Pirates: Davy Jones Is the Captain of the Dread Ghost

Don't let a certain book review dissuade you. I think the plot arrangement is reasonable. Although there are small loopholes, the flaws are not concealed. The pace of the whole book is very good and does not drag out. The protagonist is also normal. He has personal principles but is not a murderous maniac. The group portraits are well drawn, but the top and middle parts are a bit strange, but the ending is very touching.

It depends on what you think In the early stage, follow the main plot, hone your writing skills, and polish your ideas After that, I feel that I can still follow the war on the top and occupy the jib. As a base camp, it can still be moved. Moria can also try to absorb the crew If the crew potential has increased, it will not be so fast to become the imperial mate Take your time After all, we are not the Straw Hats. Try to write this book as reasonably as possible After that, you should slowly weaken the presence of your enhanced data version This sometimes feels more tearing and out of place The subject matter is quite attractive But I feel that if your foreshadowing is not handled well, it will be a big mess. Fishman Island will be an important direction for your book And you should also pay attention to Luffy Becoming a Yonko after a war is a bad choice, but the Shichibukai is a winning choice Superior, it is best to go directly to become a big pirate and collide with other Yonko Beat generals, three disasters, and the Shichibukai improve your reputation It is mainly training Regarding the strength of your subordinates, try not to meet Kaido and Big Mom officially The best time is the country of Wano. Use the power of the Straw Hat Boy to officially take over the territory and become the Four Emperors You can also use Moria as an introduction to join the country of Wano This time period is enough for you to write for a long time Then you can refer to the future plot to write

Protagonist

I couldn't watch it before it was released. The character of the protagonist has changed when he travels to the world of pirates. When he encounters a pirate ship at sea, the navy will immediately go up and kill them all. When he encounters someone who is somewhat famous in the original work, he will lick it, risk his life, and keep following the path of Luffy in the original work, but no one who is related to the original work dares to touch it. The Deserter King didn't dare to move no matter how provocative he was, and he was forced to go to Garp without an axe. The most disturbing thing was that the author himself forgot about it. Garp didn't catch up with the protagonist and arrived at Upside Down Mountain late. Co-authored by Kap Pu teleported over to capture Kebi, then teleported back to the Grand Line and started on his way again The protagonist was slapped in the face and didn't dare to say anything, and Hawkeye was also scared to ride on the face. Hawkeye finished cutting people and passing, and then left without worrying about anything. Before leaving, he gave up The protagonist acted as a nanny and sent the Luffys back to the ship. Why didn't he act as arrogant as a supporting character? Going to kill Aaron, someone on the way tried to kill the protagonist, but he didn't even let go of anyone, and then no one was left except Xiao Hachi. After leaving, I'll take some photos. Copying the meaningless and forced sensationalism The writing in Alabasta is also a mess. The first news report is that Garp can't beat the protagonist, and the second step is to forcefully arrange a sand crocodile to take advantage of the protagonist To sum up, it is purely fake and dog-licking. And write a b system to update an ability, repeat the water for a period, and then fight like the third child, teleporting crab claw tentacles

The protagonist is a person who goes around doing good things. He said how evil he was, and then he kept doing good things.

Why do you keep walking around in the flying group plot? So why not go watch anime?

What the hell are you writing about, recruiting deserters? Do you dare to want something on the same level as TM Momonosuke and his son?

Why did the author remove the captain's tentacles and crab claws? Now the captain's face has not changed except for the rest. It feels uninteresting.

How is this different from the original work? . . Just change the protagonist, change the younger brother, and solve the same incident. . .

The poison test is completed and it is found to be non-toxic/slightly toxic, visible and of good quality. The adventure of Captain Jones, no brainless plot of doting on a girl, decisive killing, 👍🏻

Skeleton

I originally thought that you would be a hit because you were so flattering, but in the end, I just went out of my way to make soy sauce. I bow to you and continue to choose your readers.

After reading about 10 chapters, I took it too seriously and accepted Bucky as his subordinate. Is Bucky's character a person who works as a subordinate for others? The characters are homogeneous and look like chewing wax.

When reading this book, you can't just bring One Piece into the world, you also need to bring into the world Pirates of the Caribbean. Davy Jones is a god in his own right, just like the extraditer who leads the dead into the underworld in Greek mythology. You pay the price and I will bring you to reincarnation. A character who is close to a god cannot be displayed with the painting style and thinking of One Piece. Many people say that Madonna, Davy Jones himself is not a bad person. He can give his heart for love, he can do the same job for ten years just to meet his lover for one day, and even chant his lover's name at the last moment before his death. The crew members are recruited through contracts or transactions so that they can serve on the ship. Even if such a person is bad, how bad can he be? Just like when a person encounters an ant nest, a middle-aged person may take a glance at it, or may treat it as nothing happened. Teenagers may squat down to observe more and crush a few ants when they see it. When young people see most of them, they will bully, ravage, and destroy the ant nest. This book may be more suitable for people who read One Piece more than ten years ago, but may now be married and have children, or people who are more thoughtful and have an older mental age to read it.

