Reborn as a Monster, I Become a Totem in Versatile Mage

， ， ， However Apas did not appear until it was released, and the protagonist turned into a human being. It can be said that both advantages are gone. At least I lost the desire to continue reading after I saw the character going to Bo City. I flipped through the table of contents and left. I read the author's explanation and said that the main character takes form in order to get close to human beings and gain faith. But if he doesn't take form, wouldn't he gain faith? Then why did Xuan She believe in it? Risk factors The key is to see how the author writes. There are so many full-time fans. To be honest, your writing is not very good, but they all write about humans, and you write about beasts. This is the most attractive thing about you. Even if some of your chapters are relatively poisonous, people will tolerate them because there is no substitute. But if you switch to writing about human figures, you are just like other authors. Then why don't readers read novels with better writing or plots? Of course, it's not completely non-transformation. After all, are there Apas and Xiaobai? It just shouldn't be used as a regular form, or should not appear in front of humans in human form. When dealing with humans (including Mo Fan, Tang Yue, etc.), The animal form should be used. At most only a very few high-level officials know the protagonist's human form. Also, Apas hurry up and go online! These are some of my opinions, that's all for now. Let's take a step forward. When Apas and the protagonist meet, I may come back.

I would like to make a suggestion: stop talking to the system, it is really making a show, and let it just be a tool in silence.

It's too shameful to call Boss Zhankong a shame. It's really not worth mentioning. The Totem Beast and the Kunkun Beast are pretty much the same.

After reading Chapter 12, I got poisoned and died. Author, do you know that you bargained with the system, the system also played tricks on you, you still used the instant skills given by the system, and the system is personified. These four points are absolutely poisonous points? If you change the function of talking to the system, it won't appear so poisonous... You have only traveled through time for three or five days. Were you mute in your previous life? Haven't you spoken? It's only been three to five days since I've communicated with anyone, and I've been chatting endlessly with the system? There are too many problems with your book. Since you have traveled to the world of all laws, it means that the system is of high quality. You have been chatting with the host all the time. This is a very unqualified thing. And you are just talking, but you are also joking with the host? Readers will feel that this time traveler is just a plaything, being constantly played with by the high-level system, and various skills have no learning process by themselves. In the magic system, they even directly tell the system to run automatically. As long as you let the system input various knowledge and experience for him, as long as you let him indirectly gain power that does not belong to him, it is better than directly using the system! Also, the most taboo thing about system-type articles is that the system does not explain everything about the skills clearly, leaving the host to guess how to use it. The host will only tell him how much it cost you after using it. When I saw this, I had a question mark in my head? ? ? Is there any serious problem with your system? ? ? System, brother! ? As a digital thing, the most important thing is to be accurate, right? ! What are you doing? ! For a skill as big as the Law, Heaven, Elephant and Earth, it's okay if it doesn't impart knowledge and experience, and it doesn't even give an accurate display of its consumption? One moment it's five hundred, one moment it's fifty. What do you want to do? Author, did you bring it into the system yourself? If you want to play with the protagonist in your novel, please don't post it. It's okay for you to entertain yourself on the computer. You post it for others to see. Which reader do you think can accept that the protagonist you introduce is a clown and has been manipulated and toyed by the system? ? ? Don't say that it will be better if you stick to reading later. Please🙏🏻Please🙏🏻We are just a bunch of bad readers of novels. Do you think any of us will take the time to read your works with concentration? You are not Yu Hua. You are not writing "Alive". When we read "Alive", we will be so disgusted that we can't eat. But because it is a school requirement, we hold back our nausea and read on. You, which school requires your book? Why should we endure the nausea and look down? Even if you write a riot of flowers and golden lotuses in the back, as long as you poison people to death in the front, how many people do you think will continue to read it? Let me remind you again that the system you are writing is anthropomorphic. It does not look like a system, but like a person with its own consciousness. In some novels, the system is anthropomorphic because people will fall in love with the system in the future, and their systems will later transform into real people, and they explain at the beginning that the system will become a real person. This way of writing is not a poisonous point, but a selling point. Your system is obviously a system, not a digital life. You have given it so much humanity, which is the biggest poisonous point. In addition, a system without human nature is just a program that will not respond to the protagonist's questions. This kind of system tells the truth, lays out all the stakes and displays it on the screen. It has no sound and cannot speak. This way, everything is explained clearly. The protagonist will not have any doubts. If there is even a trace of doubt, the system is deemed to be useless and unqualified. Unlike your system, it is hidden and hidden from the host, and the host will joke when it has questions. Your system should not directly put power on the protagonist from the beginning. It is best to input a memory into the host's head. The memory contains the process of learning magical powers, the experience of using magical powers and the cost of using magical powers. The same is true for magic. He should be allowed to learn meditation and Xingzi control to release magic through memory. What you are writing now is to directly let him use magic as he says. The feeling of unreality is too strong. I don't know what mentality you have to write such a thing with the same game skills. Even the people who write game fan fiction know that skills need to be learned. If you don't learn, just starting it is a super invincible and poisonous point. The rest of the story is just fine, not particularly vicious. Just write less words from the protagonist. No one will like the protagonist being an unreliable chatterbox. Or it's okay to talk too much. Let him talk when he is in contact with people. Don't talk to the system all the time now. It's best to make the system not make any sound. You can turn the system into a screen and turn the sound into text on the screen so that the protagonist cannot talk to the system. In this way, the poisonous point is almost gone. Okay, I hope you write better and better. Before you put it on the shelf, I will read it again to see if you have changed it. Now I am really poisoned, so I will withdraw it. See you in the future.

The system is too jumpy, or maybe the author is too excited?

A little weak, it feels almost like playing basketball after absorbing Pangu essence and blood

If you don't change or delete your previous dialogue with the system, it will be so poisonous that it will be difficult for people to resist you until you really put it on the shelves.

Author, are you not good enough? Updates are so slow . You don't want to fall into a ditch while walking at night!

Ahem, many readers are not satisfied with my talkative system. Don't worry, I will relegate it to the sidelines when new members are added to the main character group later (;｀O´)o I will also make slight changes to the previous ones. And everyone can rest assured that every step the protagonist wants to take is made by himself and will not be led by the system.

Author, could you please stop making the protagonist look like a fool, unable to think for himself? I'm a little speechless