Versatile Mage: I Have a Small World

In the first one or two chapters, the overall pattern is not reflected at all It is clear that from this so-called pig's foot [I can't feel any personality charm], compared with everything Mo Fan experienced in the original work, there is no comparison For Ye Xinxia Said, writing like this is destroying the characters of the original work They are all fifteen or sixteen years old, Everyone in the original work is flesh and blood, but this pig's feet is too stereotyped And with more than 3 [female protagonists], this book really can't even be considered a good novel.

It doesn't matter if the article is cool or not, the main thing is: ★Whether to grab the original two original heroines (Mu Ningxue, Ye Xinxia) ★Whether it is a harem (1-3 people are acceptable, more than one is a breeding pig) ★ IQ is online or not (you can't read the novel without brains) ★ Respect or not respect the original work (the second design can be done but cannot be separated from the original work) ★The best [respect Chinese and reject barbarians] (the West is all barbarians)

The biggest problem of the author is that he has no style and does not create the feeling of a full-time mage.

After reading it for a long time, the novel is relatively plain, but it doesn't matter that most invincible novels have some common mistakes. You really have a lot of typos. If nothing else, is the protagonist Ye Ming or Ye Ming? There is something wrong with your input method, right?

I heard that all beauties are accepted? Do you also accept foreign beauties? For example, are Mochizuki Chidai, Irene, Heidi, Blanche, etc. Also accepted? If I get them all, I will book them all. After all, I am here to read cool articles. As long as they are not too brainless or eunuchs, I will keep chasing them. Come on! 🌹

The author can read some other authors' works, not to plagiarize, but to learn from mature authors' works about the protagonist's behavior towards the world. After all, this is a novice novel, and he is still an emperor. It is best not to write a plot in which the protagonist suffers a great loss. At the same time, the protagonist also has a strong possessive desire, so when writing some plots, in order to avoid being pushed to rewrite, it is recommended to draw on mature opinions when imagining to avoid any surprises caused by novice novels.

You can play whatever you want at home in Shayuan, but the background of the novel is modern society. It is best not to dominate the mountain, just one city. The protagonist has a good relationship, but it is best not to do things that are out of touch with the masses. Even if you save the world, you will eventually become enemies. Dou Mien, isn't Wen Tai Puji the world still dead because of "unfounded" charges? Even if Wen Tai compromised himself (the two views are that Wen Tai was ambitious, so he went The dark plane becomes the Dark King or the Dark King's clone. The other is that Wen Tai sacrifices himself to go to the Dark Plane to fight for the world in order to give humans some trump cards to survive in the subsequent plane war in order to predict the crisis from the Dark Plane. After all, Wen Tai's light is too bright in the intrigues of the Western world and is not tolerated by others. Wen Tai is too strong, so strong that others are afraid, the only holy son, controls the black dragon, and even his own sister wants to kill him. Of course, I'm just giving advice to the author, and the author has to do whatever he wants. It's just some subjective advice given to the author by a reader who only likes to read all French fandoms. It would be better if the author himself has better advice that is more comfortable for him. Come on, the author, rush, rush, rush💪.

In fact, I don't recommend naming a city. Privately occupying such a large land is suspected of treason. I suggest that the city name is better. Although there are so many people in it, even the Mu family does not have such a large private land. After all, they only occupy a small family land in the imperial capital. Private ownership is not good in name. You can refer to the full-time mage. "Yai Zhen, and another monarch (I forgot what they were called, but they are two brothers, a great monarch and an ordinary monarch)", the Dongfang clan, where the protagonist belongs, sacrificed a lot for the coast but gained a lot of marine resources. Shao Zheng said to the protagonist Dongfang Yan, "The Dongfang family has made so many sacrifices, I will let the Dongfang family reduce the tax by 70% (probably, it is an extra special benefit for the Dongfang family anyway)" The protagonist Dongfang Yan reacted and refused the kindness and only took the part that should be taken. . Background (under the leadership of the protagonist, the head of the Dongfang Clan conceals the forbidden curse, the family becomes a clan, and the Dongfang Clan becomes the world's leading super clan) I think the city can be privately owned (it's fair to say), but the capital cannot be completely privately owned, even if the protagonist does things to save the ancient capital, save China, and defeat the Kraken.

Just because Xinxia is acting coquettishly in her arms and chasing books

Author: The harem still has multiple heroines

Come on. Very well written. It would be better if the writing can be improved a bit

I really doubt you can actually write? You can make mistakes in every word you type I read each word and you made so many mistakes I am speechless. As an author who has written novels, I am going crazy reading this.