More than 30 w words have not yet regained the shadow of power. To be honest, when I saw what kind of power you had in Fishman Island, I felt that you wanted to follow the original work. Sure enough, when I looked at the table of contents, Luffy, Zoro, and Nami are classics😅 Let's just say that it starts with saying that you want to be free, but then you are nosy all the way. There are so many words that I don't want to say. With the number of words, Junjun Shui, I don't know what I want to write, right?

The natives still found it uninteresting. .

The subject matter is well chosen, Davy Jones is really cool, but your writing of the battle is too perfunctory. The Yonko and the generals all died in one or two chapters. Other important supporting characters in One Piece started to fight, and they were cut off within a few lines. It was written about hand-to-hand combat with ordinary people, and the Haki Fruit ability seemed to not exist. It's like writing about Jack. Someone else is an ancient animal type with full health. Your protagonist goes up and cuts him down with a knife and then shoots the head with a gun. In your way of writing, do you still need to write the foreshadowing of the plot? The protagonist goes up and kills you in seconds. Do you need to recruit some subordinates to form some forces?

The captain is a real pirate, not the abnormal pirate in One Piece

The author's depiction of the details in the world of One Piece is quite good. There is indeed a Davy Jones in this world, and there are even related derivative games. And the author, I think Davy Jones should be regarded as a fish-man, right? Jones may also accept some fishmen as his subordinates in the future. I feel like the protagonist can overthrow the Neptune clan and become the boss of the fish-men clan or cooperate with them.

Can the author add a setting that the longer you stay on the ship, you will have the characteristics of marine life or the whole body will be transformed into the crew in the movie?

You said it was a coincidence, Rocks D. Bejik turned into David D. Bejik on Douyin today. Who is their ancestor David D. Jones? It's so hard to guess, so let's read this book again 🙂🙂🙂

I originally planned to read Shuangwen to relax, so I didn't have high requirements when I started reading. At the beginning, the moves that were similar to game skills were considered a point of departure. I originally planned to watch Lehe but not watch it once it was released. Who knew that the more I write, the better it gets, especially the ending, which is really well written. The secondary design of Im and Nica is also very good, logical and acceptable. To be honest, from watching Luffy when I was a kid to now, it's really uncomfortable to see some fans killing the main characters, but it's weird how close you really get to them. This book felt like it was handled well and the ending was very comfortable.

The protagonist's ability to automatically recover. If he is chopped into several pieces, which piece will grow back to its original appearance? What will happen if he is chopped into pieces and put in different boxes? Does this mean that he has endless meat? It is not bad to raise a few meat-eating animals.

The protagonist's progress is too fast, resulting in no sense of success. At the beginning, recruiting evil people as crew members was reasonable and watchable. But the rhythm of the plot is mediocre. Now that Big Mom is dead and Kaido is about the same, the plot has fallen into a vicious circle with no freshness. Especially when fighting Kaido's team and playing Big Mom's team, that is, the opponents have different abilities, but if our team wins, it's over. Written like this, it's almost like those in the Invincible style who do everything with one sword, but the protagonist is not as interesting or pretentious as those in the Invincible style, which makes you lose the desire to read further. As for the previous Kerby, it was actually okay, but it was handled very poorly. When it reached the top of the battle, it was killed directly. The plot seems boring because it starts from the departure from the protagonist group line of the original One Piece, which is almost after reaching the Seven Islands of Water, and then it begins to enter a basically infinite loop of plot. In other words, a certain force is defeated by a certain set of operations by his subordinates, and then the protagonist comes out to suppress the situation. If you write this kind of routine too often, you will get tired of it, and you will start to get bored watching it. Moreover, Jones's characteristics later became only his promise-keeping and his octopus-head appearance, and he gradually turned into a routine strong man with an octopus head. Without his vivid image in the film, the idea of ​​​​this article is very good, but the main thing is that it progresses too fast.

In fact, it feels average. The main fighting scenes are too fast and I can't see the growth process of the protagonist. It always feels like something is missing.

I really don't understand why the author allowed Momonosuke to occupy a chapter. Why was he not caught by the people when he appeared in the crowd to exchange money for the new general?

This is the only book I spent money to read to the end at the starting point, let's celebrate🎉🎉

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