Ninth Successor

I have read a chapter and a half, and the writing is above passing standards. I can see that the author's essay writing is quite good. Internet articles pay attention to the three golden chapters, and the first chapter is especially critical. The first chapter of this book is not attractive enough, and some of the content is redundant, such as the specific content of chatting with female netizens.

The writing is good, and the descriptions are not bad, but some places are a little awkward, and there are a lot of elements of Internet memes... It's a bit unnatural. It's good once in a while, but too much can be counterproductive, at least I think so. The setting is ordinary, there are no eye-catching features, and the pace is slow. Since there will be a breakup at the beginning, it is better not to write it. It can be set as the past experience of the characters, which can not only advance the story's pace but also enrich the characters. Also, I always feel that the Emperor... Lacks a bit of strength and is still a dominant figure. Of course, this is just my feeling. The most important thing is the rhythm. I don't even feel the need to appear in the first chapter... In the second chapter, it is recommended that the setting be written not in the main text, or moved later. After the first three chapters, it is about lost love traveling through time and gaining inheritance... There is no suspense, no conflict, which is too fatal for fantasy novels.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

If you were as watery as Lang Jun, hum~

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~