I Have a Big Sailing Game

I've seen the latest, and to sum up, the author's writing is pretty good, but let me give you some suggestions for improvement. If there are suspicions of spoilers, don't click on it if you don't want to be spoiled. First of all, I don't know if the author has written a detailed outline. It seems that the author wanted to write about daily life in the original world at the beginning? But the follow-up is dealt with directly in one stroke, which is right. Unless you have laid a foreshadowing in the original world, don't write about the two worlds easily. The sense of separation is too strong, and it will be difficult to deal with the issue of combat power in the two worlds in the future. This is probably a small failure at the beginning of this book, but the author made it in time. The processing does not affect the subsequent viewing experience. Secondly, author, don't you feel that the pace of your writing is too fast? The description of the battle scenes is a bit simple, there is too much blank space in the plot transition, and the upgrade is too fast. 1. There is too much to write in the paragraph from extraordinary to agent. You upgrade too fast, causing readers to be wary of your upgrade. I can't figure out how strong the combat power is. You can really slowly write a small copy of Wonderful Adventure to let the character's combat power show up. 2. At the same time, there is another problem with upgrading too fast. If the strength of other crew members is not cheated, it will definitely feel separated from the strength of your protagonist. This kind of navigation must You must write a group portrait. If your protagonist is too strong and you can just push it flat, then the images of other crew members will not be so three-dimensional. 3. The cross-picture is too fast. A big disaster like this is the climax of a book. It should be told slowly and slowly. This book gives people the feeling that the protagonist is always chasing the main plot. When the level is reached, I will jump to Figure 4. What attracted me to this book at the beginning was fishing and sailing. This type of writing emphasizes a random adventure plus skills, imagination copy, and group portraits. However, the author's writing rhythm is too fast, and the relevant excitement is not reflected. Of course, this book can be saved, and randomization is no problem. However, it is not good that the adventure is written to catch up with the main mission. More copies and side plots should be written.

Book lovers who are after text-adventure game novels can stop reading this book. After only a few chapters, it has become a game novel about another world. To be honest, text-adventure novels, despite being a niche genre, actually have a very high threshold. The highly general description language directly leads to a very compact storyline, which is difficult to fill in and tests the author's language skills. If you want to write a long and compact story well, it will also test the author's imagination (try three chapters to a story with high repetition) and internal inventory. It also requires a huge world view (otherwise it will be written out soon) and strong design and arrangement capabilities, so that it can be numerous but not cluttered. Therefore, text adventure games are really not something that all cats and dogs can touch. Except for the originator of the game, "The Lord", I have read all over the Internet, and only "I Save the World in the Doomsday Word Game" can be regarded as the last one. Other novels in the name of text adventures will eventually have to change to the style of writing in game alien worlds. It's just a matter of time. This book has never been a text adventure novel from the beginning, and regardless of whether the author doesn't want to or can't, it's just a reminder to book friends who have been misled by the comment section: this is not a text adventure novel at all, it can only be regarded as a game alien world.

Which is the latest chapter 262? I don't know if it is to lead to the sea of ​​holy scales or simply to suppress the combat power, or both. Anyway, Wuerze is temporarily offline.

Shennong is coming Shennong is coming I read it in one sitting, but it is still a good adventure novel If you like to read game streaming + sailing + adventure style, you can read it There is nothing poisonous about it. Don't be picky about this kind of novel and require all kinds of logic to be consistent. Limited by space, the adventure has not yet fully unfolded, but it is quite comfortable to read it in one sitting. Please support me. I will support the original version when it is put on the shelves later, and I will follow it up The current stitching is a bit rough, and I feel that the author wants to integrate styles such as the Ke system (or soul system). I hope to make it more integrated through writing in the future.

The book is very good. From the fishing at the beginning, the magic potion gives the protagonist strength to speed up the exploration progress. The decision of the protagonist's talent and ability to challenge the monster (boss) with a greater strength is also very interesting. However, I am worried that based on the current progress and settings, the protagonist group in the Novice Village (several sea areas) can be said to have high-end combat power, although most of it is borne by the protagonist (I hope the author can appropriately increase the partner's combat power, not too much, just want to see the partners). It can play an auxiliary or main role in subsequent plots with organizations such as religious groups.) According to this, the initial sea areas may be boring. I hope the author can concentrate on writing his own and not follow the cool writing routine to describe the city. Of course, this can be written, but I still hope to put it in the later stage (the mid-term is when the plot and settings are rolled out. If the city is not well controlled, it will ruin the plot)

What about Shennong? Come and gather together

Last year, when I first read word game novels such as The Lord and Toxic, I felt that they were either folklore or genre-defining. I was thinking that this type of novel would be really good if it was about extraordinary sailing. Unexpectedly, I finally waited for it 😭

Personally, I think it is poisonous and disgusting 1: If you have an archive, don't use it, just leave it and analyze it blindly, and then keep it if you think it has side effects; you can shoot whatever you have with the archive, the key is that the archive does not see any restrictions, and you still write these things from the perspective of the protagonist. Does it make sense? Two: While saying that you are a hamster gang, let those pirates go. The key is to give an explanation that the experience given by the pirates is low. You might as well not explain. No matter how small a mosquito is, it is still meat! There are some well-written plots, but in the context of this game that can be saved, it seems particularly awkward. The key is that you can't ignore it. The story is good, but not to my liking. Farewell. I wish you will write better and better.

