions, such as the Liu family and the Zhao family. The writing is not interesting at all, and it is still the same old routine from ten years ago.

When you get to Chapter 25, just read this book. Once you read it, you won't say a word.

The back part is not good-looking, Shen Yinuo's character is more perverted than the main character

It looks good, it's getting better and better, keep up the good work.

This new book is completely new, the writing style is more delicate, and it is more beautiful and durable. It is really good food and fodder. Come on, Xiaomu.

This novel is suitable for beginners. It has a tendency to abuse the protagonist, which is really unbearable. In order to continue reading, I tried to explain the discomfort of this novel. It has a tendency to abuse the protagonist. You can make trouble for the protagonist to promote the development of the plot, but what did the protagonist gain after the war? Oh, scarred and injured, the benefits and risks are not proportional. I knew this was S when I took five people's heads to collect the bounty of 30,000 taels. I knew clearly that my Little Er Limit Company could barely keep a thousand taels of silver. You are also a talent. Even if you don't have the greed of the Zhou family, you got it yourself. Others are greedy and won't check it. Once you check it, do you think the Zhou family will help you hide it? What's the use of exposing your strength for 30,000 taels of silver and then using 30,000 taels of silver to improve your strength without improving it much? ? ? Wow, there are already level 2 blood lands, and I have money. In order to stay informed, I stayed. I knew there was a big one waiting for me. I guessed it right. I later exposed my strength when I sent a mission to find a concubine. What was the harvest? ? ? What did you gain? ? ? There is no gain at all. Although there is no gain in life when you are in trouble, this is a novel. Where does the fun come from? From the gain, you often don't let the protagonist gain much, and you don't know how to change his face when saving people later. Especially when he exposed his face in front of Shen Yinuo, I knew that the rest was s. Do you know? When I read this novel, I clearly felt that the protagonist was very intelligent, but the things he did were not polite at all. I only saw Chapter 81, the chapter after the introduction. If it weren't for the golden finger of the protagonist that kept me appetizing, I would have given up long ago. I was tired, so I cut my losses and gave up. There was too little pleasure, and what's annoying is that I kept half of the pleasure.

The original body of all things contains everything, including the original ancestor body. It is the limit of the body and possesses the terrifying laws of all things. It is known as the King of Laws and dominates all laws. To deal with this extremely powerful ultimate physique, only by integrating the nine laws to produce a new law that transcends the category of all things, becoming the king of laws and the origin of Tao Yun, can it transcend the laws of all things that are the primary body of all things.

In the past, Lord Xinghuo and another person in the Origin Realm could be resurrected, and Lian Cang could also be saved.

Just a small problem, the first savior is the savior, it always feels weird to directly recognize the reincarnated parents.

I would like to ask Komaki, when will the new book be published? Which website do you plan to post on?

The fighting power behind the protagonist is too exaggerated, and the military is like a policeman maintaining law and order.