Prehistoric: Starting from the Examination of Jie Jiao Disciples

This is what the prehistoric times should be, those traditional prehistoric gods are too petty 👍👍👍

Looking at the introduction, it's just messing around! Returning master and apprentice, father and son, and enemy into one, how can you write a protagonist like this? Just be the only one in the world, detach yourself! With constant cutting and chaos, why don't you, an outsider, get involved in other people's affairs? Isn't it good to write the prehistoric essay itself?

Brothers, don't keep studying. Your grades are too bad. Just do it.

It feels like it just relies on a rough background without any planning or imagination. After watching it for a long time, I didn't find any whimsical ideas of the protagonist's time traveler.

The beginning is a big scene, completely different from ordinary prehistoric novels! ! Say it three times, you can fall into the trap, you can fall into the trap, you can fall into the trap!

Multiple time and space is impossible to exist in the prehistoric times. Daluo Jinxian has already collected time, space, past, future, past and present life, destiny and time into multi-dimensional time and space, not to mention Hunyuan Jinxian (quasi-sage) and Hunyuan Daluo Jinxian (sage), and the saints also have Hunyuan Taiji Luo Jinxian (Tiandao realm), Hunyuan Wuji Luo Jinxian (chaos realm/the top ten lowest chaos gods and demons among the three thousand chaos gods and demons in the past) He is an ancient god in the Chaos Realm, and the Great God Pangu is half-step in the Great Dao Realm), and the Great Dao Realm (referred to as the Great Dao Realm, Pangu fell after proving the Great Dao). In fact, many prehistoric settings say that it is the most difficult to prove the Dao with force. It is not that it is difficult to prove the Hunyuan Daluo Golden Immortal. It is just misunderstood. The Great God Pangu proves the Great Dao. The Hunyuan Daluo Golden Immortal (sage) is about the same as the Dao Realm as an ant is compared to the universe. So the author, you, a diverse prehistoric person, It is simply impossible. There cannot be a real prehistoric world with multiple prehistoric times. Everything has been conquered by the great road. Daluo Jinxian is comparable to the powerful multiverse level in the Marvel universe. Think about the terrifying existences in the great road realm, not to mention the existence at the end of the road. The setting of Da Luo in the mythological system is simply exaggerated. He is an existence at the end of the road. If you think about his power, he will always be billions of times more powerful than you.) It is simply impossible to play with diversity among these big guys. That is, in the scientific world system, strength cannot be used to prove Da Luo Daoguo (multiverse), so there is the saying of differentiation and diversification. Diversity is practiced in the Chinese Taoist fantasy system of cultivating immortals. Author, you are thinking too much.

I didn't find it interesting. The main thing is that the most important thing about any story is always the story. The background is written at the beginning, and then the main character's identity is revealed. Then – it just felt very boring. At least after one or two chapters, I couldn't read it at all.

Does the protagonist just accept disciples casually? As a second-generation disciple, the disciple he accepted was naturally a third-generation disciple. So casual?

The introduction has been revised and polished, and the title of the book has been refined to make it better on several levels.

It is recommended to speed up the assessment and fast forward to the story after returning to the prehistoric times. You have written more than 90,000 words, but you still don't know the theme. You wrote about prehistoric times, not assessment, and now it has caused a problem, poor data! If you write about Prehistoric Times, you can write stories other than Prehistoric Times, but you can't keep writing according to the assessment! If you keep writing, the data will get worse and worse! Author, speed up!

It's 50 chapters, and the entrance exam is less than halfway through.

It's Jiejiao again. Nine out of ten books are from Jiejiao. People who are not from Jiejiao also sit with their buttocks crooked. People in other religions lick Jiejiao.

The Zhou Dynasty was the dog of the Chan religion and was not liked by the ancestral land of the human race. Then whose dog was the Shang Dynasty? The ancestral land of the human race liked it? Then King Wen Ji Changwu and King Ji Fa were not worthy of joining the ancestral land of the human race. The orthodoxy of the human race has become the dog of the Chan Cult. Your ancestral land of the human race is just a mere watcher. You have no choice but no strength? Then you don't deserve to be treated like a dog by outsiders. What's the difference between being a dog of the Chan Cult and being a dog of the Jie Cult? How could the Shang Dynasty be destroyed when it was so popular among the people? How could the ancestral land of the human race and the Jie Jiao see the Shang Dynasty be destroyed? Did Chan teach help a dog to take over? If the eldest brother doesn't laugh at the second brother, you can write that the Zhou Dynasty was the dog of the Chanjiao, but the Shang Dynasty was no better and was also the dog of the Jiejiao? Why bother talking about nonsense that is not liked by the ancestral land of the human race. If the human race has no strength, then it can only be at the mercy of others. Then there is nothing special about being a dog in the Zhou Dynasty. If the human race has strength, then wouldn't it be a shame for those human race's great supernatural powers to treat the majestic human race's orthodox dynasty as dogs to outsiders?

How should I put it, the writing is dry, too dry, and the story is not interesting, but the setting is good.

Fantasy literature, especially immortality literature that is close to the ancient times. You use too many vernacular words, which makes people feel a little low and affects the reading experience. You can write interesting stories, but don't write like Long Aotian, who looks like a novice. That kind of writing is not suitable for prehistoric times.

It's not that the problem you wrote is too big, let alone other things. You always use things to deliberately push the protagonist away and force him to do this and that. Everyone is plotting against him. You, the protagonist, are completely a clown, jumping around. This person will fiddle with you, and that person will kick you. Your character has no ambition at all, and is worse than a stupid young man. Even if he doesn't rely on his brains, he still has a reckless recklessness. The protagonist you created simply has no own thoughts or practice at all. He is just like a ball being thrown here and there. What about the protagonist's methods? What about talent? What about xinxing? Character? What about power? What about the background? None of it is useful! Can't you be reckless? Who is plotting against you? Can't you just kill him? If you don't want to take care of it, can't you just do nothing? I've read about thirty chapters, all of which were led by others. Would anyone like this useless protagonist? Is this the way a disciple of the dignified Jie Jiao teaches his character? Why does Yin Yang Boy fall in love with you? Why does the turtle mother like you? Qualifications? Su Hui? What a joke! As stupid as a pig, you won't be able to become an immortal in your next life!

Yang Jian's disciples as Master Yuding are all the third generation disciples of Chanjiao? Are you a second-generation disciple?

The protagonist is in such a bad state of mind, and the seemingly grand background and settings look as bland as water. The author can look at the big Luo Liushen Gongbao,

The resume is too big, but the writing and plot are not at this level. First, I think small incisions are the most important. Like Zhutianliu, we basically start with small incisions, like Zhutian projection. The second is to write about the concept of diversity. To write it well requires strong writing skills from the author. The background must be written concisely and comprehensively, etc. I feel that the author really wants to write that kind of scene, but it always feels very strange.