General Lanlin of One Piece

The writing is really good, much better than that of many One Piece fans. Whether it is the supplement and improvement of the original simple and crude world view of One Piece, or the writing style that ranks among the top among the fans, as well as the description and pointing out of the contradictions and conflicts in the plot, they are all ranked in the top ten in quality among One Piece fans. Moreover, the author's description of the battle is very graphic and impactful, and his ability to express grand scenes is also very outstanding. There is a slight lack of emotional description, but the flaws cannot be concealed. Although the plot obviously started to speed up from the later stage, the author very cleverly used the accelerated pace to bring out a series of explosive points. In the fierce conflict of the plot, the positions of several parties were contradictory, and the images of some supporting characters were fleshed out as much as possible. It can be said that the image creation of Eniro Akainu and others in this book is my favorite among all the books I have read. Finally finished spreading flowers, and looking forward to the author's next book

What is the mentality of those who insist on killing the Celestial Dragons as soon as the protagonist comes up? Adhering to absolute justice is not a mental illness. Do you have to let Luo Ji use a small pistol to kill the Trisolarans? If you don't have the strength and don't have the numbers, just go for the kill? Do you really think that the protagonist is the invincible Nika sun god? If Luffy had killed Charros, the war would have ended with the Revolutionary Army attacking the Navy Headquarters.

Absolute justice? Let's kill all the Celestial Dragons first before saying this word.

I recommend the author to either enhance the protagonist. The protagonist has a very good foundation and there are a lot of ways to enhance it. Just reduce it to ten levels at once and lead your teammates to win. Or focus on portraying one or two supporting characters to provide support. You have a bunch of people playing in a group with the protagonist. It's too ink. You write so much to portray a group of supporting characters that no one cares about. The gold content of the protagonist is taken away by other people. The standard of the protagonist is also lowered and the combat power is insufficient.

I don't see your justice, kid, forcibly disbanding the Straw Hat Pirates? What can I write about? You have been talking about different kinds of justice, but in the end, I think you are still being treated like a dog by the Celestial Dragons. It's 2.7 Million words and I haven't seen any change. So how do you want to change the world? In the end, do you still rely on brute force? So why do you need to stay in the Navy? You keep saying that you are not the same as Akainu, but I don't see anything. In your writing, the protagonist still becomes a pirate who kills pirates without blinking an eye. You even got Luo and other pirates into your team, and then told other pirate gangs that they must die if they make mistakes. So, will the members of your team die? I like reading One Piece fanfics with naval stories, but the more I read your writing, the more disgusting it becomes. You even brought our current socialist ideas into One Piece, and you just treated my subscription as a dog feed.

After thinking about it, I put down the swordsmanship setting and decided to let Rorschach use a halberd, a heavy weapon. To compete with Kaido's strongest creature in the navy, he would naturally have to use heavy weapons. It's too late to learn swordsmanship now, and there are too many settings for swordsmen. Basically every fanfic is a swordsman. Apart from Katakuri's earth dragon spear, there seems to be no weapon like a euphorbia among pirates. However, the spurge is too long and is not very convenient to carry. It can't be stuck in the back like Hawkeye, right? Or you can make the weapon eat an animal devil fruit and turn into something like a snake, wear it as earrings or bracelets, and transform directly when using it. 😁 By the way, you said that weapons can eat ordinary animal fruits, but can they eat fantasy beast species? Punk Hassad has a green dragon fruit made by Lao Bei. If the weapon eats this fruit, it will really become the Green Dragon Yanyue Sword, or the Tianlong City Breaking Halberd. The imagination is too big, and the weapon Beagle is too high-end. Maybe I can use it, what do you think?

