My Life with the Attribute of Immortality

It feels a bit confusing when I read it. . It's just that my writing is clearly neat and straight, but it sounds crooked when I read it. I don't know if you are like this, but I am anyway. The plot is very cliche. Several books start like this. First, you are at the bottom of society, then go to a martial arts school, your status rises, and you gradually practice, then you reach the peak of martial arts, encounter an adventure, and start to practice immortality - it is almost the same. I feel that the author must have read a lot of books, otherwise he would not be able to write such a good writing when he first wrote it. It cannot be said that it is very good, but in Xiaobai, it must be above average, but it is too confusing to read. Why don't the author try to settle down?

Is this the first one? Girlfriend and sister, you've already done it. I'm speechless. You have bad views. Goodbye.

If there are any parts that don't look good, please don't write them off. You can spray them here. The author will carefully absorb opinions, improve his skills, and write better stories.

The first part is pretty good, but the last few chapters about the fight over medicine are too ink-stained and not easy to read at all.

It is said that this kind of novels are becoming more and more exaggerated, and a few gangsters are killed at every turn, which is known as decisive killing. It looks like each of these little gangsters is responsible for several lives. The public security is so bad, how can there still be city-states? It's so stitched together. It feels like we're not in troubled times, but in a primitive society in the tribal era.

Thank you readers for your support, and I also have many great collections. I would like to ask you not to keep books, or you will die! Woohoo, please read the latest chapter, just stay for two minutes and turn to the reading ranking! The author guarantees that the plot will become more and more exciting! As long as the elder dares to chase, the younger sister will dare to update!

The setting is modeled after Dayu's book, but the author's choice of words and sentences make it read strangely in many places.

The novel contains ten chapters. It is a good book that can make the main character unique. I hope the author can persevere. Come on, author 🤭👍

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Pretending to be weird? Keep the protagonist alive?

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At first I didn't understand what immortality was, and I just wanted to ascend to immortality 🙂

Is it true that the time traveler version cannot be updated now? In the past, when I traveled to another world, I was always the prodigal prince Long Aotian. Now, if I don't dress as a beggar, a poor slave and settle down, I won't start the game, right...?

In the front, he was still stubborn, but in the back, he started to show off again when he became a disciple. Does anyone still read pretentious articles nowadays? Isn't the author embarrassed?

There are more than 100 martial arts schools in the whole town, more than 30 authentic ones, and more than a dozen of them charge one car per month. Why do you want to go to one of them? Don't accept this or that. What's the difference between kicking and boxing? Isn't it up to people to use it? You have to practice boxing!

Regarding the description of women, the author should copy the assignments from other books. You can't keep doing this. (Little fool, jumping on the spot and stomping his feet) I read it last night when I was at work. There were so many chapters with just a few words in a row. It was so silly and awkward. There were so many innocent and quirky descriptions of young girls. Is it so difficult to copy homework and steal supporting characters? This is not plagiarism. Any similarity is purely coincidental.

There's nothing wrong with the plot, but the writing technique is very novice, and the writing is a bit messy, but it's just food.

Author, your luck is not worth killing someone to get it. In my opinion, disaster is the problem faced by the protagonist. Solving the problem will gain disaster points. You can write about various problems and various methods to solve them. Can handle a variety of unconventional problems and operations.

The text is a bit convoluted, and it's a bit awkward to read.

Too emotional.

After reading a few chapters, I feel that the main character's eye skills should be in ancient Chinese or in the casino. The writing is too convoluted and I can't get hooked.

He's really rubbish. Isn't it illegal to kill people?

Is the author still there?😆

The best thing about calamity is not to fall down twice in the same place. The writing is so good that it should be a group portrait. The characters in The Romance of the Three Kingdoms all have their own characteristics and flavor.

I felt a sense of déjà vu after reading the first chapter. I had read a book before, which was similar to this one, except that it was a luck-taking point. The starting point was basically the same, with gangsters collecting protection fees, then killing chickens to scare monkeys, and then the protagonist kept quiet and relied on the luck-taking points to level up.