Gun of Order

I want to change the beginning in the past two days. At the same time, there are some things that need to be dealt with in reality. There may only be one update. I hope everyone can forgive me 🥺

I changed the beginning again, can everyone see how it looks now 🥺

A 100,000-word contract doesn't seem to work either 😭. I may feel sorry for everyone who reads the book, but now I kind of want to sort out the outline and setting, and write a good book again. To be honest, this 100,000-word book is the first one I have ever written. It is actually very disorganized. The outline was just what I wanted to write on the same day, and many settings were temporarily set when I needed them. So sometimes I write very hard to catch up on updates or when I have no inspiration. A book friend said that the writing behind it looks like a running account, which may be the reason. Writing this book is more of an accumulation of experience for me, including the organization of the outline, the setting of the plot, and the establishment of characters. In fact, I feel that my short plot is dry and lacks tension and attraction. This may be the reason why it looks like a running account. I'll try to improve these later. I feel ashamed to say that after reading so many novels, I felt a lack of imagination when I started writing. I would like to apologize once again to the book friends who have read this book and the friends who have made suggestions. During this time, I will reorganize the plot and outline, form new things, and try some internal projection. Finally, thank you all again for your support and love, I will definitely come back!

Don't imitate Cui Zu. First of all, Cui Zu has a certain fan base. Secondly, although I don't like watching mysteries, I have read about twenty or thirty chapters and I can see some problems. First of all, your imitation of mystery at the beginning is too obvious. Secondly, the writing must be detailed and appropriate. The things described in detail must be foreshadowed, otherwise the writing will be meaningless. Too much redundancy will affect the perception. This is not how the writing style is demonstrated. Capable and clear language is the ultimate goal of writing. Also, do not explain the background or setting at the beginning. Briefly describe the characters, time, and place, and jump right into the plot.

Is anyone watching? 🥺 Can anyone give your opinions? 🥺

The title of the book has nothing to do with the introduction, and the writing is incomprehensible. I didn't see who the protagonist was at the beginning, and I didn't find out until Hill was introduced because of a sense of déjà vu. Next time, I can focus on the protagonist first. I once thought that Mark with brown eyes was the protagonist. Moreover, there are too many names, and they are still Western names. The only ones I remember are Mark, Hill, and the only female character. It is recommended to divide it into more paragraphs. Yours is too dense, and the names of people and places are mixed together, making it difficult to distinguish. I came here through Zhihu, otherwise I wouldn't have clicked on this profile. I have only read the first chapter and have no desire to continue reading. It is indeed a bit confusing. But I really like the theme of Western Fantasy, and your writing style is also good. Come on 🙂 I will continue to read on.