My Pokemon Player

??? I wrote about eating elves once before in Chapter 208. I said it was to explain the source of meat, so I skipped it without going into details. I tolerated it, but in the latest chapter, Chapter 216, I wrote about eating elves again. I feel that most people who read elf novels don't care about eating meat and will skip it by themselves. You made a close-up about eating elves disgusting a lot of people. Are you screening readers because your grades are too good? There is also a description of the protagonist when eating a Slowpoke. The following is an excerpt from the original text: When Ryan thought of the Slowpoke's tail, he couldn't help but salivate. After the player brought back the first Slowpoke, he couldn't wait to taste the Slowpoke's tail. After repeatedly confirming that the Slowpoke would not feel the pain in the tail, he had the Slowpoke's tail pulled off, and then asked the chef to cook it briefly and serve it up. And the moment he bit off his tail, Ryan decided that he must breed more Slowpoke! The taste is so wonderful! I don't know how to put it, it feels like being a cousin and setting up a memorial arch. I can't wait to eat it, and I double check whether it will hurt

It is unreasonable that the protagonist's Poké Ball should be obtained randomly. The protagonist should have the ability to purchase Poké Balls through the system. Otherwise, there will never be a Poke Ball, and the player will not be able to become a trainer, causing the progress to be stuck in infrastructure and unable to go out.

What can I say, I feel that the protagonist's background is too shallow, he doesn't have a hand that can beat the bottom of the box, and there is a gap with the starting line of the players, but it's not big. It was even more uncomfortable when the Poseidon Temple personnel were specially introduced, exposing their knowledge, exposing the epoch-making Poké Ball, and exposing the scarcity of medicine equivalent to holy water in the eyes of others. It doesn't matter if you don't reveal your wealth unless you have the confidence. But the problem is that the protagonist is just beating up a small group of knights around one of the three saint candidates. Not to mention the entire Poseidon Religion, but their southern region cannot compare. If you have a Z God, I won't stop you even if you go to their headquarters. Also, this saint is not well-shaped. She is here to pinch the soft persimmons, not to gnaw the hard bones. If I were her, I would either directly report it and drink some soup to gain some credit, or I would seize the time to change places and quickly develop my power.

The subject matter is considered novel. At the beginning, problems in writing, narrative rhythm, plot design and other aspects can be covered up, but as the novel slowly progresses, these problems will gradually become apparent. These problems are basic skills and are not easy to improve. But I noticed another aspect, it is possible to find new ways to help authors improve their reading experience in a short period of time. I don't know if the author himself has noticed that the dialogues of the characters in the book are seriously homogeneous or have obvious tool-like attributes. There are often dialogues that are featureless, and it's hard to tell who said it without the names, or even which book it is from, or it's too stiff to advance the plot. And coincidentally, the various reactions between players and aborigines, including dialogues, inner monologues, online comments, etc., Are a highlight of this type of novel, and this type of text will occupy a large space in the novel. Therefore, if the author can design their own unique dialogue characteristics for different characters, it will not only help shape the characters, but also make Shuangdian better looking. The most important thing is that I read the whole article. It's not so much the author's limited ability in this regard, but more like he has no such awareness at all, so I think this is easy to improve and can optimize the reading experience in a short time.

This book is actually still being updated. I would like to advise newcomers, if you come here for Pokémon + the fourth natural disaster, you will definitely be disappointed. I can only say that this book doesn't understand Pokémon at all, and there is very little content for players.

Guanhai City has been under attack for a month, but it hasn't been defeated yet? Why are you procrastinating? It's just a small county and prefecture-level city. Are you going to attack Ukraine?

This book is really a waste of rare creativity. The more the content is written, the more biased it becomes. Whether it is viewed from the perspective of elves or the fourth natural disaster, this book is seriously off-topic.

Should I use your writing for the anime plot? Just write your own plot well and explain it to the readers for two chapters. Which reader doesn't know? This protagonist hasn't appeared in many chapters. Is there half of the protagonist's plot in the middle and later stages?

I have read 60 chapters and my personal opinion is that I don't like to fight but don't criticize Many book friends have mentioned the issues of pacing, writing, and characterization I won't mention it again The main thing is that the Pokémon subjugation part felt a bit too casual to me. It's like playing a real game. After beating the Pokémon head-on, throwing a ball to treat it and feeding it, it will immediately become a happy and obedient partner But regardless of what the reality may be like, even in animations and comics, conquering Pokémon's hearts is not so casual. When Xiaozhi first got the Skin God, he was electrocuted several times. Finally, he was beaten by Spearow to gain his first wave of trust. Not to mention whether all Pokémon have the value of surrendering to the opponent after being defeated head-on (the circle bear is still beaten), some complaints such as "Pokémon unwilling to evolve happen to be with Ash" to get rid of the situation where Pokémon may be unwilling to evolve, or the fact that after being subdued by Ghost, he directly accepted that he had to fight against his former friend Dream Demon, it was too casual. Even if Pokémon are innocent and simple creatures, this is a little too easy to fool. Particularly the details of the capture of the blue jay made me feel a little numb... Knowing that all the chicks in the nest would probably die if I didn't raise them myself, the blue jay accepted the fact that he was beaten and kidnapped. The story of being released to heal was briefly mentioned, without any mention of anything related to chick tits. Then, instead of just running away after eating the protagonist's food, he tried to persuade the protagonist to follow him. The explanation for this paragraph is even "Pokémon will usually obey the trainer after being tamed, except for a few unique ones who will not throw the ball." Normally, it would be nice if you didn't resist desperately when this kind of situation occurs. How can you accept that you suddenly have a master? They are creatures with their own opinions. It is unreasonable to have no personality. In the context of an era where the relationship between humans and Pokémon is very poor, it is unreasonable to be suddenly beaten and locked in a space, and to immediately accept that one has to fight for the trainer. The most impressive character I have read so far is the Flying Mantis at the beginning (the others are innocent and wronged), but after a few sentences to resolve the knot, he became a fighting tool. (Not to mention Rotom, who is really a tool of love) As for the Pokémon that players have conquered... Many of them are still timid characters who are unfamiliar with the environment and are afraid. After finding a trainer, they can start a passionate fight with Rattata for their master without any preparation? Did it change so quickly? Even if some of them were encouraged to fight, they should at least write it down... They just passed it without even a single stroke. It can be said that the creation of Pokémon is hardly a character, and has no characteristics compared to the players. In a book that strives for peaceful coexistence between humans and Pokémon, it's a shame that it doesn't explore any issues of respect for Pokémon.

I watched it with great expectations, but it turned out to be more and more sidetracked. It was all meaningless nonsense. There was no Pokémon creation at all. The Pokémon at the beginning were not going to appear, right? They looked so different. I suspected that it was written by Ai, but Ai doesn't seem to be that good at it.