He slipped away and actually figured out how to get Luo to join the navy. How awesome! Are Tianlong people fools or blind people? Can a relationship with the Warring States Period be preserved with just one sentence? Was the Warring States Period so fierce? You also said that after fighting side by side to this extent, we will not be able to meet each other when we become pirates. How did Garp and Roger meet, and how did Luffy and Kirby meet? Isn't it enough to just turn a blind eye? If you want to overthrow the world government, you can also let Luo set up a new organization outside, and the protagonist secretly helps in the navy, working together internally and externally. Do you have to let Luo join the navy to challenge the rationality of logic? That's immortality! How many high-ranking guys can withstand this temptation? The fruit of the surgery can have a price tag of 5 billion, which shows that many people are already aware of the existence of the ageless surgery. Don't talk about the Tianlong people, someone in the top brass of the navy will be eyeing Luo! In the original work, Luo is floating on the sea anyway, and his own strength is not bad, so he can develop insignificantly. It would be better for you to just dangle the carrot in front of the eyes of the Draco and all the nobles! You treat them all as saints, right? The Warring States Period was all-knowing and all-powerful, and could protect Luo all the time, right? Test the powerful with immortality, and then expect that the influence of one person in the Warring States Period can suppress the greed of all the powerful. There is really no logic at all!

They are pirates. They must die. The existence of such people is wrong. They wander between justice and evil. They accidentally acted bravely and were regarded as heroes. While denying the evil of the pirates, he also denied the justice of the navy. As pirates, they did some good things. Justice and evil are easily distorted. This is unforgivable to the soldiers who died in battle and the people who were massacred by pirates. ——Sakaski from Eni Road

The heroine Skylark? A fan of Kirby the Deserter King? What do you think of being so poisonous? Isn't Weiwei good?

Why don't you set the protagonist as a young man with deep hatred and bitterness who witnessed his family and hometown being massacred by pirates? Since you wrote this setting and joined the navy less than a year ago, his character has become so out of control and funny. Do you think this is reasonable?

After reading more than fifty chapters, there are two poisonous points that I really cannot accept. The first point is about Luo. First, when he met Luo for the first time, he directly called out the person's name. Then Luo asked the protagonist why he trusted him. The protagonist said, "I believe in Mr. Rosinand." Oh, co-author, you were picked up by the Warring States Period, and the village was obviously destroyed by pirates. In order to practice justice, you followed Akainu and became a temporary companion with Luo. This is how you let Akainu witness it. To put it bluntly, isn't it the author who forced your love for Luo onto the protagonist? You also claim that Luo is different from other pirates and has never harmed civilians. The second point is that the protagonist has a split personality. In the first 12 years of his life in the village, his talent was wasted because he was too poor. He had to restrain himself when he was hungry and became skinny. He even wanted to commit suicide but was stopped by his father. As a result, he woke up when the pirates destroyed the village. He became angry and bitter and resentful. Then he gained strength and cannibalism. Before he destroyed the village, he was a waste and could only do crafts at home, right? The protagonist under this tone becomes a soldier, and after a year of training, he goes on a mission. During the battle, he takes an apple in his hand and eats it like a funny boy without any warning, accompanied by the complaints from his teammates next to him. This part made me stupid. It is because the protagonist finally became a foodie after eating at the base for a year and finally no longer starved.

Well. . . Looks good, not mindless, mindless is too boring. There is a slow-burn type like Burning the World from One Piece, which is very stable. I just watched the beginning (it gave me the feeling), but I want to say, if I remember correctly, the unicorn among the unicorns is the male, and has the nature of the phoenix. . . . Come on, there are really fewer and fewer authors who write about slow-burning and not brainless, and if you don't listen, there are only dozens of good-looking books (all starting points), and sometimes I really can't understand how some rubbish can be on the monthly ticket list. I really have to write and write, and it is very brainless and numb. So come on, I have no money. Sorry, I have been eating instant noodles for almost a month, so I can only give mental encouragement.

Those who are with the protagonist have become stronger because of the protagonist, while those who are not with the protagonist have not become stronger because of the protagonist's changing trajectory. Ace is still the same strength. The most disgusting thing about this book is that he regards himself as the savior. He says that others have committed crimes, but his own navy's crimes are greater, but he only says that they were in the past.

