Mobile City: A Mobile Village from the Start

I've probably finished reading the latest chapter, and I'd like to comment on it. First: The writing is not good, the protagonist shouts and screams, and the emotions of the people around him fluctuate violently. It's written like a white text. The author's name is also called Bookworm. It only makes sense that no one has read it. Second: The main setting is stitched. Although the mobile city idea is new, the biological mecha that comes with it, the upgrade paths of the mobile city, the science fiction background and national setting of the radiation world. They are all the same level settings for fantasy novels. At first glance, I didn't bother to think carefully about the settings. With this imagination, when writing about the science fiction genre, I can only say don't waste the main body of the mobile city. It can be completely matched with some more interesting background settings and nested into the main world. For example, steam, diesel, whale oil punk. Third: The entire novel is driven by the dialogue between the protagonist and the supporting characters. The description of the surrounding environment and characters are also written in a novice way. It makes people unable to feel the style and world view of apocalyptic radiation. Finally, the arrangement of the plot is even more unmotivating and unattractive. It feels like reading a novel from five to ten years ago. In this day and age, there are all kinds of novel conventions. If you want to write, you should write something new, strange, strange, and something that people have never seen before. If you can revise the outline of your book before it is put on the shelves, and do a good basic setting, I think there will still be people reading it, otherwise the pace of reading will probably be very high.

I just read Chapter 8, and the setting at the beginning is a mess. How did a family of ordinary people in the wilderness save such a rare mobile village? From the moment they were hunted down at the beginning, they knew how valuable this car was. It was worth 1 million. In a world where the per capita monthly salary is 10 yuan, there is still a price without market, but it is set to be passed down from generations of ordinary people. I just want to ask the protagonist how generations of ordinary people in the family can save such valuable items.

Prices have plummeted. It's ridiculous to charge 1,000 dragon coins to move the mobile village for one hour, and it can only go 10 kilometers. What are you thinking? With such outrageous pricing, how did they live in the past?

Is it okay to let my sister-in-law be reincarnated like a hungry ghost? How did you manage it before? Is it interesting to add drama to yourself every day? It's a miracle that this style can become a god

I feel that such high-tech things as Mobile City have come out, and they still use such primitive weapons, I feel very low-key, and it feels like a cheap game world. I suggest you take it as a reference, starting with Mechanical Hunter! At least, let's do something high-end and give it a cool name!

? ? ? Animals also have inner stories? What did you write? So speechless

The mobile village travels at 10 kilometers per hour, which is about 2.8 Meters per second. Can't even catch up with a 3-meter-tall mutant wolf?

Is it embarrassing to have too many mental activities? ? ? I wrote hundreds of words with both hands. There were too many mental activities and I still had time to think when I was fighting. It's amazing. It's not easy to survive dozens of chapters.

The last one I wanted to keep was broken after a few months. This one will last for half a year.

Update soon! ! ! Which of the two do you look down on? ! Carefully send you some souvenirs that can set off the small villa as fireworks🎆😈👻😈👻😈👻😈👻😈👻😈👻