Being able to save at no cost is not a bad point, it is even a bit fun to be able to write. . But being able to save it almost without using it is a poisonous point. . There are no tricks at all, it seems that the protagonist has very low intelligence

You can read it, but this book has a lot of conspiracies. The protagonist's golden finger looks very awesome, but the author suppresses it. The most common magic potion in the mysterious system is one. The golden finger is awesome, but the protagonist written by the author is a trash. Then there is nothing to be done. No way, there is no way to cure the curse of the crew, and I don't take it seriously if I am cursed by the contract. If there is danger, I will use the deus ex machina, which will only suppress the protagonist. Only one of the three clones is useful. The protagonist only has regret medicine, but it is of no use if he has no power. Even the regret medicine is out of control.

Don't get that little white-eyed wolf on board. This kind of person who loves to show off his anger is very unpopular.

I can't help it, I can't stand it anymore after reaching chapter 30. There is a ship interface in the first three chapters, where you can collect materials to upgrade, but the pirate ship you grabbed later disappeared inexplicably. This setting was simply thrown away, and you turned on the reverse gear, which can reproduce the items to the real game. Looking for someone, there is no way to track him down, just looking for a needle in a haystack, the only useful seed has no idea what it does, throw out the secret treasure setting, write about how awesome he is, and then mention that you can't get the secret treasure if you don't accept the contract. The real-life plot is also inexplicable, and it has nothing to do with the plot. Why write about him? If there is no shadow at all, it is meaningless water. Of course, these are all minor problems. After all, there are not many. But if you use the model of navigation, it is actually a pure stand-alone game. The whole process is to kill monsters, clone monsters to kill monsters, and find materials. As for your main line, give a potion system, do not collect occult knowledge, and have skills to learn knowledge. It is the same as Bai Bai. There is no ship. Isn't it a pure digression? I want to recruit partners. The vice-captain doesn't write down the attributes when he gets on the ship. Then more than sixty chapters are written inexplicably. You can make up for it if you want. There is a magic potion in what you wrote. You can show it after taking the potion. Because you accept the partners later, you can make up the previous ones. I am really speechless. This is a game and you don't intend to write it to be related to reality. Then add more game elements. Just write down the attributes honestly in the early stage. The talent is occult, and the skills are added to occult knowledge. Instead of learning occult knowledge, I learn the craftsman skills for shipbuilding, and the blacksmith in the back (I read other people's comments), write a legendary fishing talent, and there is no fishing in the back. I just catch a magic potion in the front, but I can't see the effect at all in the back. That's it, I really want to see a good book about navigation, but you...

Readers who want to see multiplayer online hedging in the real world, please take a detour From now on, this book will mostly contain game plots and less real-world plots. Please read according to your personal preference.

Often suppresses the protagonist's strength. In order to suppress the protagonist, the protagonist's brain is discarded when adding points and unreasonable points are added.

Pure game writing, so pure that it cannot write anything other than the game control interface.

I'm still short of money up front, but I killed a gang boss and didn't even try to steal the money. He pretended to be cool and left. I'm speechless.

The first person to write about Gandalf was a genius, your anti-routine has become a routine😥😥

After reading it, the overall quality is very good. Come on, work hard to code.

Indeed, the biggest problem is that the protagonist in a game with save files is too principled. . The fun was completely abandoned

The protagonist's talents are basically useless. Not only are they useless, the protagonist doesn't use them. They seem to be of terrifyingly high quality. The protagonist should also build a system based on them, but the author has completely ignored these three talents. What's the use of them? Isn't this just tasteless?

A purely noble way to add points, a waste of skill points, what kind of melee mage? Mage doesn't need melee combat, who has a mage who can do melee combat?

Without a realistic plot, you might as well just engage in time travel. Your reality is meaningless.

Why do you keep suppressing the main character's strength, saying that it's a mage, mysticism and so on, but he just doesn't get promoted to a blacksmith?

The biggest cheat for the protagonist is to save and load files, which is often not used, forcing the protagonist's growth! I couldn't help but almost gave up the book.

I started carrying a tow bottle when I was still a little trash.

There are too many settings, especially the absolute suppression of ranks. As soon as it was proposed, a black mist area was immediately created to clear and suppress it. For a while, it was impossible to save in the black mist, and the sound transmission conch was not possible, and then it was possible again, especially the low-level instant death concept equipment. There were many hammers in the east and the west, and the basic logic was not structured well... I just said that I can read Chapter 200.

It feels like the author has no outline and just writes about it. The protagonist's situation is in a mess. There are many items that are not needed or the author has forgotten. The key is just another thing. It can teleport and store things. It doesn't say whether teleportation can bring people, whether there is a reading time, and whether two or more keys can be used as a portal.

It's really well written, and it's another good Ke-style sailing novel, Also recommended: Novel Pirate Kingship

It feels a bit illogical. Even if you say you believe in gods, you can't help but touch the taboo. On the other hand, the secret medicine series is safe, but no matter which series you are in, you have to become a god, and the transcendence you set has been contaminated. Only by being careful can you avoid being contaminated. You take this oral secret medicine. If you hadn't been able to save and refresh it, the protagonist and teammates would have mutated. Self-designed conflicts and self-contradictions. I remember it was said in the early days that humans do not have extraordinary bloodline, and sequential promotion is for extraordinary bloodline. When the agent condenses authority (even the dragon must condense authority to be promoted to an angel), it will be interfered by alienation. You cannot drink the magic potion and directly give authority. Faith can speed up the concentration, but if you believe in a god, it is rubbish. Only secret medicine is the right way. It feels a bit like paving the way for future plots.

Ah, this real world has no plot at all. I want to see something happen, something happen. There is no sense of fun at all.