Very few people read your article about the navy camp. The navy is the top thug of the Tianlong people.

This is more than a name, it can persuade a group of people to retreat.

Forty years ago, for a Blue Dragon Fruit, the Rocks Pirates went out to kill the Celestial Dragons. As a result, the Kirin Fruit here was used by the revolutionary army in exchange for food, and Ming Ge and his group held back for two years without taking it. Let's talk some logic! Does the revolutionary army not know the goods? Ming Ge and his gang are all saints? Even if people in the pirate world don't know the power of the Kirin Fruit, it is still a fantasy beast type. Would Dorag be stupid enough to trade the fantasy beast type for food? What kind of family can't be this bad even if they have a mine? Even if you let the protagonist use the treasure map to find the Kirin Fruit, it would be better than this plot design!

The protagonist's actions after Chapter 127 are really "intellectual". I had to write a plot to reduce my intellect here.

When Luo was a child, his hatred for the World Government and the Navy was shown in the comics. However, because he fought side by side with the protagonist once, he ran to serve the enemy as a dog because of the protagonist's few words. While talking about giving the world a chance to choose and not forcing everyone to stand up for revolution, he also forced Luo to join the navy because of his personal preferences, risking being captured by the powerful at any time and risking death. Such double standards? Even if you covet Luo's surgical healing ability and want to use it in future plots, you can still let the protagonist maintain private contact with Luo! There is no need to force feed poison and cause logical flaws!

I'm curious as to what ending the author will give Akainu. Such a person who insists on absolute and extreme justice has stood on the wrong side of the world government from the beginning. And the Navy, which is rotten from the root, is not qualified to bear justice! Similarly, maybe a soldier's bounden duty is to obey orders, but that doesn't mean that a soldier can have no position. According to some crooked people, if you can be said to be an iron-blooded soldier just by following orders, then QH devils can also be washed. Some people even want to connect him with the real disciple soldiers. What? Will the soldiers bombard civilian refuge ships? But no matter what, Akainu is the protagonist's guide. His thoughts and actions may be extreme, but it is better than letting evil people like Baki Mingo go free. Therefore, how to give the reactionary yet non-reactionary image of Akainu an ending that is consistent with the character and logical, is probably the biggest difficulty in the later stages of this book. I have read a book before. The protagonist is Akainu's apprentice, but he is actually an undercover agent of the revolutionary army. In the final finale, the protagonist challenges Akainu as a marine, takes over the position of marshal from him, and then leads a group of marines headed by Smoker to establish a new military organization. Until the last moment, Akainu, who knew the true face of the world government he maintained, did not choose to admit his mistakes to Long and others, but let the protagonist he recognized to establish a better order. It does have some flavor.

As soon as Nika comes out, Tom and Jerry, One Piece, haha, it's so funny

Kirin fruit is a bit embarrassing. It might have been popular a few years ago, but now it seems quite embarrassing.

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One of the rare fan fictions in the pirate genre that is so stable that it can be read by a ten-year-old bookworm. There is basically no poisonous point. The author has a good grasp of the protagonist's outlook, strength, and plot rhythm. Don't miss it if you like Pirates fandom. Share a few pirate fanfics that you can watch: One Piece: The Dark Lord, One Piece: Spy Shadow (CP), One Piece: The Blue Lin General, One Piece: The Lord of Darkness (Blackbeard) One Piece: The Roar of the Fire Dragon

They were all stabbed into a honeycomb by Oda on the back.

It's good to read, the process is a bit irritating, but it's really good to read after reading it, surpassing 95% of children's fan fiction

Haha

After reading the first two chapters, the writing is so good that I can read it. But I regret reading the introduction and comment section, it was spoiled. 😂

After reading it, overall it's quite good. If this is the author's first book, it would be really powerful. However, the shortcomings are also obvious, such as the ending... It's rushed and inappropriate no matter how you read it.

I couldn't hold myself any longer at the beginning and told myself to stop my stomach from growling 🤐

The prostitution is over 🙂